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General info

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Whose work are you reviewing?

Est22

Link to draft you're reviewing
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Est22/Neripteron_vespertinum?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
Neripteron vespertinum

Lead

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The lead looks very nice and organized with a lot of information. The part about the name change is good, but it seems a little abrupt (I can't really find the word) but maybe if you put a little more information it would flow nicer!

Content

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Your references seem good and everything is relevant. One thing is to lengthen or combine some of your sentences, like in the distribution section. Also don't forget to add images

Tone and Balance

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The tone sounds neutral, and nothing seems biased. Maybe add a little more depth to the anatomy and conservation sections, like for the conservation section maybe add if there have ever been any attempts by citizens to help the species.

Overall Impressions

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Nicely written and put together for the first draft, I think it'll be really good once you finish it!

Response

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Hello,

Thank you so much for taking the time to review my draft! I see how I inserted the name changes abruptly, and I will make sure to fix that. The images are confusing, because I am not sure what pictures I can use without plagiarizing. I will look more into that so it is more pleasing to read. There have been no attempt to help specifically this species, but things like bioremediation help the waterways. Thank you!