Wikipedia:Peer review/Project Apollo/archive1

Project Apollo

Looking for general advice to get article to a featured status. --GW_Simulations_{Talk | Contribs | E-mail} 13:34, 13 May 2006 (UTC)

• My comments:
  • The introduction should be expanded to somewhere between 2-4 paragraphs (see WP:LEAD).
  • Headings should generally avoid repeating the article title (for example, the heading Reasons for Apollo should be changed to simply Reasons)
  • Miscellaneous information should be incorporated into the rest of the article and removed; trivia sections generally are looked down upon.
  • Inline citations are needed. Generally, these are done in the form of WP:FOOTNOTEs.
  • Please alphabetize the categories and interwiki links.
  • As of now, the article is too list-heavy. I would suggest that at least some of the lists be prosified (converted to paragraph form) if possible.
• Thanks, AndyZ _t 13:58, 13 May 2006 (UTC)
  • • I have changed headings and moved the list of capsule locations to the page about the Apollo spacecraft. I will implement the rest later. In reference to the comment on category order, wouldn't chronological order be better? --GW_Simulations_{Talk | Contribs | E-mail} 18:07, 15 May 2006 (UTC)

Just a few comments:

• The "Reasons" section seems out of context. Only the first, brief paragraph discusses the reason behind the program. The other two are post-program reflections rather than initial motivation. Perhaps that section should be merged with the others, or else renamed?
• "equiptment".
• I agree that there are a lot of lists. The launch lists could be converted into nicely-formatted tables.
• There are some odd gaps between the paragraphs that don't really add anything and make the page look unfinished. They should be eliminated.
• George Low should be linked.
• Perhaps you could explain somewhere why there were no launches named "Apollo 2" or "Apollo 3"?
• The long paragraph in the "Manned missions" needs to be broken into 2-3 shorter paragraphs to make it easier to read.
• At the end could you include some comments about where the capsules are on display? Or are being stored? Or were destroyed?

I hope these comments were somewhat helpful. Thanks! — RJH 16:25, 22 May 2006 (UTC)

Reasons section merged with background and end of program sections, and I've had a look at the spacing. I am researching Apollo 2, and as for capsule locations, this is handled in the Apollo Spacecraft article, as it refers to the spacecraft as opposed to the whole program. Thanks, GW_Simulations_{Talk | Contribs | E-mail} 21:33, 23 May 2006 (UTC)

• I have changed the lists to tables. --GW_Simulations_{Talk | Contribs | E-mail} 22:41, 26 May 2006 (UTC)

It looks nice, you might try something with the cancelled mission section, even just a few words as to why they were canceled, instead of mearely their names. That might be better than their names, in fact. Tuvas 23:24, 26 May 2006 (UTC)

• I've put another table in for it. What do you think? --GW_Simulations_{Talk | Contribs | E-mail} 20:00, 27 May 2006 (UTC)