User:W1kiw0000t/Tarrana/KateLiszka Peer Review
Peer review
Complete your peer review exercise below, providing as much constructive criticism as possible. The more detailed suggestions you provide, the more useful it will be to your classmate. Make sure you consider each of the following aspects: LeadGuiding questions:
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Examples of good feedbackA good article evaluation can take a number of forms. The most essential things are to clearly identify the biggest shortcomings, and provide specific guidance on how the article can be improved.
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General info
- Whose work are you reviewing?
Maria
- Link to draft you're reviewing
- https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:W1kiw0000t/Tarrana?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
- Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
- Tarrana
Evaluate the drafted changes
Maria,
Your draft was totally empty, when you were already supposed to have revised it. You haven't even copied over the draft from the website yet. So there's nothing for me to review. Please do the work.
KL
10/25/2024 review
--It seems like what you copied over is just a segment of the original article. Did you only move to the sandbox the sections that you are working on? Or are you going to delete out the sections that you didn't copy?
--It seems like you have a giant content gap. I don't know what the site is archaeologically or when it dates to or how big it is or why it was important or any basic information about the past there. It's all the modern stuff, which should be there, but cannot support the article alone. Why is it an archaeological site?
--"According to Hooper, the excavation of this site spanned about 25 meters east to west and 20 meters north to south, totaling to about 500 meters in all." -- I don't understand why this is under "geography"... Also this is there excavations, but is that the size of the full archaeological site? I'm not sure why this is relevant or how it relates to the whole.
--You should have sections on each of the major parts of the site, even if it's brief. People should know what was once there.
--"he site was first excavated in 1887–88 by Francis Llewellyn Griffith, who rediscovered the temple of Hathor" -- how did he rediscover it if he was the first person there?
--Were the stelae from the temple? We need to know what type of archaeological context they came from.
--The excavation section needs to be fully reorganized. It's mixing excavations with what is there archaeologically. But you need a clean description of the whole site first and then a separate section on excavations.
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