Talk:Climate change in Mexico

This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 14 January 2020 and 30 April 2020. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Jkwasser, Brmbuck, Eelasher (article contribs). Peer reviewers: Bbakkal, Rnakovsk, Ikigamwa, Evanalst93, Anmramir, I Have No Authority.

Suggestions for the article

I think that the article and the topic are fruitful because they tell stories about current migration from Middle and South America to North America that are related with the impact of Climate Change and human dimensions of it. I think that many indigenous people have been trying to survive from the impacts in South and Middle America. Nevertheless, I consider that the lead section of the article needs classifications. Also, some topics of the article need to be well outlined and supported by more data. I edited some misused words in the article. bbakkal 23:22, 26 February 2020 (UTC) — Preceding unsigned comment added by Bbakkal (talk • contribs)

I went through and did some small grammar and sentence structure edits. I also had a thought for the page, does it make sense to merge some of the topics in the Ecological Response? Or maybe create a section on Animals specifically? Just a thought! Overall, it is a very well written entry, neutral tone. Will you be including more citations or actually putting citations in where the author's name is present throughout the text? I also included a larger page title just to make things more clear and also had a few areas where I asked about a citation for the information. Are there indigenous responses to climate change? Could Traditional ecological knowledge be included on this page?Evanalst93 (talk) 21:48, 1 March 2020 (UTC) Evanalst93

The content of this paper is well balanced, I think that it has a good tone the is neutral and doesn’t sway too much to convince the reader about climate change in Mexico. Finally, I think that it is well referenced which makes it more reliable. I think this article could be improved by changing the organization a bit which I will make some changes on just as a suggestion. I think that Maize and Coffee even though they are bigger topics could do well as subtopics of Climate change and Agriculture because they fall under that category. I think moving them under there could improve the flow of the article. Like the subcategories under the ecological responses to climate change section. Ikigamwa (talk) 00:17, 3 March 2020 (UTC)

I like that you touch on a wide variety of subjects in your introductory paragraph. This provides the reader with a good idea of what topics you will be addressing throughout the article. However, I think you could provide a little more information in the introduction. For example, I think it would be beneficial to add a sentence that elaborates on why Mexico is considered a leader in climate adaptation and mitigation. As I continued reading, I noticed you did not elaborate on this later in the article. This is absolutely a topic you should explore further.

I think the headings throughout the article could be organized in a more logical way. I made some changes to the headings as an example of how you can better clarify the main topics of your article and how they relate to one another. First, I made “Climate Projections” and “Climate Change and Agriculture” mains headings. I classified the information that was originally under “Climate Change and Agricultural” a new section named “General Impacts.” Next, I made “Climate Change and Food, Economic Security” a subheading under “Climate Change and Agriculture” and renamed the section “Economic Insecurity” to avoid redundancy. Additionally, I made a new subheading under “Climate Change and Food” called “Impacts on Specific Exports/Foods.” You may find that one of those words is a better descriptor for the section than the other. I would not recommend keeping both long term. I moved “Maize” and “Coffee” under this section as secondary subheadings. I think these changes make the article feel more cohesive. Lastly, I created an entirely new heading entitled “Global Impacts” to house the information about the effect Mexico’s climate has had on global agricultural trade. This information was originally included under “Economic Insecurity.” Wikipedia encourages writers to create headings as often as possible so readers can more quickly find the information they are searching for. Given this, this information seemed different enough to warrant the creation of a new section. Now both “Global Impacts” and “Economic Security” have a lot more room for additional information. This should be beneficial as both these topics still seem to be quite broad and could encapsulate a lot of interesting information. Currently, I think the first sentences of these sections generally summarize what is to come, but the summary is too general. These topics sentences should provide more of a detailed roadmap for the paragraph/section so the reader can better predict what information will be presented to them. For example, I changed the first sentence under “Economic Security” from “Many people depend on agriculture for employment” to “Climate change has caused many people in Mexico who depend on agriculture for employment to experience economic insecurity.” I made some grammatical changes to the “Maize” section to ensure sentences followed parallel structure. I like that you have described the impacts climate change has on specific foods, like coffee and maize. If you are looking for a place to add more information, I think this would be the perfect spot for it. Finally, I similarly organized some of the headings under the section “Ecological Responses to Climate Change.” I made a new subheading entitled “Impacts on Animals” and created secondary subheadings for “Butterflies,” “Mexican Bats,” “Small Mammals in Tropical Ecosystems,” and “Birds” underneath. I Have No Authority (talk) 01:22, 3 March 2020 (UTC)