Talk:Evarcha striolata/GA1
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Nominator: Simongraham (talk · contribs) 15:30, 17 July 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: AryKun (talk · contribs) 22:06, 28 August 2024 (UTC)
- "topside" to "top side"? also in the body
- Done.
- "The spider...long." Sentence is a bit long and hard to read, I'd split it up.
- Nt sure how to do that. I have changed the structure a bit to hopefully make it clearer.
- "in both the female and male is dark yellow" to "is dark yellow in both the female and male"?
- Done.
- I'd change it to "female spermathecae (receptacles at the end of the insemination ducts)", since the current phrasing makes it seem like the gloss also applies to palpal bulbs.
- Changed.
- No information about habitat in the lead?
- Added.
- 'Named for a Latin word for a "striped",' to 'Named for a Latin word meaning "striped",'
- Changed.
- "it was...the field." per comment at last review, this makes it seem like the species makes her a prolific author.
- Removed.
- "The genus is one of the most speciose" Most speciose what? Genera of jumping spiders or spiders in general?
- Clarified.
- "The genus is closely related to the genera Hyllus and Plexippus." Should be attributed to whoever had this opinion, since the very next sentence has it placed in a clade with two other genera.
- Added.
- "named after the genus" I'd cut this, it's kind of obvious and makes the sentence harder to read.
- REmoved.
- The description of the taxonomy is very muddled; you start by saying it's in a subfamily with two other genera, then say it's closely related to two others, then mention it being put in a clade with yet another two, and end by saying it's very closely related to another genus? I have no idea how these relationships intersect with each other and it's just very confusing, honestly. Are there any cladograms that could be used to make it clearer?
- I have not found one. It seems that there are multiple opinions, which I am trying to convey. I have rearranged the sentences so hopefully this is clearer.
- "flavocin" Link and explain why this is part of the generic name.
- The source just states "Name is created as arbitrary combination of letters coined of words Eva-[rcha] and [flavo]-cin [cta] indicating relation to Evarcha." I feel that commenting on the relationship with Evarcha is superfluous.
- "back.it is" typo
- Fixed.
- "measuring typically" to "typically measuring"?
- Changed.
- "similar in shape but larger" to "similar in shape to but larger"
- Changed.
- "and savanna dominated" to "and in savanna dominated"
- Added.
- "It will eat a wide" to "It eats a wide" Also, is this about striolata or is it still referring to arcuata? If it's arcuata, make that clearer in the text.
- It is a comment on all Evarcha spiders. Changed and clarified.
- Will do spot-checks later.
- I see there's a couple other photos on Commons; maybe add a couple more photos of different views in the body. AryKun (talk) 19:41, 8 September 2024 (UTC)
- I have added one, a lateral view. Please tell me which of the others would be worth adding. simongraham (talk) 04:14, 9 September 2024 (UTC)
- File:Evarcha striolata 18057881.jpg and File:Evarcha striolata 18057857.jpg might be worth adding since they offer a frontal view of the spider.
- Source review: Spot-checked the following sources and found no issues, Earwig also doesn't turn up any copyright infringement.
- Wesołowska, Wanda; Haddad, Charles R. (2009). "Jumping Spiders (Araneae: Salticidae) of the Ndumo Game Reserve, Maputaland, South Africa". African Invertebrates.
- Wesołowska, Wanda; Haddad, Charles R. (2013). "New data on the jumping spiders of South Africa (Araneae: Salticidae)". African Invertebrates
- Rößler, Daniela C.; De Agrò, Massimo; Biundo, Elia; Shamble, Paul S. (2021). "Hanging by a thread: unusual nocturnal resting behaviour in a jumping spider". Frontiers in Zoology
- Haddad, Charles R.; Wesołowska, Wanda (2011). "New species and new records of jumping spiders (Araneae: Salticidae) from central South Africa". African Invertebrates
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