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When writing my article, I am going to include the following: The meaning of the Rite of Passage (Childbirth), what individuals and cultures participate in the Rite of passage, the purpose of the Rite of passage, the process, the materials needed in order to perform it, and the historical (beginning)/ spiritual background to the event. I believe that adding the following would be extremely useful; this is because this is the beginning of this article, and I believe that it would be significant and useful to the readers that search this topic. It will include a lot of the historical meanings, and it will have a strong foundation of what the topic is about, and it would be helpful when others contribute to this article because it will make it stronger. This would also be a great time to link books and journals that relate to this topic- these could possibly be linked. I might even add a picture.
Bibliography:
Davis-Floyd, Robbie E. Birth as an American Rite of Passage: Second Edition, With a New Preface. 2nd ed., University of California Press, 2003, www.jstor.org/stable/10.1525/j.ctt1pndwn.
https://www.researchgate.net/publication/270571428_Birth_A_Rite_of_Passage
http://www.jstor.org/stable/10.1525/j.ctt1pndwn
https://www.researchgate.net/publication/312042605_Birth_A_Write_of_Passage_Process
Rough Draft:
Rite of Passage: Arnold van Gennep was the first individual in the 1960s to discuss the three-stage process that an individual takes when experiencing the Rite of Passage. The three stages are the following: Separation, Limen, and Aggregation . The stages are often connected to the trimesters that the women experience throughout their pregnancy. It has been stated that separation often occurs throughout the first trimester, limen often occurs during the second trimester, and aggregation often occurs throughout the third trimester. The Rite of Passage is demonstrated to be an experience where an individual is going through the process of ending one phase of their life, which then proceeds to them entering a new phase in their life. The Rite of Passage can be related to many different life experiences; one of them being birth. The Rite of Passage is also known to honor the following experiences: Beginnings, Initiations, Partnering, and Deaths.
Pregnancy is a Right of Passage that is acknowledged as such by the mother. The process of Childbirth is where a mother delivers her newborn child. The mother is not alone throughout this process because her child is also joining her throughout this journey. Additionally, the end of the nine-month phase that the child spends in its mother's uterus is considered to be the ending of one phase. However, the child will then enter a new phase, which is considered to be the beginning of the child's life. The soon to be mother will also be transitioning with the child. She will be preparing for the beginning of her motherhood stage, which is viewed as the next phase in the individual's life. Soon to be mothers often create A Write of Passage Process Journal. This journal is often used as a reflection journal throughout the process, and it strengthens the Rite of Passage process for the soon to be mothers due to it assisting the individual through the transition of being an individual to becoming a mother.
When both transitions are completed, the mother and the child are then celebrated and welcomed by relatives and other individuals. There are often rituals and ceremonies that occur in order to honor the Rite of Passage of childbirth; it also recognizes the process of one phase coming to an end in their life and the beginning of a new phase in their life . The materials used throughout the celebration are candles, music instruments, often individuals share a few words or songs, and individuals often dance or have body work completed to show respect and to bring awareness of this new life. In Africa, they have a Birth and Naming Ceremony where individuals welcome the newborn child into the world; A newborn child is not recognized until this ceremony is completed. The ceremony usually occurs three days after the child is born because the community wants to know that the child is strong in health and will continue to live a healthy life. The whole community is involved in the Birth and Naming Ceremony due to the child belonging to everyone who is in that community, and they believe that it is the most proper welcoming in their society.
Peer Review
This is a good start! You don’t go very in-depth, which makes sense since it is such a huge topic. I think that what you have said so far can be expanded. If you can find more sources on the topic it would definitely help. The sources that you have so far look good.
Making the notability of the topic clear at the beginning seems like it could be kind of tricky. I suggest talking about how childbirth as a rite of passage has been widely studied and that many researchers have published works on the topic.
I like that you discussed what rite of passage is. I think that it is good idea to discuss it briefly at the beginning of the article before you tie it in with childbirth. Though, of course the discussion of childbirth should be more extensive.
What you have so far is an overview of childbirth as a rite of passage. Are you planning on going more in-depth about what it looks like in specific cultures? I think that if you give a couple examples from published research it will increase the credibility of the article.
I have a question about a certain section of the article in particular: “Throughout the experience of pregnancy, it is known that the mother is taking part in the right of passage.” Since this is a statement, it needs to have a citation. I am also thinking that this could be worded differently. Maybe something like “pregnancy is a rite of passage that is acknowledged as such by the mother,” or “anthropologists have found that mothers are situated within a rite of passage throughout their pregnancy.” I am hesitant about this only because I do not think many people conceptualize birth as a rite of passage. I certainly didn’t before taking this class! My biggest suggestion here would be to make sure that you cite all of the claims in the article.
I hope this is helpful for you! Mpraml (talk) 18:15, 10 April 2017 (UTC)
Peer Review
I really enjoyed reading this piece. Although short, it does give a brief introduction to what this specific childbirth aspect is in the world of rites of passage. I agree with the person above saying that the sources are good, but it would be helpful to have more sources that can give you more credibility. I clicked on two of the sources to look over them briefly and they did not work on my server, it said page not found. I'm including two sources that may help somewhat if you were to include different examples of Childbirth seen throughout the world:
http://www.huffingtonpost.com/psyched-in-san-francisco/motherhood-as-a-rite-of-p_b_8701204.html
http://www.ingentaconnect.com/content/springer/ijc/2016/00000006/00000001/art00006
http://karamariaananda.com/blog/ecological-birthing [This one is a blog, but it might just help to see like examples and such to include as an external link?]
Just a brief summary, I would look more into including just small examples of what childbirth itself looks like in different parts of the world so that the audience can have a broad perspective of this concept. Arue Jacobo (talk) 02:29, 12 April 2017 (UTC)