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16:04, 31 January 2017 (UTC)

Your submission at Articles for creation: School Communication Arts (February 14)

Your recent article submission to Articles for Creation has been reviewed! Unfortunately, it has not been accepted at this time. The reason left by DGG was:

Basically, it's advertising. The tone is not suitable for an encyclopedia . The wording throughout is slanted towards promotion.

It's wordy and elaborate, which is appropriate for persuasive prose, but not descriptive prose. Consider: Some agencies donate money to fund scholarships. Some donate time. Some do both. Consequently, the students have a large network of mentors. One third of these same students benefit from industry funded scholarships.

with "Various agencies donate staff time to serve as mentors, resulting in a large network of mentors. Agencies also donate money for scholarships, and one-third of the students have agency scholarships.

I could simplify this even further.

Writing of interest only to the current or prospective students staff or alumni is Promotional writing; who but the students would care about the cute names for the various annual classes? Who but they would care about the multiple student awards?

The school is probably notable,though it does not award degrees. Try again to write as plain-spoken an article as possible. Include only one social media site. Don't cite primarily the school's own publications. And in WP a listing of notable alumni includes only tose who have WP articles.

Please check the submission for any additional comments left by the reviewer. You are encouraged to edit the submission to address the issues raised and resubmit when they have been resolved.

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DGG ( talk ) 03:19, 14 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]