Wikipedia:Cleanup

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Please report messy articles below, explaining what needs to be cleaned up (e.g., grammar, formatting, order, or confusion). Any user can fix the articles, too. Please remove the entry from this page and cleanup tags from the page afterwards.

Feel free to make use of the Wikipedia: Cleanup resources.

Older cleanup: Category: Cleanup by month. Pages are archived by month, but are still in need of cleanup or de-listing if they have been polished.

Whether or not you think you've finished, you missed a spot!

Also remember that you can submit an article in need of cleanup to the Cleanup Taskforce (which is always looking for members).

For more detailed information about this page, see Wikipedia: Cleanup process.

If you are adding the {{cleanup}} tag to an article instead of this page, please explain what needs cleaning up on the talk page. Problems that are obvious to you may not be obvious to other editors. Tags which are unexplained are subject to removal.

Just to let everyone know, as of 08:31, 18 October 2006 (UTC), 18,794 articles were tagged for cleanup, or 1.31% of the English Wikipedia's articles. Most of these articles can be found under Category:Cleanup by month and are not listed below. Anything you can do to help clear the backlog would be greatly appreciated.

December 2006

December 21, 2006

• Tti, inc has some pov/advertorial issues, and could do with a rewrite. Aecis ^{Dancing to electro-pop like a robot from 1984.} 19:09, 21 December 2006 (UTC)
• Gregg Underheim has been written by the subject. Needs a pov check. Aecis ^{Dancing to electro-pop like a robot from 1984.} 00:43, 21 December 2006 (UTC)
• Hyperdispensationalism - This article on a Christian doctrine has recently had a lengthy correction posted as a personal note rather than a proper edit. --Yggdrasil 00:14, 21 December 2006 (UTC)
• Minnesota Vikings - The "2006" section contains numerous stylistic errors and grade-school level English. --Action Jackson IV 09:45, 21 December 2006 (UTC)

December 20, 2006

• Celice - This Fire Emblem character doesn't need to be Wikified, cause it fits under all the requirements, but does need a fixup in format.OBEY STARMAN 18:35, 20 December 2006 (UTC)

December 19, 2006

• Secular-progressives - This article needs some independent (meaning non-Bill O'Reilly) sourcing (if it's even out there...) LAATi88 16:21, 19 December 2006 (UTC)

December 18, 2006

• Empress Dowager Cixi - This article is far too long and is in desperate need of clean-up. It is image-heavy, full of anecdotes and unnecessary minutiae.--Niohe 20:04, 18 December 2006 (UTC)

December 17, 2006

• List of Half-Life mods - The article was recently AFD'ed, DRV'ed, and AFD'ed again with a keep consensus, on the condition that the article is improved to be more notable, and less of a gratuitous list.

December 16, 2006

• Celadon (color) - Needs history on Western use, a better hex color, and alternate meanings removed. Phil.andy.graves 05:07, 16 December 2006 (UTC)
• Janitor (Scrubs) - Two sections with redundant information in the "Profile" and "Career" sections. --DavidFuzznut 09:17, 16 December 2006 (UTC)
  • I've taken a stab at this.. see how it is now. Trey314159 16:50, 17 December 2006 (UTC)
    • Wow! This needs some major work by someone who watches this show...I couldn't do much more than spelling and grammar errors MacDude415 20:00, 17 December 2006 (UTC)
• Angus MacAskill - This article is a total mess. It's not a profile of his life, it's an extended collection of stories copied and pasted directly from this website [1]
• Kevin Nadal - Has probably been written by the subject. He passes WP:BIO, but a review of the article would be very welcome. Aecis ^{Dancing to electro-pop like a robot from 1984.} 23:34, 16 December 2006 (UTC)

December 15, 2006

• Richmond High School (Richmond, Indiana) - Alumni listed are not graduates of school; factual cleanup needed.
• Spread of printing - Newish article with long list of cities taken from the German "Meyers Lexicon" of 1892. List for "Germany" therefore has strong POV issues (includes Prague, "Breslau" etc. Budapest is called "Ofen" etc. Creator of article has declined to do anything about it. Needs spelling of names anglicised, links created & some headings adjusted to NPOV Johnbod 16:12, 15 December 2006 (UTC)

December 13, 2006

• Eromanga - Disambig page gone bad! The article covers multiple subjects - ranging from a town in Queensland to Japanese erotic comics. The subjects need to be split up. QazPlm 09:52, 14 December 2006 (UTC)

• The article about Ted, the United Airlines subsidiary, has been vandalized. Please fix it.

• Rodney King - The section entitled 'confrontation' contains incorrect facts (arms broken) and seems fairly biased against Rodney King.

• Texas United States House elections, 2006 - This article needs to be brought up to date. --Xerxes855 05:27, 13 December 2006 (UTC)

• Seth Swirsky has been edited by the subject. This has led to some pov issues. The article has been cleaned up, but review by an outsider would be welcome. Aecis ^{Dancing to electro-pop like a robot from 1984.} 00:10, 13 December 2006 (UTC)

• History of the Jews in France The article is badly written and obviously biased, some of the dates are incorrect and there are no citations or sources listed. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 82.152.218.116 (talk • contribs)

• Radu Duda, Prince of Hohenzollern-Veringen. I have started cleanup but could do with some help and advice. The article does not respect Wikipedia guidelines on Biographies of Living People, neither does it read like an Encyclopedia entry: it is more like an attempt to list all the possible and imaginable bad things ever written about the subject, who is a public figure. It expands on many minute details about Radu Hohenzollern that are useless and POV, it needs balancing. I started cleanup of the article before tagging it, as the more I advance in the cleanup, the more I saw that the article needs this process. I also see that Stefanp and some of his sockpuppets such as Carbunar,John Mathis, MihutM have been editing it, so a cleanup is certainly in order. Furthermore, the article has too many references, it litters the text, very many of them in Romanian with no translation, some of them quoting obscure little publications, (whether they are reputable or not is hard to assess), and uses as references unknown people as great experts on the subject. Stefanp and his sockpuppets have also edited King Michael of Romania's page in a similar way. The arguments on the Talk pages of both articles are illustrations of what I am writing here.Marina C (2) 13:30, 13 December 2006 (UTC)
• Leg - Messed up and it doesn't really make sense. It's badly written and contains no external links or sources.
• FullArmour Studios - Need's wikifying, citations, EVERYTHING. Don't know if it's notable or not, but it looks like a new article...--JudahBlaze 23:10, 13 December 2006 (UTC)
  • Update: It's since been deleted and salted. Wintermut3 07:05, 16 December 2006 (UTC)

December 12, 2006

• Wetlands - First paragraph is on edit page, but doesn't show up in entry.
• Meiosis (figure of speech) - No sources, poorly written, examples and then an Examples section. Goyston 14:50, 12 December 2006 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Kofi_Annan

December 11, 2006

• Abd al Hamid Ben Badis - This article is completely messed up, compared to the French and Arabic version of the article. --Escondites 05:29, 11 December 2006 (UTC)
• Alan Walker (musicologist) - This is a well sourced article that could use some cosmetic formatting improvements. It is currently rated as a 'B' held back from 'GA' only by formatting. Please assist. Alan.ca 10:29, 11 December 2006 (UTC)
• AOL TV - Promotional, little to no information. - Mike Rosoft 18:17, 11 December 2006 (UTC)
• Jews for Jesus - This article has undergone so many edit wars that it has become a disorienting patchwork. Ancillary sections such as "Litgation" take upwards of 1/4th of the article, and the citation section involves lengthy block quotes that are confusing at best. Djma12 03:06, 12 December 2006 (UTC)

December 10, 2006

• Roy Ascott - (Self-)promotion. - Mike Rosoft 22:08, 10 December 2006 (UTC)

December 9, 2006

• David Ritch seems to have been gleaned from a Resume and needs to be un-verbose-ified and tidied. I have taken a first swipe. I will also put up a wikify tag. Shagmaestro 13:14, 9 December 2006 (UTC)
• AMC and Jeep transmissions - Needs heavy wikifying and a major cleanup. --ApolloBoy 00:57, 11 December 2006 (UTC)

December 8, 2006

• Elvis Presley: The Final Years - text needs rewording
• Ghoti Media - may not satisfy WP:NOTABLE
• Politics of Vietnam - improper formatting, repetitive, incomplete.
• Big Brothers Big Sisters of America - improper formatting, incomplete, no citations.
• Safety climate - created by WP:AFC request; don't have time to fix it
• Peter Wiggin - poor grammar; needs rewording
• Dir En Grey - Grammar needs work

December 7, 2006

• Peasant - needs reformatting, problems with tense, needs to be expanded.
• Timmendorfer Strand – first paragraph is a stub, the rest is bad
• SameGame - a bit too casual compared to Wikipedia standards

Hi, I had a look at it. Could you be much more specific about what you mean by "a bit casual"? Lovellester 20:06, 15 December 2006 (UTC)

December 6, 2006

• Treatment_of_human_head_lice from the text: "I have assisted some who had lice for 7 or 8 years, until they receive help..." "TEN TIPS TO KEEP THE HEAD LICE AWAY"; is a how-to, additionally it contradicts Head_louse , might even better be re-merged with it. --84.159.169.175 02:03, 7 December 2006 (UTC)
• Muhammad_Yamin - just a wall of information. -Patstuart^talk|edits 09:50, 6 December 2006 (UTC)
• Supersaw - This page has to be among the worst in Wikipedia. Original research, unverified claims, jumbled prose and more are all here. Help! --Hypergeometric2F1(a,b,c,x) 09:54, 6 December 2006 (UTC)
• Gerhard Buchwald - Minorly notable German doctor and legal campaigner against vaccination. I have wikified the article stub, but it's seriously disorganized, and be be NN. —Vanderdecken∴ ∫ξφ 12:59, 6 December 2006 (UTC)
• Paul Bettany - long, too few sections, and a long list of awards could be cleaned up/shortened Betaeleven 14:25, 6 December 2006 (UTC)
• The Da Vinci Code (film) - the Differences between film and novel section has been tagged for cleanup since October 2006, but it doesn't appear to have been entered on this page. The list is extremely long and needs some serious work. Betaeleven 14:31, 6 December 2006 (UTC)
• My Parents are Aliens - Specifically the episode synopses. Not all the series are formatted the same way, it's been tagged for non-standard English, and some of the grammar and spelling is quite poor as well. More alarmingly, I found some plagiarism in the characters section, (and replaced it), and I'm concerned that the synopses might contain some as well. RobbieG 16:49, 6 December 2006 (UTC)
• bebop - the Style section is just a giant block of text, needs formatting. --Shock 04:46, 7 December 2006 (UTC)

December 5, 2006

• Patrick Madrid - clearly written mostly by the subject in the style of a personal statement or resume N6 03:08, 6 December 2006 (UTC)
• Gonk- Written in a completely unencyclopedic and jumbled manner. Lord Patrick 19:15, 4 December 2006 (UTC)

Tydus Arandor 05:19, 5 December 2006 (UTC)

December 4, 2006

• Turkey Bowl - Contains a gigantic and unnecessary list of past scores, should include more information as to other (general) Turkey Bowl eventsHéous 18:44, 4 December 2006 (UTC)
• Primo slides - in the style of a how-to guide. JRHorse 01:38, 4 December 2006 (UTC)
• Paracinema - This appears to be two separate articles, each with its own "References" section, smooshed together one right after the other. -Wayne Miller 01:37, 4 December 2006 (UTC)
• Rounds 2 to 9 of 2000 NHL Entry Draft need to be properly formatted. Aecis ^{Dancing to electro-pop like a robot from 1984.} 13:51, 4 December 2006 (UTC)

December 3, 2006

• Age of Division - unwikified, possibly copied from somewhere. - Mike Rosoft 11:16, 3 December 2006 (UTC)
• ITV Play - Violates WP:NPOV and WP:NOT#CRYSTAL, but notable enough TV station article not to be PRODded or put up for AfD. The shows section of the article reads like an advertisement. Needs a lot of cleaning up. --tgheretford (talk) 14:22, 3 December 2006 (UTC)

I went through the article and removed some of the more obvious spam but this article needs someone to cleanup the rest of it and to watch for more spam. --Banana04131 22:04, 3 December 2006 (UTC)

I have added more of my concerns regarding the article and added templates to the article accordingly. --tgheretford (talk) 09:30, 6 December 2006 (UTC)

December 2, 2006

• Sabrina, the Teenage Witch (TV series) - unbelievably bad article. Goes into excessive detail on fictional elements of the show, most of which, if kept at all, should be in seperate articles. Much of it also reads like an essay - ^Рэд_хот^{(t • c • e)} 21:08, 2 December 2006 (UTC)
• United States Copyright Law - Organizational issues as well as lack of detail on critical components and excessive detail on minor issues; for more info see Talk page. LH 23:10, 2 December 2006 (UTC)

• Libyan-Chadian War needs a grammatical once-over; it looks like it was written by someone with a grasp of English vocabulary but not grammar, as verb tenses are frequently confused. I'll do it myself if it's not fixed after finals, but if anyone else would help that'd be great.

• I ran through the article and did some purely grammatical/spelling editing. Mansfieldatron 5:14, 3 December 2006 (UTC)

December 1, 2006

• Parc Nacional de Munchique, short article could use some lengthening or pictures. Ricefountian 22:15, 1 December 2006 (UTC)
• Grendel (band) - not structured, probably needs more info. Peter Vasiljev 04:30, 2 December 2006 (UTC)
  • Added infobox. Mansfieldatron 20:21, 3 December 2006 (UTC)
• Sholiyar, newly created article by new user needs some work, to put it generously. ॐ Priyanath 05:04, 2 December 2006 (UTC)
• Samuel Colt - has no structure and makes references to things that are never mentioned. Not very clear to someone unfamiliar with the subject. 70.170.27.119 16:55, 2 December 2006 (UTC)

November 2006

November 30, 2006

• Lizzie Borden, mainly the section of artistic representations of Borden. I've cut one duplication. There's so much there I think I needs to be sub-sectioned by genre, or something. or maybe Lizzie herself can take an axe to it. Shawn in Montreal 04:52, 1 December 2006 (UTC)
• Vanilla option from the Vanilla (disambiguation) - leads to another disambiguation page, none of which items listed referst to the topic in question. Jackiespeel 17:50, 30 November 2006 (UTC)

I think I fixed. It now links directly to the section on types of options, including the vanilla variety.Shawn in Montreal 05:00, 1 December 2006 (UTC)

• Powersgaming - Looks like a fairly notable gaming group, but most of the contents doesn't seem to be very encyclopedic. - Mike Rosoft 13:35, 30 November 2006 (UTC)
• Villanova College - Contains material copied from the school website [2]. Is there a version to revert the article to? - Mike Rosoft 15:18, 30 November 2006 (UTC)
• Ashe County, North Carolina - General spelling, formatting and syntax problems, someone with local knowledge would be useful. RHB 20:06, 30 November 2006 (UTC)

Have done some grammatical editing. Still has no citations whatsoever.Monocle1 19:06, 1 December 2006 (UTC)

November 28, 2006

• Travis S Taylor - Article sounded like fan-speak, I have made some changes to the tone but some sections still lack citations. Metlin 18:51, 28 November 2006 (UTC)
• Ismail Kadare - poor English, needs some copyedit --Angelo 01:43, 29 November 2006 (UTC)

Done my part Dilane 05:38, 29 November 2006 (UTC)

I've just copyedited the article too, some sections and paragraphs need to be merged, I think some ideas are being repeated several times. RHB 21:41, 29 November 2006 (UTC)

November 27, 2006

• Multi-agent_system - The article lacks a general description. There should be a long general description of MAS, and a short concrete example (not the other way round, as it is now) --JFromm 13:20, 27 November 2006 (UTC)
• Persepolis - A lot of good info here on one of the ancient world's most important cities, but it reads like it was written by someone who spoke a primary language other than English. The introduction is strong, but then it goes downhill. Lots of grammar and punctuation issues and some really weird syntax. Also, zero references. Dppowell 05:37, 27 November 2006 (UTC)

• Did some copyediting. Still has issues that I can't fix, mostly due to lack of familiarity with the subject and the fact that it was probably written by someone with English as a 2nd Language. I'm not familiar with the subject so someone else more familiar with ancient persia probably needs to look it over. Also, it needs citations desperatly. There's a good start on a solid article here, but it needs more work.--Lendorien 00:46, 29 November 2006 (UTC)

• Metiabruz is an unwikified uncontextualized textdump. Aecis ^{Dancing to electro-pop like a robot from 1984.} 12:02, 27 November 2006 (UTC)

Thorough copyedit and cleanup, sorted information into sections and put into prose. RHB 16:55, 30 November 2006 (UTC)

November 26, 2006

• Gallant Man - This article looks and sounds very much like random commentary. The intro isn't so bad, however the rest is an utter mess. Needs to be organized and copy edited into a more professional tone.-- Ryckmonster 01:54, 27 November 2006 (UTC)
  • shorter sentences and reorg. done; gives a bit of rough reading but acceptable.

Dilane 16:46, 30 November 2006 (UTC)

• St. Louis-style pizza - It appears somone has done a (poor) re-write of this article. Citation is needed to back up claims, and NPOV needs to be employed(i.e. you can't refer to the pizza as "savory", that's POV. I love Imo's pizza as much as the next guy, but this article need to be fixed. Gamer83 04:59, 27 November 2006 (UTC)

November 25, 2006

• Eye dialect — this article lacks sections, has bad typography, and has too large a quotations:comment ratio. Raifʻhār Doremítzwr 02:30, 25 November 2006 (UTC)

• Mr. Do - Someone reverted my edits after I fixed it and removed it from cleanup in Oct, claiming they were unfair based on the fact that Pac-man has a long description. I hate to say it, but what it was reverted to is a lengthly unpargraphed mess of poorly worded descriptions of the game that make little sense, are hardly readable and are not needed for an article about a game that is as non-notable as this one. I personally think that what I edited to it would have been fine and more concise, but I don't want to create a revert war here by going back to it myself. Maybe someone else can find a happy medium. See my original edit here. If you make changes, post on the Talk page to prevent a revert war with the original author. --Lendorien 16:28, 25 November 2006 (UTC)

• Bartolo Colon - For a Cy Young Award winner, he sure doesn't have a lot on his page and his infobox doesn't even list the Anaheim Angels, the team she was with when she won the bathroom award. Definitely needs some work. --Mrmaroon25 05:01, 26 November 2006 (UTC)

She??? You meant he right? Besides that I'll see what I can do with it... Vic226_(chat) 09:53, 28 November 2006 (UTC)

By the way, the infobox lists only his former teams, so naturally the current team is excluded. Nothing wrong with that. And I don't get what you are talking about the bathroom award, since it sounds like vandalism to me. Vic226_(chat) 10:03, 28 November 2006 (UTC)

• Joseph Anthony - has unrelated info about a poet named Fiona Templeton attached to it that mysteriously does not appear if you try to edit it out. I'm at a loss as to how to clean this up. Thanks! SFTVLGUY2 19:38, 26 November 2006 (UTC)

• Cranfield - absolutely astonishing page which has many features of a good encyclopedia article.

November 24, 2006

• History of Cuba - Cuban Rebels section has seemingly random information, and needs fluidity. Its kind of a mess, really. G.bargsnaffle 19:42, 24 November 2006 (UTC)

November 23, 2006

• Real computation - Second section of this article has some POV issues.
• Chinese language - Many sections are disorganised and do not conform to the language template recommended by the Wikiproject of Languages. Also, subsections are misplaced, such as loanwords, which shouldn't be listed under morphology and the content is quite difficult to read. Another discrepany is when you search for Sinitic languages, it redirects you to the Spoken Chinese entry; however, when you type Chinese languages, it brings you to Chinese language. The section on Chinese characters is still unnecessarily long even though there is already a detailed article on Chinese characters. And the whole entry is just too long, it is 57kb in size, some of the clumsier sections should be rewritten for sub-articles. I do not understand how this article managed to become a featured article before, or maybe it was much better. Please contact me if anyone would like to work together on this Shingrila 05:18, 24 November 2006 (UTC)

November 22, 2006

• Alice Academy - Information on the article, mostly on the characters are very confusing... -210.213.159.187
• Aureal Semiconductor - Minor punctuation, typo, and grammar issues. At least one "editing comment" appears in the body. Structure could use a cleanup. --Dan Hendricks 02:32, 23 November 2006 (UTC)
• Blood in the Face (1991 film) - Unwikified mess of words. The film exists; the IMDb link is kosher, but the whole page needs to be gutted and rewritten. WhiteLightning 03:33, 22 November 2006 (UTC)

• Gave it a runover. Cut the pov stuff out, edited it for style and pulled the tags. Could someone give it a once over before we pull this listing? --Lendorien 17:10, 25 November 2006 (UTC)

• Kevin Stevens - Needs simple help to clean up. Organization of the article is poorly laid out. Also, while the article appears to follow a chronological type description, it jumps all over the place leaving the reader confused. Simple headers and organization will do.

November 21, 2006

• Xine - Needs references for the "DVD Issues" section.
• Forest_School,_Horsham - indiscrimate and redundant listing of everything associated with the school 19:37, 21 November 2006 (UTC)
• tattoo gun - The page on tattoo gun is problematic. Tattoo artists and educated consumers refer to them as "tattoo machines"", and there are numerous sources to back this up. Searching wikipedia for "tattoo machine" brings up nothing. I would like it if someone a bit more code-savvy than I am could rename the page "tattoo machine", and add a disambiguation link, or refer, from "tattoo gun". In the industry we know that when someone calls it a "gun" they're probably not that knowledgeable about tattooing, and I don't want wikipedia to sound uneducated about anything- especially my job! thanks, drop me a line if you can do anything to help.
  --Resonanteye 08:54, 21 November 2006 (UTC)R.e.'s signed contrib edited to remedy format misconception. --Jerzy•t 14:03, 21 November 2006 (UTC)
  

• Someone moved the article to Tattoo Machoine. Since they mispelled the word "machine," someone is prombably going to have to do a revert, delete incorrect mispelling and move it again. All beyond my limited knowledge. Help!--Lendorien 17:49, 25 November 2006 (UTC)

• Edith Pringle: Aussie pol activist -- PoV pervades article, largely via activist jargon, e.g. "rights" and "progressive" reflect how i'd describe her goals to my allies, but you might use "privileges" and "radical" instead. Excessive use of hdgs suggests desire to shout, perhaps in order to exaggerate significance of her details.
  --Jerzy•t 14:03, 21 November 2006 (UTC)
  
• With the slightest change of two or three words (not "progressive" and "rights", though.) this will be a slightly less toned article. It seems fairly factual and straightforward, though. Editing now.Resonanteye

November 21, 2006

• Rashied Ali - Currently a mess of unsourced, unformatted articles, including one in French (???). I didn't want to revert back to a stub, and I suspect there may some useful information in there, but I don't have time to read through a dozen pages to find it.
  • reverting back to last clean version, as it's a blatant copyright violation of http://www.bigmagic.com/bios/rashied.htm Patstuart^{(talk)(contribs)} 04:35, 21 November 2006 (UTC)

November 20, 2006

• Paravas - I have been editing this page for style and general cleanup. This page also needs citations and some consolidation of information that is repeated in the article in different places. I am continuing to work on this article but I think it will benefit from multiple hands.Dalassa 13:24, 20 November 2006 (UTC)
• CA Scanline- I just wrote this article but since I'm new in Wikipedia I would very much appreciate it if somebody could help me edit this aticle to improve it since I don't think it is okay yet.

• I went in and got the wording as neutral as possible. I had to cut many entire sentences out that sounded like an ad-it could still use sources, but it's a lot easier on the eyes now.Resonanteye 09:06, 21 November 2006 (UTC)

• Finished more clean-up. This article should be taken out of the backlog. Dilane 05:11, 22 November 2006 (UTC)

November 19, 2006

• Local area network - The referencing needs to be done better. There are references at the bottom but no in-text citation is provided.

November 18, 2006

• Lindenholzhausen - Article looks like it was translated from the German wiki. Could use grammar copyediting and further translation from German. More info on talk page. -Wayne Miller 01:23, 19 November 2006 (UTC)

Done a copyedit, needs someone with local knowledge really. The motorway names (B 451 etc) need context for the non German reader too. RHB 17:12, 30 November 2006 (UTC)

November 17, 2006

• Nightclub venues - This article reads like an essay. It is in need of citations to back up the content. — RJH (talk) 23:39, 17 November 2006 (UTC)
• Hornsby Girls' High School - Reads like a school magazine --Princess Tiswas 13:15, 17 November 2006 (UTC)
• Saket (Delhi) - Needs pruning, wikifying, copyedit, etc. Aecis ^{Dancing to electro-pop like a robot from 1984.} 13:45, 17 November 2006 (UTC)

November 16, 2006

• Aimo Lahti - This does not need any major "clean up" but I would appreciate some copyediting with the sentences as with my English skills it's bit sad. --Pudeo (Talk) 18:58, 16 November 2006 (UTC)
  • hope that helped, missing a lot of "the" haha Resonanteye 09:09, 21 November 2006 (UTC)
• Pot Noodle - Reads like advertising and appears to violate WP:CORP--Princess Tiswas 17:26, 16 November 2006 (UTC)
• Heinrich_Schliemann Nothing too serious here, just needs a stylistic edit to read more like an encyclopedia entry and less like a magazine.

November 15, 2006

• The Touch - Needs major cleanup/wikifiying as article is "poorly" written and also a disambiguation page needs to be made for this name as there is other things relating to "The Touch" --Mikecraig 02:45, 16 November 2006 (UTC)
• St._Bartholomew's_School - Needs general spelling and grammar cleanup. Some of the text is also perhaps too trivial and irrelevant for inclusion on Wikipedia. I-hunter 16:09, 15 November 2006 (UTC)

SkierRMH 11:32, 18 November 2006 (UTC)

• Park - For such a common topic, the article seems to jump around with many small sections and doesn't present much information. It also seems to be poorly worded, particularly in the "national park" section. I cleaned up a bit, but it needs some work. Jdoty 02:12, 15 November 2006 (UTC)
• Mountain View High School (Oregon) requires sufficent cleanup. Mgarnes2 03:39, 15 November 2006 (UTC)

November 13, 2006

• Marilyn Monroe - specifically the subsection "Marilyn Monroe--the exhibit" - is gramatically poor (several misplaced commas, numerous fragmented sentences) and this section of the article is currently extremely confusing as a result. anon 23:59, 13 November 2006

• Check with the original creator (talk)of this section and maybe the interested editors if there is one. The section is deleted as a whole, possibly due to WP:RS. Vic226 02:45, 14 November 2006 (UTC)

• Locus of control is grammatically poor (the plural of locus is loci), incorrectly uses terminology (says that people *are* internal/external loci, when instead it should be that they *have* internal/external loci), doesn't cite it's sources (source that women tend to have external loci more than men?), and needs major paragraph reformatting. Tarayani 02:50, 13 November 2006 (UTC)
• Garden Gnome Liberation Front is extremely confusing, makes no clear distinction between fact and fiction, is littered with grammatical/spelling mistakes, and is generally very... surreal. User:Woodenbuddha has been making good-faith attempts to clean the article up, but it still needs a lot of help from anyone even remotely familiar with the subject matter. -ryand 05:28, 13 November 2006 (UTC)

November 11, 2006

• History of IBM needs a rewrite, for the reasons I give on its talk page. Thomas Ash 16:29, 11 November 2006 (UTC)
• The Escape Club needs to be reformatted and cleaned up, with the musical artist sidebar template added, and the discography reformatted as per other music groups. N Norder 18:00, 11 November 2006
• Scaler needs a more informative outlook. Stot 20:13, 11 November 2006

November 10, 2006

• ZigBee is starting to read like a bunch of ad copy for vendors. --MountainLogic 20:14, 10 November 2006 (UTC)
  • Done enough commercial cleaning; should be good for another three months. Dilane 05:34, 14 November 2006 (UTC)
• Risa_Kudo appears to have been machine-translated from Japanese. I started to clean up the grammar but some sentences are gibberish. Needs someone who can read the Japanese original so that the resulting fixes are meaningful. --Wintersweet 20:29, 10 November 2006 (UTC)

November 9, 2006

• Malaric not a horrible mess but not nearly adequate Devotchka 03:05, 9 November 2006 (UTC)
• Reta_Shaw this article had a problem with its lay-out, a standard filmography would be appropriate --194.78.199.56 15:37, 9 November 2006 (UTC)
  • Made a start. needs more. Cheers, :) Dlohcierekim 22:08, 9 November 2006 (UTC)

November 7, 2006

• Armenian Genocide - POV article, any editoring pointing out the other people's stance is removed. Totally biased, bad language, only Armenian sources included, misinforming, corrupting the reality presenting like this is accepted by most of the world although the reality is otherwise and so on..Xargoth 14:37, 7 November 2006 (UTC)

Please, Xargoth, don't disrupt the cleanup process to prove a point. Aecis ^{Dancing to electro-pop like a robot from 1984.} 15:26, 7 November 2006 (UTC)

November 6, 2006

• Jedediah Smith This is a mess all of the information is pretty much just made up to be a joke, the article talks about hot pockets, saquatches and wizards. Please fix. 68.207.117.147 04:41, 7 November 2006 (UTC)
  • Article seems to have been vandalized; I have fixed what I could find. Can the rest of the contents - most of which has been added in this series of edits - be verified? - Mike Rosoft 13:04, 7 November 2006 (UTC)
• Mizu ni Sumu Hana is just a confusing mess. I tried to fix it myself but since I don't know anything about the series, I cannot do it accurately. What does "Rikka is hospitalized but when she finally leaves the hospital she can't move on from the trauma because she is continously attacked in several bizarre ways involving water" mean?? Even if I can fix the grammar I can't really explain what the series is about. Devotchka 01:28, 6 November 2006 (UTC)

November 5, 2006

• Dope Reach Squad has way to big of a picture and is very messy. It was just created as I found it under the "new" article special page. Also, because I do not know much about Bulgarian hip-hop, I cannot confirm the validity of this article. Streetsabre 08:14, 5 November 2006 (UTC)
• England national basketball team - This page has some problems. There are several places with poor grammar, and some of it seems to have been directly copied. -- Discboy 02:35, 5 November 2006 (UTC)
• Henry Ward Beecher - The article is just a continuous stream of quotes from sources, and is therefore extremely disjointed. Anchoress 03:54, 5 November 2006 (UTC)
• Chicken Run - The article on the movie has an incorrect fact. It says "Mr. Tweedy crushes his defenseless wife with the farmhouse door." In fact he opens the barn door to exit the barn and this causes the wall to fall on his wife accidently.

• Well... confusion of a single detail would qualify for the need of cleanup? And the entire summary actually needs to be shortened and less detailed. See WP:NOT. Vic226 02:26, 14 November 2006 (UTC)

November 4, 2006

• Sport in Canada - Information just thrown together. It has some good information but needs a bit of rewritting.

November 3, 2006

• Origins of Santa Claus - This article seems to need cleanup for several reasons. See its discussion page for more information.

• Contemporary Art - although listed as a "project" this article has not been improved recently, it is still poorly organized, lacks any citations, is missing much essential information, and has a glut of irrelevant details. This is a true shame, as this is a topic on which many people have expert opinions.

• Montreal Lacrosse Club - The first ever organized lacrosse team and the ones responsible for making the first written rules of lacrosse deserve a better article. Needs some general cleanup including just standard stuff.

November 2, 2006

• Category of being - As a major topic in metaphysics, perhaps the biggest, it strikes me how poor this page is. It is clearly a mish-mash of different writers using inconsistent terminology (the poor quality is even reflected in the article's title: the article is called "category of being," even though the bolded word in the opening sentence is "categories of being." Before I added it, searching for "ontological scheme" did not even redirect there. I think an expert should rewrite the whole thing, starting off by giving the goal (to create a minimal, exhaustive, and exclusive list of all the fundamental kinds (no universal negative categories, or disjunctive categories) of things that exist) - i.e. a category has to "earn" a place on the list by proving itself to be irreducible to other categories, or capable of being eliminated entirely. In the second part, s/he should then list the categories that have been argued to exist (be generous in this part, since reductive/eliminative arguments will come next). And in the third part, s/he should discuss arguments for/against certain categories e.g. Hume argued that space and time don't "deserve" a category on the list because they are only constructs of the human mind.
• Mechanics lien - This article could use some section headings to differentiate the subject matter of each paragraph.
• Resveratrol - The subject of this article has been frontpage news world wide as a result of the release of results from a 'fat mice' experiment at Harvard (Dr Sinclair) suggesting that there is a possible escape from the generally undesirable consequences (liver, heart, arterial, metabolic disease, including diabetes mellitus) of over indulgence. This article does not do WP justice in that it is full of suggestive allusions, including to this (these) compound(s)'s use in the diet supplement industry, particulalry the unusual US version of it due to Congress having 'saved' the vitamin industry in the early '90s. Improvement can't be limited to textual review as some of the technical material also requires review. Given the news coverage, improvement is somewhat urgent. See Talk. ww 17:19, 2 November 2006 (UTC)

November 1, 2006

• The three articles herd behavior, herding instinct and herd need cleaned up and, likely, merged into two. There is already a (lightly attended) merge discussion going on relative to herd behavior and herding instinct, at Talk:Herd behavior. Then, just recently, I discovered a third article (arguably better written) at herd. We could really use a few more eyes on this with ideas on how to straighten it out. N2e 04:27, 1 November 2006 (UTC)

October 2006

• Eureka Stockade - Left wing bias. Example: "However the event...became a rallying cry as the call for federation and nationhood gained momentum in the 1890s."

October 30, 2006

• Tecmo Super Bowl- Some gramatical errors. Needs expanded info on SNES version, which I added but can't contribute much for.

October 29, 2006

• Chemical castration: some of the factual evidence seems off.
• List of PlayStation 1 games needs references for every game listed. Each game is also missing the entries for it's developer, publisher, and release date. Ceros 02:59, 30 October 2006 (UTC)
• The page http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Tajiks claims that some persian poet and scholars were tajik which is not true in fact tajiks are a little groups of Persians so please kindly discuss the matter in the discussion page of this article and also rumi's article discussion page under the controvarsial tajik discussion http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Talk:Jalal_ad-Din_Muhammad_Rumi#I_didn.27t_know_he_was_TAJIK_.21.21.21.21.21.21.21.21.3F.3F.3F.3F.3F.3F.3F
• Word Of Life - this article is not written in the expected tone of an encyclopedia article. The information seems to have a POV, and some poor grammar (I didn't know the past tense of add was adden!) It also needs to be linked with other Wikipedia articles (I've only had time to internally links a few things). 5ptcalvinist^{My friends call me "Cal"}
• Driving on the left or right - this article has little sourcing, citing, etc. It is a little confusing in some places --FivePointCalvinist (My Friends Call me 'Cal') 22:05, 29 October 2006 (UTC)
• History of the United States (1988–present) - This article needs more external sourcing. It also has some formatting errors (including overlap at the bottom of the page). This article should also include a little more information about this time period (demographic trends, economic trends, important issues, etc ((which can possibly become separate articles in the future)) ) 5ptcalvinist ^T.u.L.i.P

October 28, 2006

• Era & ERA (1st is organized w/ emphasis on etymology, usage, and near-obsolete calendar systems; 2nd is Dab): Era (geology) (which probably should be Geological era) has its lk buried in Era & is unmentioned on ERA. General disfunctionality & probable WP:MOS violations.Jerzy•t

October 27, 2006

• Investor relations. At a quick glance, this looks like it was created by people from http://www.zangani.com. I removed the plug for their site, but the article itself is very much in need of cleanup. Jun-Dai 23:56, 27 October 2006 (UTC)
• Podiatrist Introduction is not bad, but the rest of the article needs a lot of work. The sections for the various countries are particularly hard to follow and repetitive, and have no wiki markup. The list of conditions(?) also seems unnecessary, although some items could be incorporated into a more informative section on the work of a Podiatrist. I also get the feeling, from many parts of the article, that the text has just been copied from another source. —anskas 23:05, 27 October 2006 (UTC)

October 23, 2006

• The Departed Plot (summary) section is overly bloated and needed to be trimmed down. The article also contains too much original research; claims are not backed by verifiable sources. --Madchester 21:46, 24 October 2006 (UTC)
• Celebrity Paranormal Project, this article needs to be edited for basic grammatical errors. As it stands now, it's not very professional.

October 22, 2006

• Sun D'Or, the Israeli charter airline needs cleaning. The infobox needs a logo, and the main body text needs making sense of. Flymeoutofhere 10:50, 22 October 2006 (UTC)
• Jack Dawson needs some fixing. It's very long, contains several punctuation errors and is poorly formatted, especially towards the end. UnusualHero 07:28, 22 October 2006 (UTC)
• List of experiments from Lilo & Stitch - at 82KB it's too big. Some of the descriptions could be trimmed and maybe the whole thing could be formatted better. There's also a ton of images on it - some of which aren't properly tagged and are really blurry. --Jtalledo (talk) 11:19, 23 October 2006 (UTC)

October 19, 2006

• Globalization it seriously harms the information in the article.

Couldn't find a version to revert to without losing significant amounts of new content, but cleaned up by hand. Seraphimblade 01:47, 22 October 2006 (UTC)

October 17, 2006

• Fabolous is a drivelling fan rant at the moment. Aecis ^{Dancing to electro-pop like a robot from 1984.} 10:36, 17 October 2006 (UTC)
• The School is a new Norvegian band.
  • Quality fine with me Dilane 16:55, 29 October 2006 (UTC)
• Futures exchange is extremely confusing; I've taken macroeconomics (and garnered a 4.0, harrumph), always read the newspaper, and was totally confused about this article. It needs a good one-over by an economist.
• Medical technologist needs to be proof read and NPOV'd. The writing style is very non-encyclopedic. 68.238.2.60 01:57, 18 October 2006 (UTC)

Some proof reading/npov work done. Reformatting and further editing still required. Kedlav 08:31, 19 October 2006 (UTC)

October 16, 2006

• Religion and politics I started this a while ago when the Christianity and politics page was created: it now needs some tidying up or possibly separate pages for particular religions. Jackiespeel 17:12, 16 October 2006 (UTC)
• New Mexico Rail Runner has been tagged. All the information here reads like it was taken from the Rail Runner website. Anyone with helpful information, please modify. Drumlineramos 05:39, 16 October 2006 (UTC)
• Herculaneum has been tagged, because the images often cover up the text, and I don't know how to fix it up. Anyone who knows how to fix it, please edit (and maybe show me how to do it) --Lord Pheasant 06:40, 16 October 2006 (UTC)

Essentially there were too many pictures in one small section of text so I moved them until it looked better. The text was being covered over because the |left| alignment was interfering with the layout, given the proximity of so many other images. After I'd moved a couple elsewhere I changed it to |right|. If you look at the page history you will see it was more trial and error than anything else. I removed the tag but you may wish to check that its done to your satisfaction. Ben MacDui 18:32, 25 October 2006 (UTC)

• Meadowlands Racetrack. Stakes Schedule section has to be properly formatted. Even so, not sure if just a list of stakes races should be used instead, as is the case in other horse racing racetrack articles. JRHorse 14:36, 16 October 2006 (UTC)

October 15, 2006

• Firedog was tagged for advert cleanup on October 4th. I've asked for a 3rd party to look it over on the talk page, but nobody has yet. There could be some advert language under the 'services' section, I would appreciate if someone could look it over. Staus 05:44, 15 October 2006 (UTC)
  • I've nominated the article for speedy deletion. The entire article is flooded with adverts and pr talk. I have no problem with an article about this company, but the article as it stands is spam. 10:39, 17 October 2006 (UTC)

October 14, 2006

• St. Johnsbury Academy Contains personal references to staff and facilities. No or unclear elaboration in certain areas of article.

Requires rewritting Rajrajmarley 19:28, 14 October 2006 (UTC)

October 13, 2006

• Il Duce Simply of very low quality 213.237.93.201 16:39, 14 October 2006 (UTC)

October 12, 2006

• Igarassu has been tagged for cleanup since November 17, 2005. It still needs a lot of work, so I'm bringing it up here, so that someone who knows the city may have a go at cleaning this up. ^{I'm too naive.} 19:46, 12 October 2006 (UTC)

October 11, 2006

• Dwarf runes: Dwarf runes are typically found in the country of Saudi Arabia and can be seen with a normal microscope under 100X magnitude. James.S 18:16, 13 October 2006 (UTC)
• Mountain Dew AMP: Besides having the wrong name for the product, the article uses the wrong style of sourcing, bad links to useless sites, and a writing style not fit to wikipedia standards. 65.30.23.234 20:29, 11 October 2006 (UTC)

October 10, 2006

• Inocente de Ti: looks like copyvio. Not encyclopedic. Very long plot synopsis, long list of credits and very badly formatted. Mona-Lynn 06:38, 11 October 2006 (UTC)

October 6, 2006

• Harry Baron(60-something Israeli sculptor): wikify; prosify; rescale photos; probable self promotion, so check notability; format reeks of being prepared for another medium, so do further copyvio checks.Jerzy•t
• José Rizal(Phillipine nationalist activist, writer, martyr): de-PoV, esp. de-hagiographify; condense or split; state early and clearly what his notability is, beyond the (non-verified (and AFAI could stand to read, inexplicable) worship of him by Ph. or Malay nationalists.Jerzy•t

October 4, 2006

• Mr. Do!: Do we really need all that info on how to play the game? -- Earle Martin [^t/_c] 19:16, 6 October 2006 (UTC)

• Cut back the gameplay section. I don't know about the game, but this should be better. Someone else should give it a look before we pull the tag. --Lendorien 20:35, 14 October 2006 (UTC)

• Buck Nelson: ("classic" '50s UFO "contactee)-swallows his implausible and utterly unverifiable story whole. PoV-ectomy needed.Jerzy•t

• Did some clean-up work to take care of this. I think it's pretty good now but someone else might want to look it over. --Lendorien 20:49, 14 October 2006 (UTC)
• I did some further work to reduce the slight bias in tone - it leaned towards confirming the "visit", which isn't too neutral a point of view. WhiteLightning 18:11, 17 October 2006 (UTC)

October 3, 2006

• Malietoa - Inappropriate Attempt to control Wikipedia content. Mikedelsol 21:14, 3 October 2006 (UTC) History does not show any undue changes, vandalism, etc. User is urged to edit boldly! SkierRMH 12:10, 18 November 2006 (UTC)

  Someone's proposed it for deletion. WhiteLightning 08:18, 17 October 2006 (UTC)

October 2, 2006

• Disney Channel's Hauntober Fest 2006 desperately needs cleanup. much of it reads as if it was pulled from disney, a different title is needed (i don't think hauntoberfest 2006 aired in 2001), and the formatting and grammar need work.cma 03:58, 3 October 2006 (UTC)

Did the best I could! Crispy1995 22:00, 10 October 2006 (UTC)

• Peace is full of POV and has no references. I made some reccommendations for deletion/edits.Dudeman1st 12:20, 3 October 2006 (UTC)

September 2006

September 30, 2006

• A1 Team USA - The article reads as if it was written by a pr company. I've edited the Background Story section [3], but the rest of the article also needs a lot of attention. Aecis ^{I'm too busy acting like I'm not naive} 10:51, 30 September 2006 (UTC)
• System Accident - This article needs to be totally rewritten. shotwell 02:38, 1 October 2006 (UTC)

September 29, 2006

• Curwood Castle - does this article really need a list of James Oliver Curwood's entire literary output? There are formatting issues too, and I'm too tired right now to fix them. This significant building deserves a better article. Kestenbaum 06:08, 29 September 2006 (UTC)
• Portuguese Rink Hockey Cup - Is the rest of the table needed? There seems not much point in it, when only the winners have been recorded - Weebiloobil 16:47, 29 September 2006 (UTC)
• Covington Township, Lackawanna County, Pennsylvania - This appears to be the entire content of a student's history essay, including dozens of unsourced photographs. On the plus side, a bibliography is included. --Ghewgill 23:59, 29 September 2006 (UTC)
• Bakersfield, California - This article is long and rambling, and probably needs some careful excision. --Ghewgill 23:59, 29 September 2006 (UTC)
• Odysseus - The article is poorly formatted, confusingly worded, incorrectly capitalized, and missing many important aspects of Odysseus as per his involvement in the Iliad. --Wikifried 01:35, 30 September 2006 (UTC)
• Peter Bruff article needs references. Currently has none. --MPW 03:12, 30 September 2006 (UTC)

September 28, 2006

• Saint Louis, Missouri - a user deleted half the infobox and a load of text, but it has subsequently been re-added to by a load of edits so I don't think a revert is appropriate - Kert01 15:58, 28 September 2006 (UTC)

September 25, 2006

• Flagging Manila Science High School for cleanup since there are segments that are unencyclopaedic and unverifiable. The exernal links were not credible and not worthy to be the source of information --Darth Narutorious 05:14, 25 September 2006 (UTC)

I can think of two good reasons for tagging this article AFD (Article for Deletion):

1. Non-notable. No high school is notable, unless a peace treaty was signed there or something.
2. A far stronger case can be made for copyright violation. See this page.

--Ling.Nut 19:52, 27 September 2006 (UTC)

September 24, 2006

• Flagging Marathi language for cleanup. This article was recently updated, and the changes need to be copy-edited into more standard English.

September 23, 2006

• Electro magnetic contactors is somwehat confusing and could possibly be merged with contactor
• Infantry tactics may not represent a neutral worldview. Some assertions are not supported with detailed references. The introduction is vague and needs to be expanded.
• Flagging King Piccolo Saga - it's inconsistent in terms of grammar, tense, and style, and reads as though a lot of it was taken from a random fan site on the internet. 68.39.249.165 07:26, 23 September 2006 (UTC)
• Flagging Kasha for cleanup. The content of the article is out of order and messy. It could use an editor's eye. --Ahhwhereami 17:33, 23 September 2006 (UTC)

September 22, 2006

• Flagging Skies of Arcadia for cleanup. I have wrote (sic) a lot of new content which needs to be proofread and rephrased. Characters section contains a lot of white space due to picture formatting, perhaps a group image of the characters would be appropriate.
• Sara Payne: A Mother's Story. This is mainly the product of one author, with minor inputs from a couple of others. It is full of POV and reads like a school essay rather than an article. It needs a good copyeditor to take it and shake it. Fiddle Faddle 21:44, 22 September 2006 (UTC)

September 21, 2006

• Flagging Politician for cleanup. Contains interesting material, but needs better formatting and organization; probably more references, and more balanced NPOV. --HailFire 12:20, 21 September 2006 (UTC)

September 20, 2006

• Flagging Communication for cleanup. Very poorly written, and may need expert attention on the subject.

• Flagging goblin for cleanup, truly one of the more lamentable articles. It lacks structure, and seems very *er* wrong. Sjc 04:38, 20 September 2006 (UTC)

• Flagging Mount Gay Rum for cleanup -- it reads like an advertisement for the brand, needs attention from someone who knows rum. Voket 06:46, 20 September 2006 (UTC)

September 18, 2006

• Folk high school - especially the France part is in very bad shape, almost incomprehensible. --Espoo 00:24, 18 September 2006 (UTC)
• Richard Sorge - disorganized, confusing, and poorly written User:Msvarley

September 16, 2006

• Dien Bien Phu (film) - Much of the article written by someone(s) whose native language is not English. Lots of poor grammar and hard to understand passages. Axeman89 20:47, 16 September 2006 (UTC)

Have been working to Englishify this article, but it's still way too long. Guidance, anyone? --Icenine378 22:13, 9 November 2006 (UTC)

• Mitsubishi Agricultural Machinery - too long, needs to be formatted. J o 15:39, 16 September 2006 (UTC)

Not much there. Reformatted some and marked as stub.Cheers, :) Dlohcierekim 23:46, 20 September 2006 (UTC)

• Career Launcher - reads like an ad, notability is borderline. Aecis ^{Appleknocker Flophouse} 12:15, 16 September 2006 (UTC)
• Jessica Drake and Brad Armstrong (porn star) - I have received several e-mails, apparently from jessica drake herself:

  i'm relatively new to wikipedia, but i get emails from people all over the world about my entry on it. They are fans of mine, and they are questioning the source of the entry. you see, i'm jessica drake, Wicked Pictures Contract girl, and I am the person who last night made changes to the entry "jessica drake". First of all, my name is NOT capitalized. ever. this is my choice, not a proofreading error. also, that was my actual bio, i wrote it, so it is not copywritten by any other party. there were several inaccuracies in the original article, so i corrected them, and updated it. then you took it down. please correct this matter, or if you'd like, i can have the legal department at Wicked contact you or anyone else from Wikipedia.
  

  Brad Armstrong, the porn star, not the wrestler- is my boyfriend of 2 1/2 years. His entry is lifted straight from another site (violating that copyright thing you harrassed me about), and although he was married to Jenna Jameson, he was never married to Dyanna Lauren.

  • I have checked the contents of the latter article (using a simple Google search), and indeed about two sentences seem to have been taken from the IMDB biography or a similar source. This might constitute fair use, but the website should be listed as a source. (If the rest of the article can also be identified as coming from an outside source, it should be removed as a copyright violation.) Being Czech and not very knwledgeable about the porn scene, I wasn't able to verify the facts, but updated and moved the Jessica Drake article anyway. - Mike Rosoft 09:56, 16 September 2006 (UTC)

  Note that "jessica drake", in lowercase, is a trademark. However, if her name is Jessica Drake, then per common sense and provisions of the Manual of Style, we write it in title case, as with every other human being's name. We are not obliged to use the trademarked form, although we could mention it in the leader of the article. WhiteLightning 09:05, 12 November 2006 (UTC)

• Forum administrator - rather badly written (very informal style etc.), I suggest redirecting to Forum moderator and mentioning the difference between a moderator and an administrator there. - Mike Rosoft 15:08, 16 September 2006 (UTC)

September 15, 2006

• Rights of Man The article is extremly cluttered and lacking of any sources. It could be divided into subsections and some parts removed or merged into other wikipedia articles.

Took a first pass, there needs to be more done though. Sunspeck 06:10, 22 September 2006 (UTC)

September 13, 2006

• Palace of Versailles This article is surprisingly slim on text considering the subject. There are also a number of expand tags. The article is crowded with images and is lacking a section on history. *Exeunt* Ganymead | Dialogue? 20:52, 14 September 2006 (UTC)
• Open Water 2 One breathless paragraph that needs some slight copyediting (probably from someone who has seen the film) Jackiespeel 17:21, 14 September 2006 (UTC)
• Magnetic moment - There's a problem here and elsewhere with "magnetic poles," which are discussed as if they were magnetic monopoles. The magnetic moment is first defined as the pole strength times the separation. The correct definition (current times area) is given later in the article, but the earlier reference to poles is both confusing and wrong. The initial discussion of diamagnetism on this page is also confusing. --Bjheiden, 11:25 PM (EDT), 13 September 2006

• Hipster - seems to be experiencing a barely-concealed POV war, with lists of favorite albums, rampant stereotyping and tons of unverifiable statements about what is currently hip. --142.103.211.189 23:56, 13 September 2006 (UTC)

• Rum Rebellion - This article omits numerous words and makes use of confusing sentences. Copyediting requested. --68.13.123.167 02:26, 14 September 2006 (UTC)

September 12, 2006

• Gaudiya Vaishnavism - General structure and details needed. Ekantik 00:45, 12 September 2006 (UTC2)
• Michael Watson - 'Career' section needs substantial cleanup. Sasaki 16:01, 12 September 2006 (UTC)
  • Cleaned it up as best I could. Sounds and flows a lot better than before. Emperor Gestahl 18:02, 15 September 2006 (UTC)
• Crest (bird) - An article I originally created appears to have been expanded by someone with English as a second language, using info from an article on the Spanish Wikipedia. Anyone able to fix this up? It looks like mostly gibberish to me at the moment but there's probably something useful there. --Kurt Shaped Box 21:55, 12 September 2006 (UTC)

September 10, 2006

• Politician - Cleanup tag was previously removed by a vandal, hence page could do with a good once-over before it's delisted. 82.36.124.145 01:24, 10 September 2006 (UTC)

September 7, 2006

• English passive voice - This article is both disorganized and confusing. See its talk page for more details. --Voidxor 05:55, 7 September 2006 (UTC)

September 6, 2006

• Incubus (demon) - As it stands now, this article is somewhat of a mess. Certainly there shouldn't be so many see also links, nor that bulleted list. ♫ Melodia Chaconne ♫ 19:26, 6 September 2006 (UTC)
  • I'll give it a try. :) Dlohcierekim 14:11, 8 September 2006 (UTC)

Did what I could. Rewrote part. Made bullet points into paragraphs. Removed extraneous links. If it's not germane, it's not germane. If in text, no need in links section. Incorporated and expanded some internal links into paragraph. Still needs proofing. Needs sources. :) Dlohcierekim 16:32, 8 September 2006 (UTC)

September 5, 2006

• Chikungunya - The new virulent form of this mosquito borne disease is now raging through India, having infected over 1 million people in the last few months. It has the potential to infect hundreds of millions in India and elsewhere in Asia, and to disrupt world travel. The bottom of the page has become a sort of bulletin board for breaking news and resources, and is in great need of attention. As infection rates can surpass 50% of a locality's population, and Wikipedia ranks #1 for a search on this disease, significant editing would greatly benefit those seeking information.

September 4, 2006

• Gregorian Bivolaru - I've edited out the worst pov parts of this article, but it still needs some attention. Aecis ^{Appleknocker Flophouse} 22:30, 4 September 2006 (UTC)

September 3, 2006

• Egyptian burial - Poor grammar in several sections, and the section on The Indestructibles completely neglects the precession of the equinoxes, although the full article on the indestructibles is a bit more informative.
• Abu Hashim - A disambiguation page, but it doesn't link to any other page. I also have no idea what the first point is about ("People call the people which comes under the prophet's tree...") and there is no assertion of notability of the second Abu Hashim. Aecis ^{Appleknocker Flophouse} 20:36, 3 September 2006 (UTC)

  • I did a little bit of cleanup on this, I think I salvaged the point of the disambig. As for the notability of the last Abu Hashim on the page, I think he may be a notable folk character - of which I know nothing. It'll have to remain a footnote until we get someone more worldly to fill us in.ParticularlyEvil 04:54, 11 September 2006 (UTC)

September 2, 2006

• Delta Upsilon - Not scholarly at all, trivial paragraphs, needs to be seriously worked on. Reads like it was copied from a fraternity brochure.

• Thugaboo - This article is a mess and needs wikification, proper categorizing, more info, etc. --TonyM ^{ｷﾀ━( °∀° )━ｯ!!} 14:11, 2 September 2006 (UTC)

• Lionel Pickering - The article uses several slang/informal terms and expressions.

September 1, 2006

• E-marketing, Online marketing - These two articles, with 100s of incoming links need a complete rewrite. There's a massive chunk of content in both articles which just refers to one book by Dave Chaffey, who originally wrote the E-marketing article in 2003[4] under the usename User:Dchaffey. The E-marketing article was expanded following this by various anons using only Chaffey's definition of e-marketing, and then forked out onto the online marketing article in which Chaffey's work forms the bulk of the article. Now maybe Chaffey wrote the absolute tome of intenet marketing and everyone in the industry uses his definition, in which case it would be OK. But I doubt that somehow. Online marketing and E-marketing need rewrites. Couple this with the fact that we have a un-Chaffey article at internet marketing which should probably be merged makes this a big job. - Hahnchen 21:20, 1 September 2006 (UTC)

August 2006

August 31, 2006

• Marina (TV series) - Sorry for listing the article twice. I had attempted to clean it up, and now it's a mess again. A part seems to be taken from an outside source (I had previously removed other infringing material), the rest of the writing is just horrible. And the entire article is malformatted. Needs a complete rewrite! - Mike Rosoft 20:48, 31 August 2006 (UTC)
  • I have undeleted the article and reverted it to my revision. It still needs a lot of work - perhaps some of the non-infringing content added to the article could be useful? - Mike Rosoft 08:24, 1 September 2006 (UTC)
    • I rewrote the copyvio part and integrated it with the childish plot synopsis. Deflufffed. Left out the lyrics-- they don't belong in the article. It's still lame, but there wasn't a lot of meat with the fluff . :) Dlohcierekim 00:02, 6 September 2006 (UTC)

August 30, 2006

• Trademark dilution The text could be "diluted" into something less opaque.
• Levitation no intro, no separation between physics and esoteric meaning, somebody added a terrible esoteric and unsourced POV 'see also' section, intersecting the stub tag. Boo 03:20, 30 August 2006 (UTC)
• John Stafford (US politician)(born abt 1940, military lawyer)- No secns, no chrono flow, excessive admiration, PoV about how he almost stopped Vietnam War & unverifiable & PoV "faithful Catholic". Continue wikification.Jerzy•t
• List of female private detective characters - Either clean up or rename the page, leaving out the "private". See talk. <KF> 20:54, 30 August 2006 (UTC)
  • I made a suggestion for this. See talk. ParticularlyEvil 05:19, 11 September 2006 (UTC)

August 29, 2006

• Duff Beer comingles reality and fiction within the same section. Factual disputes are argued in the main article. Suffers from poor organization. This might require some serious Googling or sources to resolve just which/whether all the fictional Duffs really did appear. --Thatnewguy 14:06, 29 August 2006 (UTC)
  • moved the simpsons stuff to Duff Beer (The Simpsons), still needs some cleaning - Trevor MacInnis (Contribs) 03:33, 30 August 2006 (UTC)

August 26, 2006

• Heim (onomastics) I have never encountered a messier article in my entire time here and Ive been here a while. I don't even know where to start on this one. Tobyk777 05:29, 27 August 2006 (UTC)

August 25, 2006

• Kurt Nehrling I have a rough translation from German articles on Kurt and I would like some assistance in making the article clearer as well as add reference historical links.

--Mobilelearn 15:05, 25 August 2006 (UTC)

August 24, 2006

• Lipton Original Iced Tea Needs to be less advertising and more encylopediac, while Darjeeling tea (white) needs slight rewording - though the idea of a "fluffy" tea is interesting. Jackiespeel 15:11, 24 August 2006 (UTC)
• Aries Mu - Needs prosifying of stats section and rewriting of text and stats in encyclopedic tone that will not need updates over time. Stats like age and words like currently become outdated in the blink of an eye. - Mgm|^(talk) 11:52, 24 August 2006 (UTC)

August 21, 2006

• Blue (boy band) - I've tagged this article for a clean up. Reasons for cleanup stated on Talk page. -- Sarz 10:27, 21 August 2006 (UTC)

August 17, 2006

• Mara Salvatrucha - It looks like the gang this article is about may be getting overly involved in writing it. The best I could do was to fix up some punctuation errors. There are virtually no citations in any of the article, the grammar looks like a 5th grader wrote it, and I'm tempted to call their section on enemies a wikipedia enabled hit-list. Here's a quote from the discussion "it3 im C^ripK N i wanna say dat wikipedia needs sum more info bout gangs, even tho im C^ripK i noe sum MS shit. Cause they in ma bKloCC tha 13 stands 4 southside, tha 13th letter on tha alphabKet M 4 mexican mafia, dats sureno slang N shit, bKut MS took tha 13 2 reppK it 4 them" I'm tempted to delete it because I don't even know what it means, but I don't know the wikipedia policy on this. This article needs some serious love and attention from people who know more about it than me. -NorsemanII 09:57, 17 August 2006 (UTC)

August 16, 2006

• Scary Movie - the description of the plot is way too long, more of a book report summary, and much longer than necessary. JPG-GR 02:37, 16 August 2006 (UTC)
• Magnetosphere particle motion - has a discursive conversational physics textbook style, not an encyclopedia article style. -dmmaus 01:22, 16 August 2006 (UTC)

August 15, 2006

• Jorge Dely Valdés and Julio Dely Valdes are about two twin brothers, both Panamanian footballers. So far, so good. However, the articles have exactly the same information, verbatim. Both players have played exactly the same number of matches with exactly the same number of goals for exactly the same clubs and have sustained exactly the same injuries. Aecis ^{Appleknocker Flophouse} 21:13, 15 August 2006 (UTC)

August 14, 2006

• François Vatel's link to château de Chantilly erroneously links to just the chantilly disambiguation page. Chantilly cream is also missing the story/myth of its own invention (it does appear in the Vatel article).

• Floating point - this article is very scrappy and poorly organized. -- Earle Martin [^t/_c] 13:34, 14 August 2006 (UTC)

August 12, 2006

• Ballad of a Thin Man (a Bob Dylan song): I've edited this page quite a bit, but it still needs lots of citations. Mr. Wood 13:21, 12 August 2006 (UTC)
• Spring Waltz - Needs to be wikified. --TonyM ^{ｷﾀ━( °∀° )━ｯ!!} 17:29, 12 August 2006 (UTC)

August 11, 2006

• Judy Ann Santos is written with lots of uppercase letters and has no proper formatting. - 上村七美 | talk 13:42, 11 August 2006 (UTC)

I've removed a lot of the excessive capitalisation in the titles. It reads like an article from a Fan Mag - deifinitely not up to Wiki standards. It needs a lot of clean up and objectification. I'll do a bit more when I've got time. Derby Dave 16:40, 11 August 2006 (UTC)

• Carrefour Just not a good article. Bad layout, confusing (possibly POV) paragraphs in the intro, which they certainly don't belong in. And just has quite little actual content other than the intro. - ^Рэд_хот 14:40, 11 August 2006 (UTC)

August 7, 2006

• Bradford Bishop(bio of 30-year cold-case American murderer of own family, w/ dip. passport)+Did some cleanup, removed data for conspiracy theory that has no evidence given of notability. Still needs true-crime tone (implicit voice of Robert Stack!) removed, syntax tersified, etc, etc.Jerzy•t

August 6, 2006

• George Gittoes - IMO, requires cleanup

Removed copy vio. Perhaps spmeone could rephrase and bring the info back. :) Dlohcierekim 14:23, 27 August 2006 (UTC)

• Applecrest Farm Orchards - up for deletion, needs an encyclopediac tone. íslenska hurikein #12 _(samtal) 00:41, 7 August 2006 (UTC)
• Homo erectus - Non coherent in places, reads like a 9th grader wrote it.

August 4, 2006

• Pensacola Christian College - the article has bogged down into thinly veiled opinion and commentary between advocates and opponents of the college and its philosophies. --05:08, 4 August 2006 (UTC)
• List of countries by number of active troops - Formating in the table appears to be broken.

fixed formatting by removing tags Skapur 00:48, 7 August 2006 (UTC)

August 3, 2006

• Andrea Lewis - Highly disorganized. Formatted Improperly.
• Miriam McDonald - Highly disorganized. Formatted Improperly.
• Wari' - Tone & level of detail are inconsistent (& frequently odd); crucial information confusing or missing; no citations. Details of recommended cleanup are posted on the Talk page. --Vcrs 08:29, 3 August 2006 (UTC)

August 2, 2006

• Jaan Anvelt - Disorganized and poorly formatted.

August 1, 2006

• Kanye West - This article should be cleaned up, bad grammar in many places, quite messy.
• YTCracker - This article has escaped VfD twice, but there has been a consensus that cleanup is required.

July 2006

July 30, 2006

• Charles Jacobs (political activist) (and other articles cross-linked to it (in its "See also" section)

• Harold Pinter

Please see my explanations of my concerns relating to the problems of inaccuracy of format and other inaccuracies being introduced for the past week into the first article (Charles Jacobs) and since yesterday the second article (Harold Pinter) by at least one other editor, SlimVirgin. She is continually (over and over again) reverting correct format to incorrect format and also reverting previously-deemed unverified or unsupported information by putting it back in the article without any checking or knowledge of the sources or the subject of the article or the format styles. These reversions are continually introducing mistakes and inaccuracies in these articles of living persons and also violating WP:BLP and WP:Citing Sources and WP:Reliable sources, as well as policies relating to Wikipedia:Five pillars. If she and other editors commenting in the articles' and my talk pages are administrators, I feel that they are abusing their privileges as administrators and not maintaining NPOV or even common courtesy, much less stated Wikipedia policies re: respecting the work of others. I have tried to bring these problems to these editors' attention, but to no avail. They basically gang up on me and attempt to make it seem that I do not know Wikipedia policies, but I have read the policies, and I do know what they are. That is why I am lodging these complaints.

(Other problematic things are being done to the Charles Jacobs-related articles by some other editors as well.)

Please see the talk pages of the articles (and those linked in the CJ article. Please see the pages on disputes about "accuracy" and "clean up". Thank you--NYScholar 00:55, 31 July 2006 (UTC)

July 29, 2006

• Vril - unencyclopedic, messy, confusing.
• Sindy - messy and unverified. Sarge Baldy 17:38, 29 July 2006 (UTC)
• Manufacturing Execution Systems - This article is an unabashed commercial product ad and unsuitable for an encylopædia.
• Back Bay (MBTA station) - Multiple formatting errors, large picture taking of 1/4 - 1/3 of the article needs to resized or removed.
• Pawnbroker - very jumbled up and confusing. The mention of "Lombard" is not explained until the "Symbol" section, which itself is a disorganised mess. -- Earle Martin [^t/_c] 22:57, 29 July 2006 (UTC)

opening section cleaned up Kendrick7 04:39, 3 August 2006 (UTC)

July 27, 2006

• Kyunki Saas Bhi Kabhi Bahu Thi - This article is too long and in places badly written - perhaps it should be split into several articles
• Donkament - No sections, more info needed also. --Jmatt1122 00:15, 28 July 2006 (UTC)
• Mohammad Nabi Mohammadi - unwikified and rather badly written (spelling, style). - Mike Rosoft 12:10, 28 July 2006 (UTC)
• Mewtwo - there is a vandalism of several pictures of penises on the pokemon page and I cant find the edit.
• Beyond the Black Stump (Comic Strip) - Messy

July 26, 2006

• Image:Death Penalty World Map3.png - this image is a (modified?) copy of Image:Death Penalty World Map2.png, which is on Commons. I have placed a tag at its description page to list everything that is wrong with it:

  The same mistake has occurred as in the previous version: Libya, which is by no means abolitionist in practice, has been marked as such. The map needs a thorough check against Use of death penalty worldwide to make sure that no more errors have crept in. (Western Sahara has been changed from "abolitionist in practice" to "retentionist", and it does not appear in the list; are there any references to legal death penalty use [as opposed to extrajudicial executions committed by armed groups] there?) In addition, it is inconsistent to mark states which have abolished death penalty by the 1972 Supreme Court decision (or earlier by law, or - if there is such - had reinstated it after the verdict and then abolished it again) as abolitionist in practice, while marking states where death penalty has recently been abolished on the grounds of the state constitutions (often because of technicalities) as abolitionist for all crimes. I don't think that any state can be considered to be abolitionist for all crimes, and I am not sure that the AI classification is useful for them: even in the states where the death penalty doesn't exist the perpetrator could, at least in theory, face death penalty under the federal law (which did happen in Michigan). The claim that federal death penalty is not being used is not true, either - see Timothy McVeigh, executed in 2001. (Added by another user: The data for the Caucasus region is incorrect and waiting to be changed, as the map indicates that Armenia retains the death penalty in some form, whereas the table says the opposite.) - Mike Rosoft 18:46, 26 July 2006 (UTC)

  I have confirmed that Armenia has been marked incorrectly in all the versions. - Mike Rosoft 19:20, 26 July 2006 (UTC)

  Information on the Philippines is also outdated in Image:Death Penalty World Map2.png, since death penalty has recently been re-abolished there. (Image:Death Penalty World Map.png and Image:Death Penalty World Map3.png are correct.) - Mike Rosoft 19:49, 30 July 2006 (UTC)

  I believe that rather than fixing this image, it would be better to delete both Image:Death Penalty World Map2.png and Image:Death Penalty World Map3.png, go back to Image:Death Penalty World Map.png, and fix the error with Belarus (as well as possible others). - Mike Rosoft 18:53, 26 July 2006 (UTC)

  • Kansas is marked incorrectly. Kansas has not used the death penalty for a long time, however, it is by no means abolished.LH 18:59, 1 August 2006 (UTC)

  As for the supreme court case, it did not abolish the death penalty, it was only as to the application in that case and as to that law. Inmates were still on death row. Either way, that is moot with the recent supreme court case (Kansas v. Marsh) (June 26, 2006)LH 19:06, 1 August 2006 (UTC)

July 24, 2006

• Bernhard Goetz -- 24 July 2006, Article points to Discussion page for more information and is generally wordy and unclear
• Hugh R. Brady-- Very messy. The majority of the article seems to be taken wholesale from an interview with the subject. Formatting is a disaster. Cassian 16:16, 25 July 2006 (UTC)

July 23, 2006

• Deterrence theory -- Nimbulan 01:03, 23 July 2006 (UTC)
• Chain (film) - Poor formatting, little content, no context. VolatileChemical 09:19, 23 July 2006 (UTC)
• The twelve pyramids -- Timwi 14:08, 23 July 2006 (UTC)
• Bettina Devin --Phantom784 17:13, 23 July 2006 (UTC)
• Amy Gutmann (Univ prof & pres) - 2nd sentence is not one & chronology is unfathomable. Will checking recent changes to it perhaps shed light?.Jerzy•t

July 22, 2006

• AEGIS (Ragnarok Online) - Badly formatted, NOR issues, story like structure. Does not properly convey events that have been played out. PFAK 16:43, 22 July 2006 (UTC)
• Anthony McPartlin - Recent edits on his recent marriage is in 'External links' required text to be moved and edited. TheTallOne 17:46, 22 July 2006 (UTC)
• Patrick Star - Large block of unheadered text, and much of the information is either redundant or unneeded. --GUTTERTAHAH 15:48, 23 July 2006 (UTC)

July 21, 2006

• Interactive Brokers - needs critical review of content, maybe to the point of considering AFD. Reads like a personal essay by someone with an axe to grind, and is largely sourced from online forums. 86.142.249.236 15:28, 22 July 2006 (UTC)
• Women as theological figures Someone has removed the subdivisions under Christianity - can they please be restored (with a comment on recent Anglican developments) Jackiespeel 16:11, 21 July 2006 (UTC)
• Dannemora (village), New York has a paragraph at the end of the article which is obviously not encyclopedia quality. It needs to be either deleted, or rewritten and moved.--Riley 02:44, 21 July 2006 (UTC)

Have removed that par, and similar ref in the intro., If anyone wants to replace it they will need to provide references. Remove tag too.Moriori 03:25, 21 July 2006 (UTC)

• Smugmug reads like PR. Among other things, linking to a dozen brag-file comments to "prove" that the company has good customer service is inappropriate for an encyclopedia. --Nate Silva 16:00, 21 July 2006 (UTC)

Cleaned it up, but looking at its history, every time someone removes the biased section, someone else comes along and reverts it back in. We'll see how long it lasts this time --Goldrushcavi 19:49, 25 July 2006 (UTC)

• General Motors van - Some user clumped several pages together into this mess. --ApolloBoy 02:30, 22 July 2006 (UTC)
• Assiti Shards series has NOR issues as well as overall poor-quality writing and strikes me as fancruft, particularly the "The Assiti mechanism literary vehicle" section. -- Earle Martin [^t/_c] 11:51, 22 July 2006 (UTC)

July 20, 2006

• Fusagasugá is a translation of a poorly written Spanish text dump. I can translate the Spanish article later, but for now it needs cleanup. RyanGerbil10 (Drop on in!) 03:58, 20 July 2006 (UTC)
• The Palace (computer program) reads like an article out of a gaming magazine, with more errors. Rincebrain 12:45, 20 July 2006 (UTC)
• Art Radio is currently a Babelfished copyvio of the radio station's front page, and as such, also reads like spam. Needs some serious help in a hurry. (Note: added tag on 20th, forgot to add it here until today.) Doogie2K (talk) 16:54, 22 July 2006 (UTC)

July 19, 2006

• C. Narayanareddy Probably lost something (including notability) in translation.
• Superman in popular music is an almost incomprehensible mess, with no organization or flow.Rhindle The Red 12:43, 19 July 2006 (UTC)
• London mayoral election, 2000 table need fixing and all andidates campaign pledges need listing--Lucy-marie 12:44, 19 July 2006 (UTC)
• Elections in 2004 this page dose not conform to the other ways in which the other election pages have been compiled a lot of work is required on this page to bring it up to scratch--Lucy-marie 12:50, 19 July 2006 (UTC)

July 18, 2006

• Squirrel Boy is written in a poor, informal tone. Also, there is a specific quotes section; although it isn't (and probably won't) popular enough to have a Wikiquote section, it is still inappropriate for the article. 72.145.230.87 16:31, 18 July 2006 (UTC)
• Marcus Goldman is narrative and borderline derrogatory. There are no citations for the information and it might all be incorrect. Possible NPOV issues as well. See discussion for details. --Thesilence 19:27, 18 July 2006 (UTC)

July 17, 2006

• Bob Tur and Los Angeles News Service have the same text for the majority of the article. One article needs to be deleted, or they need to be merged, or one article needs to be completely rewritten.
• Mariano Cardinal Rampolla needs some tweeking/development (and if someone knows more about the papal veto can they please develop the area) Jackiespeel 21:57, 17 July 2006 (UTC)
• Pancharatna Kritis - Needs to be moved to Wikisource, or rewritten in a more encyclopedic style. --Siva 20:04, 17 July 2006 (UTC)
• Valerophenone - unwikified, possibly copied from somewhere. Only contains a malformated table of the compound's properties. - Mike Rosoft 10:48, 17 July 2006 (UTC)
• Waste minimisation- bit long and drawn out, needs to be wikified and improved.
  • Self-undescriptive? ;) Jackiespeel 21:52, 17 July 2006 (UTC)

July 15, 2006

• Alexandra Roos - The article seems to have potential, but there is no context established at this time for the article to be called a stub. --Spring Rubber 19:24, 15 July 2006 (UTC)
• Clunia - This appears to be almost entirely a paper of some sort, anonymously contributed. I'm hoping (but not certain) that the anon who submitted it is, indeed the person who wrote it (impossible to make an educated guess, because there are no other edits from that IP address, so nothing to compare to). Utterly not in Wikipedia style, has POV issues, not wikified, etc. - Jmabel | Talk 22:34, 15 July 2006 (UTC)

July 14, 2006

• Cook Islands Maori does not conform to the standards of other language articles; talk about what Ethnologue describes as multiple languages.
• Palmersville, Tennessee has been listed since June 12, 2006. That article does not use the same format as other cities and towns with Wikipedia articles, and lacks information on the town's population. --67.67.140.211 22:05, 14 July 2006 (UTC)
• A user has been repeatedly removing the cleanup tag at Cook Islands Maori, but it still needs cleanup. Mo-Al 17:06, 14 July 2006 (UTC)
• Universitario de Deportes - Very messy. The famous players list is way too long and needs to be reduced. Also there are different 'versions' of famous players lists that don't make sense (heroes, other famous players, recent famous players etc.). Several external links seem unnecessary. Bruno18 20:35, 14 July 2006 (UTC)
• Devon Aoki needs a rather extensive general cleanup. --Atratus 03:01, 15 July 2006 (UTC)

July 11, 2006

• Philosophy of environment -- Seems to have significant translation issues. As it stands it's very hard to understand what exactly is being conveyed. Needs significant copyediting --Daduzi ^talk 14:55, 11 July 2006 (UTC)
• Pierre-Claude Foucquet needs to be checked for correct english
• Wesley College, Colombo Data dump about a school in Sri Lanka, including long lists of "distinguished students" and teachers. Needs simultaneous trimming and expanding, but in different areas.

July 10, 2006

• Teaching English as a Foreign Language -- No category, smells like SPAM, needs attention and expansion... also wikify to other see also topics.
• Something For Kate -- The information is correct but the page is really badly formatted and it needs images.
• Polish Catholic Church -- article appears to be a machine assisted translation of the Polish Wikipedia page, and need significant attention from someone who speaks the lanugage, or is aware of its context.

July 9, 2006

• Nomad: This entry gives the impression that nomadism and pastoralism are the same thing. Pastoralism or animal husbandry is a subsistence method, and nomadism is not, although the term is sometimes used as shorthand for pastoralism. However, any society which does not remain sedentary for a significant length of time is considered nomadic. This includes most hunter-gatherers, but the entry makes no indication of this. Also there is no logical organization of the information that is presented. An expert's contribution would be best.--LC | Talk 22:52, 9 July 2006 (UTC)
• Sukyo Mahikari: religious article needs thorough cleanup to make encyclopedic (particularly, removal of extensive self-referential editorial comments). Tearlach 16:04, 9 July 2006 (UTC)
• Pinch hitter: Needs spelling/red link fixing, confusing, needs to be made more encylcopledic.*kate 21:53, 9 July 2006 (UTC)

July 6, 2006

• Manitoba Schools Question - Could use some reorganizing, more information, and a few more references. - Superwad 21:19, 6 July 2006 (UTC)

July 5, 2006

• Indian English - article takes a very patronising attitude to Indian English and a lot of bad English is being passed off as Indian English. Needs a lot of attention. - Cribananda 01:00, 6 July 2006 (UTC)
• Children's Bible Hour - article content appears to be based on CBH website or other material (e.g., note use of "we"). Needs to be reworked so that it can function as an encyclopedic article.--Kfranco 14:46, 5 July 2006 (UTC)

July 3, 2006

• Nichola Holt Horrible article that reads like something off myspace but I'm not sure what should go and what should stay.
• The Alien Legacy. Not immediately obvious if this is about the movies or games. And if the Quadrilogy came out later, does Legacy have 3 titles or the 4 listed.--J Clear 15:13, 3 July 2006 (UTC)

July 2, 2006

• Spalding High School (United Kingdom) too POV: little about the school as an educational establishment Peter Shearan 14:30, 2 July 2006 (UTC)
• The Bronze Ring - Unwikified, possibly copied from somewhere. - Mike Rosoft 21:02, 2 July 2006 (UTC)

June 2006

June 21-29, 2006

• Grand Valley Football - Needs wikilinks and general cleaning up--Tiresais 14:15, 30 June 2006 (UTC)
• Gelou - a bit more context to this semi-mythical figure (most countries seem to have them). Jackiespeel 16:17, 29 June 2006 (UTC)
• Role of women in religion Somewhat Non-POV: could be merged on development with Women as theological figures as the intro - or linked into Feminist theology User:Jackiespeel 18:08, 28 June 2006 (UTC)
• When God Was a Woman Non-NPOV. Jackiespeel 18:08, 28 June 2006 (UTC)
• 9/11 conspiracy theories - Needs to be shortened, and have the lists conformed. Also need to have 'bullshit' (i.e., nonsourced and highly opinionated statements) removed. Less than 10% of the statements have sources, even after checking the references at the bottom of the page.
• Ruben Iván Martínez Andrade - needs basic formatting, full sentences and sources. Is he a first division player and is any other type even notable? - Mgm|^(talk) 10:37, 28 June 2006 (UTC)
• Spring Valley, Washington, D.C. - The section on the chemical weapons needs a little work. - bolesjohnb
• Banasthali Vidyapith - Marking as an article which reads like an advertisement, particularly since it is -- it's based (with apparent permission) off the school's promotional brochure. Also, it has no links and is missing much of the standard information (like quality information on academic programs) one would expect from a university article. Likely needs someone from India or who is personally familiar with the institution to tackle it. - Beginning 01:02, 28 June 2006 (UTC)
• Sir Thomas Adams, 1st Baronet A touch hagiographical - and possibly copied directly from the early 19th century document referred to (when was the late descendent referred to actually around?). Jackiespeel 16:37, 26 June 2006 (UTC)
• Knights of the Dinner Table - Much of this article was plagiarized from the bios in the comics (possibly quotation marks are due). Mo-Al 04:45, 25 June 2006 (UTC)
• Gangaji - more formal style? Jackiespeel 23:11, 23 June 2006 (UTC)
• Professional audiovisual industry Hard to tell what this page is even talking about. Mo-Al 22:40, 21 June 2006 (UTC)
• Big Brother Australia series 1 Needs an encyclopedic tone and less cliché. Ste4k 11:09, 21 June 2006 (UTC)
• Big Brother Australia series 3 Needs reformatting per discussion. Ste4k 11:21, 21 June 2006 (UTC)
• Vo Duc Van Could someone who knows what this is all about make it plainer? - Richardcavell 03:19, 22 June 2006 (UTC)

June 1-20, 2006

• Mini chopper This one is written in a very odd style. Mo-Al 22:12, 20 June 2006 (UTC)
• Serena Waldman Strange tone, vocabulary, and needs wikification (plus only 2 or 3 pages link to it) Mo-Al 18:32, 20 June 2006 (UTC)
• Arve Walde Too short, and what exists is badly written. Mo-Al 18:18, 20 June 2006 (UTC)
• Gyula Háy The talk page disagrees with what is said in the main body of the article. Jackiespeel 11:52, 20 June 2006 (UTC)
• Genichi Taguchi Slightly opaque/over technical (anyone wish to create an article explaining the technicalities?) Jackiespeel 11:44, 20 June 2006 (UTC)
• Sir William Brockman. Just spotted this orphaned cleanup tag. I had a go a while back, but met resistance. Needs summarisation of long quotes of original sources, and a hard assessment of linked NN genealogy cruft such as James Brockman Esq b1626 and William Brockman Esq. Tearlach 23:30, 19 June 2006 (UTC)
• Fourier optics. Important topic, but only has a brief introduction written in a fairly informal tone. -dmmaus 06:02, 20 June 2006 (UTC)
• Hierotheos the Thesmothete Needs to be wikified. --Dakart 05:20, 21 June 2006 (UTC)
• Clonduff - Does not assert its importance, badly formatted, no links --Mo-Al 16:23, 18 June 2006 (UTC)
• Fisherian runaway This article is somewhat confusing and could also use some citations.
• Transport in Cyprus This article is basically just a selection of facts and figures and needs reformatting and restructuring into sentences. --Daduzi ^talk 05:59, 17 June 2006 (UTC)
• Wald (onomastics). No idea how to fix. -- User:Docu
• Durham Fair - This article featured outdated information, so I fixed it.
• Royal Guards (Thailand) - This article is a total mess and barely in English. I fixed up the introduction with a major rewrite, but the rest of the article needs cleanup from a refereed source. Decadencecavy 04:55, 16 June 2006 (UTC)
• Lalitaditya Muktapida - This article needs just some general editing (i.e. correction of spelling/grammatical errors) and also perhaps more research (Only one page out of one history book is cited).

May 2006

• Chan Kau-tai More detail/significance? Jackiespeel 22:13, 31 May 2006 (UTC)
• Caviomorpha Could be made clearer for those less familar with terminology for ancient beasties. Jackiespeel 18:32, 31 May 2006 (UTC)
• Martha Washingtonians is badly in need of some expert input and serious restructuring and needs more sources. - Sajun777 11:17, 30 May 2006 (UTC)
• Gus Fink - Perhaps a fairly notable artist (at least, makes a claim of notability), but the article is unwikified and contains a lot of unencyclopedic material. - Mike Rosoft 09:27, 29 May 2006 (UTC)
• Marion College, Missouri - Notable as a former college, but like many former college articles, it's totally out of format. I've done a lot of these as of late and frankly would like a bit of a break. Sorry.  :/ Beginning 23:00, 29 May 2006 (UTC)
• The Open Boat and Other Tales - Much of this makes no sense and is written in the first person.
  • First person seems to have been removed, but it still reads like an essay.--MPW 00:30, 30 September 2006 (UTC)
• Drawball - Needs more editors to clean it up, and keep it clean. See Talk:Drawball. The article is one of the worst on Wikipedia, entirely full of unencyclopedic unsourced subtrivia. Every time an experienced editor removes something, it's replaced with more online webforum dick wagging over who has the biggest picture. - Hahnchen 03:48, 28 May 2006 (UTC)
• Lyn Duff - Too many external links, unencyclopedic style, possibly copied from somewhere. - Mike Rosoft 08:52, 28 May 2006 (UTC)
• Darkest Hour Needs to have sources and most of most of the article isn't written in a NPOV. New York Daily News Needs sources and has a bunch of weasel words. Jackyl reads like an ad. 71.251.20.73 06:13, 27 May 2006 (UTC)
• Maharishi Mahesh Yogi - Due to edits of Peterklutz (talk · contribs), the article looks like promotional of transcendental meditation. - Mike Rosoft 12:43, 27 May 2006 (UTC)
• Bishopric of Bordeaux - Copied from (public domain) Catholic Encyclopedia, outdated information. - Mike Rosoft 12:54, 27 May 2006 (UTC)
  • Also Bishopric of Limoges, Bishopric of Troyes, Bishopric of Nice. - Mike Rosoft 13:33, 27 May 2006 (UTC)
• Muhammed Yusuf Khan - needs wikification and general cleanup. - Mike Rosoft 20:30, 27 May 2006 (UTC)
• Carola Unterberger-Probst Needs some grammar / style correction. I think the article is by a non-native English speaker or a computer translation? Rjwilmsi 08:11, 26 May 2006 (UTC)
• Gopaldas Neeraj - Unwikified, possibly copied from somewhere, in any case the style is completely inappropriate and needs to be rewritten. - Mike Rosoft 08:28, 26 May 2006 (UTC)
  • This page is still in need of a major re-write 82.36.124.145 02:14, 10 September 2006 (UTC)
• Bratz (TV series) - A bit crufty and just needs a bit of a cleanup. Beno1000 16:13, 26 May 2006 (UTC)
• CHIC (band) - In dire need of a complete rewrite/copyedit/formatting. --FuriousFreddy 01:52, 27 May 2006 (UTC)
• Post-structuralism Article not coherent --Mikkel Bue Lykkegaard 21:22, 25 May 2006 (UTC)
• Mario Encarnacion Lurid
• Uniform Crime Reports - In addition to expansion, the Index crime section is overly long and poorly formatted. The criticism sections should either be merged or defined separately. CRobey 17:35, 15 May 2006 (UTC)
• Daniel Coburn article is very poorly written and does not conform to WP:BIO standards. Also used to include lots of POV.
• cross-dressing - A lot of good information, but poorly structured: too many very short paragraphs and bulleted lists; also incoherently ordered, e.g. the article begins with an explanation of details of the usage of terms before explaining main issues.