User:JSCC3412/Mauritania–Senegal Border War/WadeBucket Peer Review

Peer review

Complete your peer review exercise below, providing as much constructive criticism as possible. The more detailed suggestions you provide, the more useful it will be to your classmate. Make sure you consider each of the following aspects:

Lead

Guiding questions:

Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?
Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?
Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?
Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?
Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?

Content

Guiding questions:

Is the content added relevant to the topic?
Is the content added up-to-date?
Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?
Does the article deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps? Does it address topics related to historically underrepresented populations or topics?

Tone and Balance

Guiding questions:

Is the content added neutral?
Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?

Sources and References

Guiding questions:

Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?
Does the content accurately reflect what the cited sources say? (You'll need to refer to the sources to check this.)
Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?
Are the sources current?
Are the sources written by a diverse spectrum of authors? Do they include historically marginalized individuals where possible?
Are there better sources available, such as peer-reviewed articles in place of news coverage or random websites? (You may need to do some digging to answer this.)
Check a few links. Do they work?

Organization

Guiding questions:

Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?
Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?

Images and Media

Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media

Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic?
Are images well-captioned?
Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations?
Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way?

For New Articles Only

If the draft you're reviewing is for a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.

Does the article meet Wikipedia's Notability requirements - i.e. Is the article supported by 2-3 reliable secondary sources independent of the subject?
How exhaustive is the list of sources? Does it accurately represent all available literature on the subject?
Does the article follow the patterns of other similar articles - i.e. contain any necessary infoboxes, section headings, and any other features contained within similar articles?
Does the article link to other articles so it is more discoverable?

Overall impressions

Guiding questions:

Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?
What are the strengths of the content added?
How can the content added be improved?

Examples of good feedback

A good article evaluation can take a number of forms. The most essential things are to clearly identify the biggest shortcomings, and provide specific guidance on how the article can be improved.

Peer review of "Homemaking"
Peer review of this article about a famous painting

Additional Resources

Check out the Editing Wikipedia PDF for general editing tips and suggestions.

General info

Wade Buchheit (WadeBucket) reviewing Jeff Sousa (JSCC3412).

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:JSCC3412/Mauritania%E2%80%93Senegal_Border_War?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
Mauritania–Senegal Border War

Evaluate the drafted changes

Lead Section:

Great! Simple, easy to read, gets the purpose and need for the article across. Neutral, efficient, contains the most important information. I don't have any changes to recommend.

Structure:

I like what you have right now; the original article certainly has plenty of problems but is nicely organized so you could potentially draw from that. I guess just thinking about where you place the "editing existing text" subsections and making sure it doesn't feel like they've been injected later than the rest of the article. For example, will "desertification" go in the "Background" section or will it get it's own section before "Border Violence"?

Topic Coverage:

I would say the length of your sections is proportional and every section is necessary. Definitely flush out the original article's refugee repatriation section; that seems like a really important part of the aftermath and felt a little half-assed. I'm obviously not an expert on the topic but there didn't seem to be any perspectives missing. You could perhaps discuss the role of the Organisation internationale de la Francophonie a little more than the original article does, but again not entirely clear on how important it actually is - probably a judgement call for you. I also think the "Border Violence" section is written a little redundant and the sentence that starts with "As a result..." is a tad confusing because of the interjection before it, so maybe some things to keep in mind.

Neutrality:

I have no idea if you have a perspective or particular opinion, so... success! In all seriousness, I didn't pick up on any language or signifiers of bias, but definitely look to Sabrina for a second opinion. I think the evaluation guide's advice to look at the balance of positive and negative information is kind of ridiculous because this is a war, but suffice to say you're not overly critical of anything or anyone.

Sourcing:

Sources look great! If possible, you could draw from them more during the body of the article, though I understand the instinct to avoid relying on them overmuch. I think the Wiki guide thing suggested one citation per 2-3 sentences as a rule of thumb. That might be overkill, but I assume it's to avoid any accusations of plagiarism. The beginning of "Border Violence" in particular could have citations more often, which you might be able to draw straight from the original article.

Looks good Jeff!