Talk:22Kill

This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 22 January 2020 and 29 April 2020. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Bribrisweet (article contribs). Peer reviewers: Natasha.Holdt, AAnonymous Bear, Rpaylor, 23gobears, Ziyuanying, Jerrysong1324.

Lengthening Article

Article seems well documented with neutral tone. Reads like an encyclopedia. Would recommend lengthening this stub to discuss more about the organization including any major successes the organization may have had as well as if/where there are physical locations. Jerrysong1324 (talk) 04:12, 15 March 2020 (UTC)

Added context

This article does a great job laying out information in a non-biased tone, but many details have been left out in summarizing information. Things like what specifically inspired the founders to start the non-profit, who was involved, the progression and statistics of the social media movement, and impacts that the movement made would be great additions. Rpaylor (talk) 17:58, 17 March 2020 (UTC)

Peer Review

Article flows well and presents a neutral point of view. Top section gives a short and concise summary of what the organization/movement is. This is a good start, and as you progress to adding more information as well as more sections, it would be great to provide the key stakeholders (i.e. the founders of the organization, key celebrities who have taken the movement to the next level, etc.). The top section of the article could perhaps provide more statistics and numbers on the effect of the organization/movement, maybe with one of the partnerships that they have. 23gobears (talk) 16:32, 17 March 2020 (UTC)

Peer Evaluation

Peer evaluation directed at the MoveMe group working on this article: I think the introductory sentence of the article is actually very comprehensive. It touches on the main point of what the organization is and what it sets out to accomplish. However, I think there’s potential to edit the rest of the introduction in a way that expands the overall article. There are references made to Carry That Load, 22 Pushup Challenge, and the Honor Rings program. I feel like it might be beneficial to split these different campaigns or programs into their own sections in the article. This would provide an opportunity to provide more information and context for not only these programs, but 22Kill overall.

Since the group’s research and topic had a focus on the 22 Pushup Challenge, there is likely a lot of information that can be added about the challenge and its social media presence. The history section already mentions the hashtag going viral so it might be easier to create a flow from the history section to a new section about the challenge. Additionally, adding any research at all about these programs will help the fact that the article seems to be lacking in its cited sources.

I’m not sure if there’s a lot of available information on this, but it might help the overall continuity of the article if there’s a section discussing the effect of the organization. Evaluating the impact can be done in an unbiased manner by focusing more on the quantitative results.

The current article seems to be neutral, not arguing a particular opinion or bias. However, this is likely due to the lack of information written. As long as the neutral point of view is consistent when more information is added, the article will be really great! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Natasha.Holdt (talk • contribs) 02:11, 18 March 2020 (UTC)