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Did you know... that Massachusetts-born activist Almira Hollander Pitman was given credit for the passage of a bill for women's suffrage in Hawaii?

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The result was: promoted by Yoninah (talk) 22:06, 27 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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~~... that Massachusetts-born suffragist Almira Hollander Pitman was instrumental in working for women's suffrage in Hawaii after visiting the islands with her Hawaiian husband?~~

Reviewed: Berge equilibrium

Created by Megalibrarygirl (talk) and KAVEBEAR (talk). Nominated by KAVEBEAR (talk) at 21:56, 11 December 2020 (UTC).[reply]

: hook is interesting and verified. Article is new enough, long enough, well written, neutral, well sourced, free of copyvio. QPQ is done. Good to go. Eddie891 ^Talk _Work 02:10, 12 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Hi, I came by to promote this, but you have a lot of repetition in the hook ("suffragist"..."suffrage"..."Hawaii"..."Hawaiian"). Yoninah (talk) 00:32, 24 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

ALT1 ~~... that Massachusetts-born activist Almira Hollander Pitman was instrumental in working for women's suffrage in Hawaii after visiting the islands with her husband?~~

@Yoninah: How about that? KAVEBEAR (talk) 02:20, 24 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

When you say it that way, it's not a very strong hook. Women in Red would ask: Why do we need to mention her husband? Then there's almost no hook left. Yoninah (talk) 19:23, 24 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

How about: ALT2: ... that Massachusetts-born activist Almira Hollander Pitman was given credit for the passage of a bill for women's suffrage in Hawaii? Megalibrarygirl (talk) 19:27, 24 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

I am fine with anything. @Yoninah: Thoughts on that one? KAVEBEAR (talk) 02:20, 25 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you, ALT2 is better. Pinging original reviewer @Eddie891: to review ALT2. Yoninah (talk) 12:08, 25 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

: Hook LGTM, rest of the review per above — Eddie891 ^Talk _Work 00:07, 27 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]