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Requests

Kerala High Court

For the greater benefit of all Wikipedians, I feel that this article has undergo a peer review... Adv. Ranjith Xavier (talk) 09:01, 11 December 2007 (UTC) Attokaran[reply]

The Great Indian Novel

This is an important novel in historical, satirical, literary, and political terms. The article lay dormant for a long time and I've tried to give it some meat. However, it is a very complex and at times subtle satire. Editors should in particular pay attention to allusions and connections that have been missed. The tables of character, place, event connections should also be worked on. Acsenray (talk) 17:08, 6 December 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Hindu-German Conspiracy

I think this a pretty comprehensive article based on the most reliable and comprehensive sources I could think of. I need feedback on wether the article is NPOV, NOR and general quality, since I am thinking of listing this for FA soon.Rueben lys (talk) 17:02, 23 November 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by Kensplanet

This is a Great Article. Deserves to be a FA. I am giving some suggestion.
Whether to implement or not depends on you editors.

Lead

The conspirators included Indian Nationalists in India, the United States and Germany,(Who were the conspirators in the US and Germany; like you have mentioned Indian Nationalists in India) with the help of the Irish Republicans and the German Foreign Office.

You havent included any details of Middle-East in the Lead. A short sentence will do.

Background

In the aftermath of the assassination, the India House was rapidly suppressed.(Rapidly suppressed by whom; The British Govt. or the British Army; good if you mention it)

The economic scenario in India in the early 1900s was depressing and this led to large scale immigration of Punjabis to Australia, the United States and Canada. The Canadian government decided to curtail this influx with a series of legislations, which were aimed at limiting the entry of South Asians into the country and restricting the political rights of those already in the country. Though the Punjabi community had been an important loyal force for the British Empire, legislations like these led to discontent and protests within the community. Faced with increasingly difficult situations, the community began organising itself into political groups. A large number of Punjabis also moved to the United States, but they encountered similar political and social problems.
I didn't understand this Para. If the The Canadian government decided to curtail the influx of Punjabis, how does this contribute to the Conspiracy. Because you have mentioned the conspiracy was aimed basically at the British, not the Canadians and Americans. Due to discrimination, if they form political groups, they are basically revolting against Americans and Canadians. Where are the British here? Please clarify

Ghadar Party

Ghadar meetings were held in Los Angeles, Oxford, Vienna, Washington, and Shanghai.(Why not link Shangai if link all other cities)

Indian revolutionary underground

The Indian revolutionary underground gathered momentum during the first decade of the 1900s, with groups arising in Maharashtra, Bengal, Orissa, Bihar, Uttar Pradesh, Punjab and Madras Presidency.
Did Maharashtra exist during that time. Wasn't it Bombay Presidency since you have mentioned Madras Presidency also

~~More groups were scattered around India.~~
Is this sentence reqd. You have already included almost the entire India

Irish involvement

Irish collaboration with the Ghadarite plans and efforts pre-dated World War I by at least six years.
Could you mention the exact date. Since you have nowhere mentioned the date of WWI.

The conspiracy, during its planning stages, garnered major support from a network formed by the Ghadarites (Which Network was this?), the Irish and the Irish-American reporters and newspapers.

Irish Americans were involved in the early but failed attempts to smuggle arms into India, including a failed attempt on-board the SS Moraitis. (Please provide context to SS Moraitis since there is no wikilink to it)

Germany and the Berlin Committee

Har Dayal had been arrested in the United States in 1914, but he had jumped bail and made his way to Switzerland, leaving the party and publications in the charge of Ram Chandra Bharadwaj. Contact was established with Har Dayal in Switzerland and he was convicned (convinced) of the feasibility of the project.

Please provide more context to persons.

The German Chancellor Theobald von Bethmann Hollweg authorised German activity against India as World War I broke out in September 1914, and Germany decided to actively support the Ghadarite plans.

The German effort was headed by prominent archaeologist and historian Max von Oppenheim, who was also the head of the newly formed Intelligence Bureau for the east.

But there's no context for Roger Casement, Ram Chandra Bharadwaj and Jatin Mukherjee. Mention atleast whether they were political leaders, historians, rebels, etc...

Conspiracy

~~Consequently, a reduced force, estimated to have been as low~~ as 15,000 troops in late 1914, was stationed in India.(Why do you call 15K low. Some may consider it as very very high. POV problem. Just leave it at 15K)

Singh's (Should it be Singh) reported that the situation in India was favourable for a revolution

A number of Ghadar leaders, like Barkatullah and Taraknath Das, used the inflammatory passions surrounding the Komagata Maru (repeated wikilinks) event as a rallying point and successfully brought many disaffected Indians in North America into the party's fold.

East Asia

While the former resource was in plentiful supply (While men were in plentiful) with more and more Indians coming forward to join the Ghadarite cause, obtaining arms for the uprising proved to be more difficult.

Tarak Nath Das (please provide context for him) urged Japan~~ese~~ to align with Germany, on the grounds that American's war preparation could actually be directed against Japan.

Later, in 1915, Abani Mukherjee (please provide context for him) is also known to have tried unsuccessfully to arrange for arms from Japan.

The Ascendancy of Li Yuanhong to Chinese Presidency in 1916, led to the negotiations reopening through his former private secretary (name of this secretary) who resided in the United States at the time.

United States

The Hindu German Conspiracy Trial opened in 1917 in the United States on charges of gun running and at the time was one of the lengthiest and most expensive trials in American legal history.
I tnink this requires a reference.

Although blamed solely on German agents at the time ,(there should be no space before comma) later investigations by the Directorate of Naval Intelligence in the aftermath of the Annie Larsen incident unearthed links between the Black Tom explosion and Franz von Papen, the Irish movement, the Indian movement as well as Communist elements active in the United States.

February 1945

In India, unaware of the delayed shipment and confident of being able to rally the Indian sepoy, the plot for the mutiny took its final shape. Under the plans, the 23rd Cavalry in Punjab was to seize weapons and kill their officers while on roll call on 21 February (21 February shouldn't be linked)

However, Punjab CID successfully infiltrated the conspiracy at the last moment through one Kirpal Singh (Who is this Kirpal Singh; provide context)

Plans for revolt by the 130th Baluchi Regiment at Rangoon on 21 January (21 January shouldn't be linked) were thwarted.

Rash Behari Bose escaped from Lahore and in May 1915 fled to Japan. Other leaders, including Giani Pritam Singh, Swami Satyananda Puri and others fled to Thailand or other ~~sympathetic~~ (POV Problem) nations.

On February 15 (21 February shouldn't be linked), the 5th Light Infantry stationed at Singapore was among the few units to mutiny successfully.

Bagha Jatin

In April 1915, unaware of the failure of the Annie Larsen plan, Papen arranged through Hans Tauscher (no context for this man) a second shipment of arms, consisting of 7,300 Springfield rifles, 1,930 pistols, 10 Gatling guns and nearly 3,000,000 cartridges

From the coast of the Bay of Bengal (needs to be wikilinked), these would be collected by Jatin's group. Jatin estimated that he would be able to win over the 14th Rajput Regiment in Calcutta and cut the line to Madras at Balasore and thus take control of Bengal.

Southeast Asia

Herambalal Gupta and the German consul at Chicago arranged to have German operatives George Paul Boehm, Henry Schult, and Albert Wehde sent to Siam through Manila with the ~~express~~ (exaggeration) purpose of training the Indians.

The Germans, while in Manila, also attempted to transfer the arms cargo of two German ships, the Sachsen and the Suevia, to Siam in a schooner.(, right) seeking refuge at Manila harbour.

The plan was proposed by Vincent Kraft(,) a German planter in Batavia(,) who had been wounded fighting in France.

I recommend you to check commas, fullstops and these minor things throughout the article.

Afghanistan and the Middle East

~~At the time that~~ (When) World War I began(,) Ubaidullah Sindhi proceeded to Kabul to establish contact with the Amir Habibullah of Afghanistan

I recommend you to shorten the prose as much as possible.

The mission was headed by Oskar von Niedermayer (Context missing) and included Werner Otto von Hentig, the German diplomatic representative to Kabul, as well as Barkatullah and other prominent nationalists from the Berlin Committee.

During it('s) journey through Persia, the expedition established contacts with the tribes of the Indo-Iranian border and encouraged them to strike against British interests.

Please go through the article a few more times and fix these silly minor issues.

Culmination

AtSolan,(Space between At & Solan') Private James Daly led about 70 Rangers in mutiny and tried to storm the armoury, which the loyal guard successfully defended.

I didn't find any major pproblem anywhere else except commas and minor mistakes. They can be fixed by going through the article again and again. It can easily attain FA status once these issues are resolved.Thankyou, Kensplanet^Talk_E-mail^{Contributions}

Reply to Comments

Thanks for your very helpful comments. I have implemented all that you have suggested, save for the name of Li YuanHong's secretary's name, since I cant find this. More comments would be very welcome. rueben_lys (talk · contribs) 22:55, 2 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Anand (2004 film)

This article (currently B-class) has been substantially developed over the past couple of weeks by me. I'd love critique from my fellow-editors so that I can bring it further up on quality. Regards, Mspraveen 08:12, 13 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Historical definitions of races in India

Various fringe views are being aired, and more input/review from Indian editors would be helpful. --JWB 08:17, 12 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Dravidian people

Various fringe views are being aired, and more input/review from Indian editors would be helpful. --JWB 08:17, 12 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]

North South Foundation

I think this should be nominated because we as a community have worked hard to make it a nice article from a 2-4 sentence stub. Whaatt 19:30, 30 September 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Tata Elxsi

It would be very helpful if someone peer-review this article. Kiran Nair 12:01, 31 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Krishna Institute of Engineering and Technology

The article is now B class. Please help improve its level --deltaG 20:13, 08 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Little India (magazine)

I think that a good peer review will help us improve this article a good bit. Arundhati lejeune 08:53, 13 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Mspraveen

Now that it is of a stub class, it means that it is a real article. However, it would need a lot of work to be done on the breadth of the article. Good checklists to use for the article are WP:WIAFA and WP:WIAGA. A key to remember is that the articles on Wikipedia (it being an encyclopedia) should assume a neutral point of view and ample referencing is encouraged for the veracity of the article.

The article, in specific, needs a proper structure like the lead section, its origins (history), the style of the magazine (features right from the editorial to the choice of articles within it), any awards that it won, any special notable features of the magazine, any special/notable columnists and so on. Maybe, an article that classifies as a publication is The Economist.

To further develop your article, you may use the article development guide. Good luck! If you have any further questions, please revert to me on my talk page. —Preceding signed but undated comment was added at 06:35, 14 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]

RegentsPark

Do note also that, the way the article is currently written, it could easily be deleted for lack of notability (see WP:N). You need to show that the publication is notable and you can do that by fixing your citations. For example, the first sentence needs a Reliable Source to back up the claim of largest circulating publication. Later in the article, there is a reference to www.bpaww.com, the actual page (with access date) should be included as a link in the article. The same applies to the two awards mentioned in the article as well as to the claim in the last sentence (any reasonable source will do for a 'believed' type of statement). --RegentsPark (talk) 21:08, 2 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Combined Defence Services Examination

i created this page with the intention of providing info to the aspirants who wish get into the armed forces....i would like to know about what the fellow wikipedians think of it.... Gprince007 15:00, 15 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Union Public Service Commission

i feel that a peer review will help us improve this page and make it more informative...constructive criticisms welcome ... Gprince007 14:52, 15 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

This Article does not have a single line citation.
Lead should be a summary of the entrie article. My opinion is, read the lead sentence by sentence and write a few lines in the article body on the facts stated. Or visa versa.Sumanch (talk) 23:03, 24 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Chikkamagaluru District

Adding peer review request from User:Amarrg. -- Ganeshk (talk) 14:41, 23 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Kensplanet

Please expand the Lead in. I am sure Chikkamagaluru District has more to offer.
There is a Chickmagalure in the InfoBox section. What is it? I am confused. A foreigner will be totally confused. Please explain.......
Inadequate data on History.
Industries should be a sub-section under Economy. I suggest merging the Industries section with Economy.
Education is totally a mess. Why does the article mention about the institutions in the Technical education section. Best would be a stand-alone Education section. I'll continue-----Kensplanet (talk) 17:22, 2 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]