Talk:Third Battle of Winchester/GA1

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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 15:18, 27 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I'll get to this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 15:18, 27 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]

No DABs, external links OK
Do not use fixed sizes for images. Replace 250px or whatever with upright=1.0 and adjust up or down as necessary so that the images do not dominate the page. Also no periods in captions unless using two or more full sentences. I've done one for you already.
- All images at upright=1.5 except portraits at upright=0.5, dropped periods TwoScars (talk) 21:33, 16 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Images appropriately licensed.
Have there been any efforts to preserve the battlefield before I dive into the battle proper?
- The American Battlefield Trust says that it has saved more than 473 acres of the battlefield. TwoScars (talk) 20:47, 16 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Link ranks on first use and provide an abbreviation to be used in the rest of the article. Suggest using standard US Army abbreviations as I don't think that I've seen Br. Gen. used anywhere else.
- Fixed in captions to LTG, MG, and BG TwoScars (talk) 21:33, 16 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
- Major general through Captain are now all Wikilinked on first use. Confederate generals, including lieutenant general, are linked on first use to Confederate version. TwoScars (talk) 16:57, 17 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Use full name and rank only on first use, afterwards just use last name
- Checking 75 names, completed Atkinson through Early, so far. Left Early's rank and full name in for a second time in the first line under the Confederate army commanded by Jubal Early sub-section of the Opposing forces section. The line reads "The Confederate force was the Army of the Valley, which was created in June 1864 and commanded by Lieutenant General Jubal Early." Can drop the "Lieutenant General Jubal" if necessary—but I believe it is more appropriate, in the Opposing forces section, to use ranks and full names. TwoScars (talk) 19:36, 17 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Link unit sizes on first use.
Sheridan kept his army between Early's army Close proximity alert for "army", suggest using "troops" or other synonym for one of these
- changed first "army" to "troops". TwoScars (talk) 21:43, 16 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Link picket,
- Linked TwoScars (talk) 21:59, 16 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
along rail line of the out-of-service awkward
- Changed to "The division left camp from Summit Point, West Virginia, which was on the Winchester and Potomac Railroad about seven miles (11 km) north of Berryville. At the time, the railroad was out-of-service." TwoScars (talk) 21:59, 16 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Eventually, Lee was also present, what does this mean?
Down to 11:40 am. More later.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 15:48, 16 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
- The "11:40 am: " portion of the section heading was left in by accident—in my sandbox one time I had a lot more times in headings to make it easier for me to organize things. What do you think of removing that so the heading reads "Union infantry attacks from east"? TwoScars (talk) 21:40, 16 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]