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-Momo [[User:Sumomox4nouchi|Sumomox4nouchi]] ([[User talk:Sumomox4nouchi|talk]]) 01:10, 8 February 2019 (UTC)sumomox4nouchi |
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== Peer Review == |
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Alicia's Peer Review |
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The language overall is kept pretty neutral and doesn't orient the reader's perspective with persuasive language. The sources all seem to be reliable sources. Great use of statistics that are very informative and relevant. |
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'''Area 1: Education in Guatemala |
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Perhaps in the last sentence of the first paragraph, there can be some elaboration on the negative impacts that it has on student performance or specific studies that have statistics. The language barrier section with the teachers and students may not belong in the same section as the sentences that describe the Guatemalan schools' electricity or lack of computers. |
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'''Area II: Economy of Guatemala |
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'surprisingly robust' may be too descriptive or holds connotations about Guatemala |
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The statistic about those with no electrical grid connection in the first sentence flows well with the next sentence about extending national grids to rural customers. |
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Revision as of 00:46, 3 April 2019
Hello there, I see you have put a lot of work into finding articles for this assignment. You have many selections which is great, but let me know which ones you'd like to pursue for this course. I'm curious about the tone you may have detected in your article for evaluation. Can you talk about that a bit? Keep up the great work!
-Momo Sumomox4nouchi (talk) 01:10, 8 February 2019 (UTC)sumomox4nouchi
Peer Review
Alicia's Peer Review
The language overall is kept pretty neutral and doesn't orient the reader's perspective with persuasive language. The sources all seem to be reliable sources. Great use of statistics that are very informative and relevant.
Area 1: Education in Guatemala Perhaps in the last sentence of the first paragraph, there can be some elaboration on the negative impacts that it has on student performance or specific studies that have statistics. The language barrier section with the teachers and students may not belong in the same section as the sentences that describe the Guatemalan schools' electricity or lack of computers.
Area II: Economy of Guatemala 'surprisingly robust' may be too descriptive or holds connotations about Guatemala
Sector: Off the Grid
The statistic about those with no electrical grid connection in the first sentence flows well with the next sentence about extending national grids to rural customers.