Wikipedia:Peer review/The Gathering Storm (novel)/archive1
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Put a lot of work into the article, I'd like to get a little insight and input before I take it to GA. The theme and reception sections need a little polish, but I'll get to them soon enough. Source check would also be appreciated. One issue is the length of the plot section, I can't find ways to trim it myself, not without earning the scrutiny (and reverts) of other edits. It's a very long and complicated book and series, hard to keep out of universe too, any advice on trimming would be greatly appreciated.
Cheers, Rehevkor ✉ 01:01, 16 December 2009 (UTC)
- 'is the title of' srsly?
- No very quick sketch of Sanderson?
- 'Rand/Egwene' sentence repeated in summary section
- Synopsis in general assumes you already know what Arad Doman etc are. (I do because I'm a fan, but otherwise it is impenetrable.)
- Might want to split synopsis section into Rand and Egwene and maybe Others section.
- first 2 paragraphs in intro might make more sense elsewhere. Do all readers immediately need to know 'first we was all it's gonna be one big book and then the publishers were all nuh-uh and so we were all well alright then 3 books it is'? Especially since most is repeated there.
- Reception and theme are way too small. It ought to be a urgent topic of interest after 3 screens of material on Jordan's death & Sanderson's publishing to know how well he did, yet... Themes is also intrinsically some of the most interesting material to cover - it's literary analysis - but also some of the hardest and most evanescent & hard to research later material. So this is probably the most important thing to do.
--Gwern (contribs) 00:18 26 December 2009 (GMT)