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Reviewer: Casliber (talk · contribs) 03:20, 2 January 2021 (UTC)
Hi - I'll make copyedits as I go (please revert if I inadvertently change the meaning) and jot queries below: Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 03:20, 2 January 2021 (UTC)
- Right then, having edited a metric f**kton of bio articles I am a strong believer in uniformity wherever possible. Also, some of the sections are over-subdivided, which chops the prose a little. Have a look at Redback spider, which shows the default headings and placements. e.g. taxonomy is way up the top as the definition of an organism is pretty important (way back we had a discussion over whether taxonomy section should come above a description section...can't for the life of me remember where we had it now...sigh. (e.g. like this)
- Paragraph 3 of the Morphology is applicable to all spiders so is unneeded here as there is no information specific to this species here.
- The last three sentences of the Diet section are uncited...and could probably be folded into previous bit or removed entirely. (actually does Different variations of cannibalism are observed in nature- most often used when resources are scarce and an individual needs to propagate its genes into future generations. refer to this species at all or is it general?)
- This does not present either spider with any problems. - sentence is redundant as implied by following sentence
- Social species of spiders are known to remain in the communities in which they were born in for their entire life. They feed and live communally, usually sharing webs and resources. - if it is not social this segment is unneeded and confuses reader and should be removed
- Similar to other members of the family Pholcidae,... - unneeded as pretty much diet of all spiders
- they are not near as dangerous to humans. - err, not dangerous at all?
- gallery use is discouraged - much better to insert relevant images near relevant text through article