Talk:Whistle (Blackpink song)/GA1

GA Review

Passed.

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs)) 21:49, 16 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):

b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a. (reference section):

b. (citations to reliable sources):

c. (OR):

d. (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
a. (major aspects):

b. (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):

b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/fail:

(Criteria marked are unassessed)

The time has arrived and I am available to review one of your articles over this weekend and will get on with this one shortly, after I raised the possiblity! --K. Peake 21:49, 16 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

The Black Label studio is not sourced anywhere
Mention in the opening sentence that it is "for their debut single album, Square One (2016)"
"It was released" → "The song was released" and re-word this sentence to mentioning they were released simultaneously as singles from the album
"the group's second single album" → "the group's second single album," although this should be sourced in background and composition
""Whistle" was written and" → "The song was written and"
"Musically, the song consists of" → "Musically, it consists of"
Wikilink drum and bass
The booming and exotic quotes are unsourced, although they could easily be replaced with the description that is written in comp
"including heartbeats and whistles—alluding to the title of the track." → "including whistles and a heartbeat—alluding to the title." to be more specific
"among the best releases" → "among the best K-pop releases"
""Whistle" claimed the number-one position" → "the song held the number-one position"
"marking their first" → "marking Blackpink's first"
I feel like you should also reference the World Digital Songs position here
"the song's accompanying music video garnered over ten million" → "the accompanying music video garnered over 10 million" per MOS:NUM, with the wikilink
There should be some info re the synopsis of the mv in its section and then add an overview here, please
Pipe Best Music Video to MAMA Award for Best Music Video
"with "Whistle" on" → "with the song on"
"and continued to promote the song" → "and continued with promotion"

Background and composition

"On July 29," → "On July 29, 2016,"
"to be the two title tracks" maybe try something like "first two singles" instead since these are certainly not title tracks nor does the source use that term
"Teddy and Bekuh Boom," → "Teddy, and Bekuh Boom,"
"Stylistically, "Whistle" has been" → "Musically, "Whistle" has been"
Remove overly obvious wikilink on guitar

Critical reception

"garnered generally positive reviews" → "was met with positive reviews" since there is no negative ones here
The song titles inside the Rolling Stone quote should be surrounded by singular speech marks instead per MOS:QWQ
Put more of the Entertainment Weekly review into your own words; I would suggest re-wording the end part to something like "observed that the song would be suitable for American charts."
"opening "Hey boy," it's" → "opening 'Hey boy,' it's"
"the 6th best" → "the 4th best" per the source and archive too
"feel impossibly fresh."" → "feel impossibly fresh"." per MOS:QUOTE

Accolades

This does not have enough awards to warrant the tables, nor does it to become a section since these can be moved to critical reception and I believe the music video ones should go in its section after the video's general info
Pipe Gaon Chart Music Awards to Circle Chart Music Awards

Commercial performance

The 17 million streams are not sourced and if you can, shouldn't it be written out like you did with 10 million for consistency?
Ditto for the Korea Music Content Association information

Music video and live performances

Remove duplicate wikilink on YouTube
"ten million views" → "10 million views" per MOS:NUM
Add some info about the video synopsis, either using any sources you can find or the video itself as a source
Pipe Gaon Chart Music Awards to Circle Chart Music Awards
I noticed numerous translated sources mention them performing but do not state they performed "Whistle"; please ensure this is included or else remove

Credits and personnel

Looks good, although if there is a studio I would suggest to add here

Charts

See MOS:TABLECAPTION
- Not done per Template:Screen reader-only, as I don't see the point in redundant table captions. There was also a discussion about this (Wikipedia talk:Manual of Style/Accessibility#Making redundant table captions screen-reader-only) where it was essentially determined that sr-only templates are okay to use.

Release history

Good

References

Copyvio score looks great at 21.3%!!!
Pipe Sports Dong-a to The Dong-a Ilbo and wikilink Naver on ref 2
MOS:QWQ issues with refs 4, 24 and 48
MOS:QWQ issues with ref 10 and pipe Respect Mag to Respect (magazine)
Pipe Insider to Business Insider on ref 15
WP:OVERLINK of Billboard on refs 15, 16, 34, 35, 52 and 56
WP:OVERLINK of The Korea Herald on refs 20 and 41, fix MOS:QWQ issues with the last one too
WP:OVERLINK of Gaon Music Chart on refs 25, 26, 29, 30, 31, 32, 33, 53 and 54
Refs 27 and 28 are not properly formatted as refs with titles
Wikilink YouTube on ref 36
Cite Naver as via instead and fix MOS:QWQ issues on ref 38
Fix MOS:CAPS issues with ref 42
Ref 49 needs a new archive url since the current one is for the Yahoo! consent page
Pipe Melon to Melon (online music service) on ref 50
Ref 55 needs proper formatting for the access date

Final comments and verdict

On hold until all of the issues are fixed; knew this would not take too long! --K. Peake 10:18, 17 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Done all, thanks for you through review once again! Please let me know if I have missed anything. ɴᴋᴏɴ21 ❯❯❯ talk 00:02, 18 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

✓ Pass now, up to scratch with your previous GAs for sure and I only did some brief copy editing! --K. Peake 08:57, 18 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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