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[[User:Alex G Zhang|Alex G Zhang]] ([[User talk:Alex G Zhang|talk]]) 20:52, 27 November 2013 (UTC) |
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==Moving Territoriality Section== |
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==Planned Edits== |
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I am moving what is currently in the Territoriality section to species-specific pages. What is written here seems to be too specific for a family article. I will move the first paragraph to the [[Stegastes planifrons]] page and the second paragraph will be moved to the [[Stegastes adustus]] page. I will put a replacement paragraph that is more general to the family as a whole with brief mentions of these two examples. |
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I plan to edit this page to include more details and sources to provide a more holistic description of the group. This will include environmental impacts such as reduced sedimentation on coral reefs. I may also include more examples from specific species within the behavior page. |
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[[User:MarineBiologyS|MarineBiologyS]] ([[User talk:MarineBiologyS|talk]]) 18:09, 13 December 2020 (UTC) |
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This article was the subject of an educational assignment in Fall 2013. Further details were available on the "Education Program:Washington University in St. Louis/Behavioral Ecology (Fall 2013)" page, which is now unavailable on the wiki. |
Finding Nemo's Deb
I changed the scientific name from D. aruanus to D. melanurus. Looking at pictures of the character, she does have a black tail (versus a transparent one) which makes her a 4-striped damselfish, but that is a D. melanurus. D. aruanus refers to the three-striped damselfish, which has a clear/transparent tail. Shrumster 16:07, 7 January 2007 (UTC)
Links
I added links for the following species names: Dascyllus albisella, Eupomacentrus planifrons, E. dorsopunicans, Stegastes partitus, S. leucostictus, S. nigricans, E. partitus. For E. partitus, I made a link to its synonym S. partitus. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Hami910311 (talk • contribs) 05:31, 10 October 2013 (UTC)
- I added links to other terms, changed species names so they would be consistent, ex: S. planifrons instead of Stegastes planifrons. I also changed some wording that I thought would help clarify meaning. Other suggestions for improving the page:
- The phrase "determine the male courtship rates" is unclear, please clarify
- Make the introduction more concise. Some information in the introduction may need to be moved to other sections or have their own sections created. Wenamy (talk) 05:53, 10 October 2013 (UTC)
Advice and Edits
In my opinion, the foraging and the feeding can be combined together in one section. In addition the second paragraph can be incorporated into the remaining part of the Wikipedia article. It is kind of confusing to have varied information that can be organized into later sections. Overall, it is very difficult to understand general behaviors of the damselfish since you refer to many different species, thus you need to specify. I would recommend creating links for more words.
What I changed: -added hyperlinks for courting, clutch, suboptimal, -I changed around this paragraph by removing the first sentence and then moving the food part to the feeding section, and leaving the remaining as its own paragraph. : “Many species live in tropical coral reefs, and many of those are kept as marine aquarium pets, although some species such as white-spotted damselfish are too demanding for an average marine aquarium. Their diets include small crustaceans, plankton, and algae. However, many also live in temperate climates, such as the species which inhabits the coast of southern California and the Pacific Mexican coast, the garibaldi.” -Reordered the phrase under mating as this: E. partitus, male bicolor damselfish, are polygamous Gseehra123 (talk) 01:51, 11 October 2013 (UTC)
New Edit
Hello! I just wanted to let you know that I added a hyperlink for Amphiprion ocellaris into your article. I am a part of a Behavioral Ecology Class (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Education_Program:Washington_University_in_St._Louis/Behavioral_Ecology_%28Fall_2013%29) Washington University and our assignment was to create hyperlinks from our articles to other articles as examples. Best of luck with your article!! Gseehra123 (talk) 22:12, 14 November 2013 (UTC)
• You could add links, like to “Garibaldi species” • You can also reorganize your setup: like courtship and mating can both go under a heading, like reproduction maybe. • Make sure to refer to other good articles and add sections that you are missing, like description • You have a red hyperlink (meaning it links to no page) : S. rectifraenum, • Keep up the good work
Gseehra123 (talk) 17:40, 22 November 2013 (UTC)
Peer Edit
You have a very well-written article. I did not find anything blatantly wrong in terms of grammar or sentence structure. I would suggest that you have one big heading called "Behavior" and then make all the other headings you have into sub-headings under "Behavior." Other than that, well done!
Alex G Zhang (talk) 20:52, 27 November 2013 (UTC)
Moving Territoriality Section
I am moving what is currently in the Territoriality section to species-specific pages. What is written here seems to be too specific for a family article. I will move the first paragraph to the Stegastes planifrons page and the second paragraph will be moved to the Stegastes adustus page. I will put a replacement paragraph that is more general to the family as a whole with brief mentions of these two examples.