Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Assessment/Joseph Maxwell

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Joseph Maxwell

I am nominating this article to be reviewed for A-Class as I believe it meets the criteria. I have made substantial improvements to the article over the past few weeks and it has been recently passed as a GA. I am willing to made further edits for improvement. Any and all comments and suggestions welcome. Thanks, Abraham, B.S. (talk) 15:32, 4 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Support with comments,

The link to the Spring Offensive can be considered an Easter Egg (this has actually come up for me before), and so I would suggest having the text of the link read: Throughout the spring of 1918, the 18th Battalion was involved in operations to repel the German spring offensive. (Or something similar, which you believe fits better.)

That's how I was originally going to write it, however the repitition of "spring" didn't sound right. I'll leave it the way it is at the moment and see what others think. Thanks mate, Abraham, B.S. (talk) 03:02, 5 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Otherwise, I can't really comment. The lead can probably use an expansion, if it's possible, but perhaps others would disagree with me. It looks good, so I am happy to support. Good luck! JonCatalán^(Talk) 02:55, 5 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comment

The section on his early life could be expanded is there any infomation about about what schooling he had ?
- There is no further information I have been able to obtain on his early life. Abraham, B.S. (talk) 10:49, 5 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

A member of the Senior Cadets for three years - was this Army or Navy Cadets or another orginisation if you have the detail it should be added.
- Army: clarified. Abraham, B.S. (talk) 10:49, 5 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Do we know which engineering works ?
- It isn't specified in any sources, all I know is that it was near Newcastle. Abraham, B.S. (talk) 10:49, 5 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

HMAT = His Majestys Australiian Transport ? I dont know what the abreviation is for, on searching Wiki it seems to appear only with Australian Articles. Could it be spelled out with HMAT in brackets.
- I have not seen this typically done for any other ship name (eg. SS, HMS or HMAS), so I will leave it as is at the moment, and see what others think. Abraham, B.S. (talk) 10:49, 5 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

link the Battle of Hill 60 (Gallipoli)
- Done. Abraham, B.S. (talk) 10:49, 5 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

A tank that preceded the advance immediately became the object of enemy fire - do we know which model of tank.
- All that is specified is "a tank". Abraham, B.S. (talk) 10:49, 5 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

A few minor points from a very good article, one question do we know why they would not let him serve fully in WW11 ? Jim Sweeney (talk) 09:55, 5 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I'm not exactly sure, as it isn't specified, but my guess would be on the grounds of his age and possibly health factors. Abraham, B.S. (talk) 10:49, 5 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Geez I'm a dope. The only source I don't re-check has information on this! It was on the grounds of his age. Abraham, B.S. (talk) 12:08, 5 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

SUPPORT HMAT is not a well known abbreviation like HMS ,USS , HMAS but I can live with it. Jim Sweeney (talk) 11:35, 5 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Support I reviewed and passed this for GA just recently and see no reason not to kick it to the next level. Not long compared to some bios but as comprehensive as one could expect for the subject, which is what counts - and very well sourced. To respond to an earlier comment, given the overall length, I think a two-para intro works here. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 06:59, 6 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

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