User:WanderingAurora/Chalcopyrite/Jushe1234 Peer Review

General info

Whose work are you reviewing?

WanderingAurora

Link to draft you're reviewing

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:WanderingAurora/Chalcopyrite?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template

Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Chalcopyrite

Evaluate the drafted changes

Lead:

The lead has not been updated to reflect the new content added, but it includes an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the topic. Although this section lacks a brief description of the article's major sections and contains information that is not present in the article outside the lead section, it is missing a brief description of the paragenesis, occurrence, and structure. The second paragraph in the lead is probably not necessary to be included in the lead; that information could be moved into the paragenesis or occurrence section.

Content:

The content is definitely relevant to the topic, as the extraction of copper from the ore is very important in economic terms, especially since this is the most common form of copper ore. It must be noted that if pyrometallurgical processes are more common and viable than hydrometallurgical processes, then more detail should be included when describing the pyrometallurgical processes. Although hydrometallurgy seems to be an important process used for chalcopyrite extraction processes, it would be good to keep the level of detail provided for these processing methods.

Tone and Balance

The content is neutral, as it's just describing processes to extract copper from its ore, except that there is a lot more detail provided on the hydrometallurgical processes compared to pyrometallurgical processes, resulting in an overrepresented viewpoint for the benefits of hydrometallurgical processes. The addition of advantages from pyrometallurgical processes could improve this imbalance.

Sources and References

Sources 1 and 2 are peer reviewed, and the studies were performed by members of reliable institutions, and the writing reflects what the sources said. Source 3 is a textbook published by a reliable publisher, and the writing reflects what the source said. These sources are fairly current, with the oldest being from 2011. There are a wide variety of sources on the extraction metallurgy of copper, but most of them are older than the ones provided in the article, with many more current sources relating to paleolithic smelting processes. Therefore, the sources presented in the article are of high quality. The only suggestion for a source is Chamveha, P., Chaichana, K., Chuachuensuk, A., Authayanun, S., & Arpornwichanop, A. (2009). Performance analysis of a smelting reactor for copper production process. Industrial & Engineering Chemistry Research, 48(3), 1120-1125. Which provides more detail on pyrometallurgical processes.

Structure

Very minor spelling mistakes; in the first sentence, "methods-" should be "methods:" and there are some places that require commas and a change in verb tense. But overall, the writing is laid out in a format that is easy to follow and makes sense; the explanation of the two processes and then their comparison at the end of the subsection are well structured. The writing is clear, and the use of bullet points makes lists easier to understand.