Talk:Sega Pico/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Tezero (talk · contribs) 00:15, 4 September 2014 (UTC)

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

I can do this one. A few initial comments:

• Why "Marilyn A. Gillen" and not last, first?
  •  Done Red Phoenix ^{let's talk...} 12:20, 7 September 2014 (UTC)
• Why is the Japanese name italicized, and why does it come before the American one that's the name of the article?
  •  Done Simply hadn't changed the way it was originally set up. I think an argument could be made for either as the opening title: "Sega Pico" is the more WP:COMMONNAME in English-speaking markets and meets WP:ENGVAR, but while I don't explicitly have it in a reliable source, it seems the Pico sold much better in Japan than it did in the rest of the world combined, which would give weight to the other name. That being said, it's been unkinked. Red Phoenix ^{let's talk...} 12:20, 7 September 2014 (UTC)
• Remove comma in "February, 1998".
  •  Done Red Phoenix ^{let's talk...} 12:20, 7 September 2014 (UTC)
• Why is it called a "toy" in the first sentence but a "video game console" everywhere else (including the navbox and categories)? I'd think "educational video game console" or something would be fine and unambiguous.
  •  Done Used your wording. Red Phoenix ^{let's talk...} 12:20, 7 September 2014 (UTC)
• The Sonic Gameworld image needs a caption that better demonstrates its use - what's the game like and why's it significant (even if only in being a typical example of a Pico game - and, if so, how?). The FUR could use a little expansion, too, though this isn't necessary for GA.
  •  Done Referred to it as a typical example of a Pico game. Red Phoenix ^{let's talk...} 12:20, 7 September 2014 (UTC)

Tezero (talk) 00:15, 4 September 2014 (UTC)

I'll start looking at this in the next couple of days. Particularly aggressive stretch of work is currently delaying me a bit. Red Phoenix ^{let's talk...} 02:14, 5 September 2014 (UTC)

Alright. Whenever you have time. Actually, I have some Graph Theory homework that really needs attention, so catch ya later. Tezero (talk) 02:36, 5 September 2014 (UTC)

Good! Alright, let's go. Tezero (talk) 16:09, 7 September 2014 (UTC)