Talk:Loham

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 13:28, 1 March 2016 (UTC)

I'll have this to you either tonight or tomorrow JAGUAR  13:28, 1 March 2016 (UTC)

Initial comments

• "a 2015 Indian Malayalam thriller film" - optional, but would you prefer to write this as Malayalam-language? It's just that I've seen it in other GAs

 Done

• "C. Rajamani composed the soundtrack and film score respectively" - comma needed in between "score" and "respectively"

 Done

• "setting a record in 2015 for highest opening day gross for a Malayalam film" - a "the" is needed between "for" and "highest"

 Done

• "an Indian Revenue Service (IRS) officer" - 'IRS' isn't mentioned again in the body, so it's safe to lose it here

 Done

• "Raju identifies himself as a RAW agent" - what does RAW stand for?

 Done

• "at the Calicut International Airport, Kozhikode" - might sound better as at the Calicut International Airport in Kozhikode

 Done

• "The first poster showed an ensemble cast with Mohanlal in the center" - centre (Indian English)

 Done

• "Ajmal's character's looks were modelled after popular young politicians in the country" - delink this

 Done

• I think that the third paragraph in the Release section could be merged with the second, to improve prose flow

 Done

• No dead links

Looks very good! I couldn't find much wrong with it. Once all of the minor prose issues are addressed then this should be good to go. JAGUAR  16:37, 2 March 2016 (UTC)

Wow. That really helped. Thanks for your quick response. I have corrected all the addressd issues. And thanks to all the editors who worked to make this a GA. --Charles Turing (talk) 16:58, 2 March 2016 (UTC)

Thanks. This looks like it's good to go. JAGUAR  20:40, 2 March 2016 (UTC)