Talk:Sobada

To begin, this is a really well organized article! I really appreciate how you began with the lead, followed with detail and continued to get more and more specific. It is clear that you have a strong understanding of your sources, especially Jordan's book. However, I would work to expand your source base seeing as your primarily pull your information from two separate sources. Are there other medical journals or ethnographies you can cite? I would also aim to increase your interlinking to other Wiki articles - so the reader can quickly jump to read about the Yucatan or understand more about midwives. Additionally, in the technique section, I would elaborate on the importance of cultural relativism and understanding and how it contributes to the significance or effectiveness of the massage. Finally, I would clarify what the method used to "lift the uterus up" includes because it is referenced several times. Overall, this is a very well structured and concise article! Sharris19 (talk)

I really enjoyed the article, and think you did a good job explaining the detailed process of this massage. Since this topic is fairly unknown and is an uncommon practice in most places, it is important that you enumerate each step, so good job with that! I have two minor critiques: 1, I would be wary of using "him/her" in your discussions. Perhaps consider using "they" in oder to keep it non-binary! I noticed you would write "him/her", and later on in the sentence refer to the midwife with she/her pronouns, so just be aware of that. 2, You tended to use the word "done" to express the sobada being performed, or to express a number of other acts being performed. I would suggest mixing it up with more precise words, especially when discussing the act of the sobada. This adds delicacy to this sensitive, intimate topic. Overall, nice job! Isabelhb (talk) 03:34, 9 March 2017 (UTC)Isabel Bonhomme

You did a really good job with getting as much out of the little sources there are on this topic. I thought the article was organized in a way that flowed naturally. You did a great job breaking up your text into sections. Here are some minor tweaks that can help polish the article off nicely. I would be consistent in how you refer to pregnant persons and also midwives. Sometimes you refer to midwives as her/him and sometimes as just her. Perhaps you could use they/them? Similarly, I liked when you referred to pregnant persons rather than pregnant women to be more inclusionary of all genders.. just make sure to keep consistency throughout the entire essay with whatever you do choose. I would link "midwives" to Wikipedia's Midwifery page, also see if you can link to Wikipedia pages for "transverse" and "breach". Before you talk about the benefits of sobada I would also mention is often described as an uncomfortable or painful process just to better understand what it entails. Also, I would shortly describe the point of moving that transverse and breach babies--- safer and that they can fit through the birth canal better (you can probably add another source for this information too!). Lastly, I felt that "various prenatal visits" read weirdly. Either switch various or maybe "the prenatal visits leading up until birth". All and all great job, Matt! Very thorough, organized and informational article! Beccabeckett (talk) 04:58, 9 March 2017 (UTC)