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Index of all requests for feedback

Most Worshipful Prince Hall Grand Lodge of Georgia

Most Worshipful Prince Hall Grand Lodge of Georgia —Preceding unsigned comment added by Jsnow1 (talk • contribs) 15:00, 29 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

At the moment the tone is not appropriate. It reads like a research paper or essay, not an encyclopedic article. I would suggest that you read articles about other Lodges and see how they are laid out and formatted. It also looks like you have extracted a lot of the source material into the article rather than citing it. Please take a look at WP:CITE for help with citing sources. Hope this helps. – ukexpat (talk) 18:33, 24 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

User:Georgesh1/Heroes In the Sky (game)

Hello. I am looking for a friendly user who would like to look at my draft that I created. It is about a computer game. The draft page is there as a link. Any inputs, additions, and a little bit of deletion would be welcome.Georgesh1 (talk) 3:39, 12 January 2010 (UTC)

You will need to find a few more reliable sources to demonstrate the notability of the game per WP:N. Significant coverage is required and the current single source is not sufficient. – ukexpat (talk) 21:35, 24 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Chris Kovarik

I have juts written my first article on Austrialian mountain bike legend Chris Kovarik and would appreciate any opinions/feeds back on the article. You can find it in my userspace here http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:TinaEPO/Chris_Kovarik —Preceding unsigned comment added by TinaEPO (talk • contribs) 15:54, 12 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

The article is at the moment completely unsourced. You will need to add some references to reliable sources to demonstrate the subject's notability per WP:ATHLETE. I have tagged the article accordingly. – ukexpat (talk) 22:03, 24 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

LocalEats

User:Cathrjohnson/LocalEats

Summary of new article: Description of website/smartphone app/book series LocalEats, published by Where The Locals Eat.

This is my first article, so any advice is very much welcome! Thanks.

Cathrjohnson —Preceding unsigned comment added by Cathrjohnson (talk • contribs) 17:57, 12 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

It reads like an advertisement--if you could flesh it out with some additional references that would be helpful. But you do have I think enough decent references for notability. Nuujinn (talk) 12:39, 25 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

George T. Heery

This is the first full article I've written and wanted to open this up for review. The subject is George_T._Heery, a famous American architect who is most notable for his contributions to the foundation of the Construction Program Management industry. Regarding notability, Heery's first firm Heery International, is an internationally known company and Heery is widely known throughout the design and construction industry. I am continuing to do research to improve the article but felt that the article has reached a point where it might be ready for moving to main space soon. The one outstanding item I've marked for citation is the number of construction projects executed using a particular delivery method developed by the subject; I'm awaiting information from the General Services Adminstration, which apparently uses this process quite often. If I cannot locate information which can be cited to support that number I think that the sentence should be removed. Look forward to your help! --Drewprops (talk) 22:09, 14 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Update: I've gone ahead and moved the article into mainspace and have updated the link here to point to that article. Look forward to help with reviewing the article!--Drewprops (talk) 18:43, 19 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

The National Institute for Metalworking Skills

User:Nims22030/new NIMS - — Preceding unsigned comment added by Nims22030 (talk • contribs)

There are a couple of major problems with the draft as it stands now. First, it does not have any references to reliable sources demonstrating how or why the subject meets the notability guidelines set out at WP:ORG; second, it is rather promotional in tone (see WP:SPAM) and will need to be toned down before moving to the mainspace. – ukexpat (talk) 18:51, 26 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Draft article

The National Institute for Metalworking Skills (NIMS) was formed in 1995 by the metalworking trade associations to develop and maintain globally competitive American workforce. NIMS sets skills standards for the industry, certifies individual skills against the standards and accredits training programs that meet NIMS quality requirements.

NIMS operates under rigorous and highly disciplined processes as the only developer of American National Standards for the nation’s metalworking industry accredited by the American National Standards Institute (ANSI).

NIMS Stakeholders

NIMS has a stakeholder base of over 6,000 metalworking companies. The major trade associations in the industry- the Association for Manufacturing Technology, the American Machine Tool Distributors' Association, the National Tooling & Machining Association, the Precision Machine Products Association, the Precision Metalforming Association, and the Tooling and Manufacturing Association have invested over $7.5 million in private funds for the development of the NIMS standards and its credentials. The associations also contribute annually to sustain NIMS operations and are committed to the upgrading and maintenance of the standards.

NIMS Program Accreditation

NIMS accredits training programs that meet its quality requirements. The NIMS accreditation requirements include an on-site audit and evaluation by a NIMS industry team that reviews and conducts on-site inspections of all aspects of the training programs, including administrative support, curriculum, plant, equipment and tooling, student and trainee progress, industry involvement, instructor qualifications and safety.

Officials governing NIMS accredited programs report annually on progress and are subject to re-accreditation on a five year cycle. As of December 31, 2006 there were 162 NIMS accredited programs in operation. An additional 86 institutions and firms were in the process of completing the accreditation process.

There are 105 certified NIMS Team Leaders from private industry who lead the on-site audits.

NIMS Competency-based Apprenticeship System

NIMS has launched a new Competency-based Apprenticeship System for the nation’s metalworking industry. The NIMS system represents a dramatic departure from the time based system and integrates the NIMS national standards and skill certifications in defining and measuring required competencies.

Developed in partnership with the United States Department of Labor, the new system is the result of two years of work. Over 300 companies participated in the deliberations and design.

The new National Guideline Standards for NIMS Competency-based Apprenticeship have been approved by the Department of Labor. NIMS has trained Department of Labor apprenticeship staff at the national and state level in the new system.

Governance

NIMS is governed by a 24 person Board of Directors, the majority of whom are metalworking company executives. The Board also has representatives from training institutions, education, state government and organized labor.

NIMS financial operations are audited and reported annually in accordance with the Office of Management and Budget Circular A-133 and the provisions of the Single Audit Act.

Homepage: http://www.nims-skills.org FAQs: https://www.nims-skills.org/web/nims/39 [[Category:Articles created via the Article Wizard]]

Navy Hospital Charleston History

Navy Hospital Charleston History User:Garyrg398/Navy_Hospital_Charleston_History Garyrg398 (talk) 18:54, 28 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Looks pretty good. I moved the article to History of the Naval Health Clinic Charleston, but because it is not just about the history, it should probably be moved again to Naval Health Clinic Charleston. I have done quite a lot of reformatting per WP:MOS and WP:LAYOUT. Hope this helps. – ukexpat (talk) 20:12, 26 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Cambridge Innovation Center (CIC)

User:CambridgeQueen/Sandbox Cambridge Innovation Center

CambridgeQueen (talk) 17:46, 29 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

First_Unitarian_Church_of_Memphis

Please review my Wikipedia article; this is the first one I have ever created. Thank you very much.

First Unitarian Church of Memphis

User:RoseyCat/First Unitarian Church of Memphis

RoseyCat (talk) 22:23, 29 January 2010 (UTC)16:21, 29 January 2010 (CST)[reply]

I'm new at this, but I think if you drop the "we" and put it all in third person, and get references from outside of wikipedia, you're off to a good start. Where you have references to wikipedia, use the internal link format using brackets, but you need some verifiable sources from newspapers, books, and the like. Nice start! Nuujinn (talk) 02:25, 30 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I believe that I made the recommended changes. However, I am uncertain about the formatting of my reference and hope that it is correct.RoseyCat (talk) 00:27, 31 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Good improvements! I took the liberty of working on the references in the first couple of paragraphs, and editing the external links. For internal references to wikipedia, just put the article name in double brackets, and if that doesn't work in the flow of the paragraph, use a bar to separate the article name and the text you'd like to appear, eg." Cats are popular pets." For links to outside sources, see WP:cite, but I put in an example for you. Hope that helps, Nuujinn (talk) 12:07, 1 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Blufeld

User:Illumini08/Blufeld

Helo everyone, I have just completed an article on an artist named Blufeld (David Hearn) and would appreciate your judgement and feedback on its content and layout. Thank you for your time!

Best Regards, Diana Bauer —Preceding unsigned comment added by Illumini08 (talk • contribs) 23:11, 29 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Well, first off, sorry that it's taken so long to get you some feedback. This article has a major problem in that it's promotional and lacks reliable 2nd and 3rd party sources. Using the artist's various web pages isn't sufficient to establish notability. What you need are references like newspaper and magazine articles, on or off line. Nuujinn (talk) 21:24, 6 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Memorial Laws: Laws Dedicated to the Memory of a Victim

Draft text added by Fleibman (talk • contribs) 20:25, 30 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Moved to user subpage: User:Fleibman/Memorial Laws. – ukexpat (talk) 20:29, 30 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry that it's taking us this long to get to this article. It looks like you've got some experience with the subject, but you need references to reliable sources to support the article. It's hard to ascertain whether this topic is notable without such refrerences. Also, the prose is very dense--but if you can get some references, I'd be happy to help you with the prose, just drop me a note on my talk page if you want help with that. Nuujinn (talk) 21:28, 6 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Lindsay Vickery

Requesting review of the entry on the Australian composer Lindsay Vickery 124.182.21.77 (talk) 08:18, 31 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Russian battleship Sevastopol (1895)

Just want to see what needs to be done to improve this before CSD can be survived. Have already added infobox based on User:Sturmvogel 66's comment. User:Buggie111/ Russian battleship Sevastopol (1895) Buggie111 (talk) 16:36, 31 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Oh, it should be 1892, not 95 Buggie111 (talk) 00:19, 1 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Sherif Sonbol

Sherif Sonbol (Egyptian photographer). Someone else already did a small article in German, so I've been working in the English version and would appreciate someone's opinion to see if I can put this one on up.

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Welle_1/Sherif_Sonbol

Thanks, --Welle 1 (talk) 20:51, 31 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

The career section is problematic, that kind of details is not needed nor suitable for Wikipedia. You should avoid words like Unfortunately, and sentences like "he managed to shake the foundations of Egyptian interior photography". See WP:Peacock. Sole Soul (talk) 22:43, 31 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks will work on it. Will try to re-locate and add some of the Arabic original references (like the interior photography comment). —Preceding unsigned comment added by Welle 1 (talk • contribs) 20:21, 5 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

DarkSpace

I have done extensive copyediting for the article DarkSpace and added over 30 references. The article still needs a few more sources, some copyediting, and maybe an image or two. (large diff link) Any feedback on what else it needs would be appreciated. Thanks! --Culix (talk) 05:00, 2 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Looks good, nice work! – ukexpat (talk) 20:28, 2 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Lily Adamczyk

HI, I am trying to write about the Artist Lily Adamczyk and I could use some feedback please. I would also like help posting some of her pictures into the article. This is my very first article.

Thanks Oils4you (talk) 21:51, 2 February 2010 (UTC) —Preceding unsigned comment added by Oils4you (talk • contribs) 08:30, 2 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Brand Tribalism

Hi I have added more relevant citations for your approval. The article is called Brand Tribalism

Thanks you.

Jozette Heerman (talk) 12:12, 2 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Portofino framework

I wrote a new article about the Portofino framework. It is currently under my personal page and available for your review.

Portofino is an open-source web application framework written in Java and based on model-driven engineering. It was already mentioned by others in Model-driven engineering, Commercial open source applications, Domain-driven design and Metamodeling, often as "ManyDesigns Portofino".

Predonzani (talk) 10:58, 3 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Liberty Island

Liberty Island expanded and re-organized articleDjflem (talk) 14:14, 3 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Aage Giodesen

Aage_Giodesen Article is about the Danish artist Aage Giodesen with a number of references, and includes an example of his work from Wikimedia. --whb123 (talk) 15:05, 3 February 2010 (UTC)Whbonney 2/3/10[reply]

Skirmish Paintball

I am requesting feedback for Skirmish Paintball

Skirmish paintball is one of the leading Paintball Networks across the UK, providing thousands and thousands of customers with paintball games across the UK, and so far there is no mention of it on Wikipedia.

Chriscollins405 (talk) 16:12, 3 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

LindaFowler/Princeton Symphony Orchestra

Dear Wikipedia editors:

Would you kindly review the following draft for Princeton Symphony Orchestra? Many thanks and best,

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Lindafowler/The_Princeton_Symphony_Orchestra

Lindafowler (talk) 18:47, 3 February 2010 (UTC)Linda Fowler 2/3/10[reply]

Enviralment

User:Weemz/Enviralment

Hello, I'm a new member to Wikipedia and this is my first of hopefully many submissions. I figured I would start with something small and easy like the site Enviralment to ensure that I get the submission process down pat before moving on to bigger and lengthier submissions. The work I'm submitting is a Canadian blog called Enviralment, which is similar to Small Dead Animals and others of that ilk. It has been featured on some predominant Canadian sites, most notably The Green Party of Canada.

I would appreciate some feedback and opinions on my first submission.

Thanks you.

--Weemz (talk) 19:30, 3 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Mark Collard

I've posted this article about User:In2play/Mark Collard who has been instrumental in popularising and developing the field of adventure education in Australia. He has also written 3 top-selling texts in regards activities used in the field. This is only a start, and I am still looking for more sources to add further information about his accomplishments over the past 20 years. I'm looking for feedback, as this is my first Wikipedia article contribution.

I woudl liek to get some feedback about how to create those boxes which appear in top right-hand side which give vital stats, such as DOB, spouse, kids, etc.

cheers, Will 4 Feb 2010 In2play (talk) 01:55, 4 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Granary Buildings, Leeds

Any feedback on this article would be welcome.

This is an important, historic building but there doesn't seem to be any mention of it in the Leeds and Liverpool Canal or Architecture of Leeds articles.

EricPolymath (talk) 09:30, 4 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Playground (2009 film)

I would appreciate a review of an article on the documentary, Playground, (2009 film) User:Ekso8/Playground (2009 film) which focuses on the child sex trade in the United States and was released last year. The film was directed by Libby Spears and its executive producers include George Clooney, Grant Heslov and Steven Soderbergh.

Ekso8 (talk) 18:42, 4 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Raptor Conservation

Hello!

I submitted an article about Raptor Conservation concerns as a Conservation Biology class project. Would you please give me some feedback so that I may be rid of the notation above the article?

Thanks!

Mikayla Boche 24.119.206.106 (talk) 05:11, 6 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Nice work! I have reviewed and made a few, very minor formatting edits. – ukexpat (talk) 20:47, 2 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Xena: Warrior Princess

Xena: Warrior Princess. Touchy article, with strong and differing opinions. I have recently restructured it, improved style, added bits. Require general feedback on how to improve it further, for self and others who regularly patrol it. Would like reclassification to C/B class if appropriate. Bards (talk) 16:11, 6 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Commotio

User:OxfordSinger/Commotio

Looking for initial feedback, please - first Wiki contribution. Thank you. OxfordSinger (talk) 16:54, 6 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

P.T. Barnum Awards

P.T. Barnum Awards Hello, looking for feedback on this page on a Tufts University awards show for excellence in the entertainment industry. Please let me know if you see any errors or have more information. Thank you Carchi01 (talk) 22:35, 7 February 2010 (UTC)carchi01 2/5/10[reply]

Denielle Hann

User:Nlmusicguy/Denielle Hann

New to Wiki. Please provide feedback/edits on Denielle Hann. It must also be posted to wiki by someone who has that ability.

Thanks very much Nlmusicguy (talk) 15:23, 9 February 2010 (UTC)Nlmusicguy 09 Feb 2010[reply]

Review LTX-Credence article

LTX-Credence Corporation

Two companies have merged, updating the historical data. Easy review. Ref'ed AP article on the subject, sourced by the newly merged company. Rbenech (talk) 22:21, 9 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Bill Zadick

I've written a biography article for User:Rosalita923/Bill_Zadick, a US amateur wrestler who has won a world championship. It's the first article I've ever created, so I'd be grateful for any and all feedback regarding anything you feel needs to be added, deleted, or cited differently.

Many thanks! --Rosalita923 (talk) 17:27, 10 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

New Article: American Car Designer Eric Stoddard

Request to review information about Automobile Designer Eric Stoddard. Review resources on related car designs, please.

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Eric_Stoddard

Speedstudio (talk) 13:14, 11 February 2010 (UTC) SpeedStudioDesign.com[reply]

You have a decent amount of resources. I don't really see anything wrong. Maybe remove some of the duplicate content under "Career."

Aimelise (talk) 13:50, 11 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Tito in ekšn

Tito in ekšn punk rock group from the 90s

Partizanchek (talk) 17:16, 11 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Hardys Animal Farm (User:Thestuarthardy/Hardys_Animal_Farm)

User:Thestuarthardy/Hardys Animal Farm is a page I'm looking to submit for promotion to the main wikipedia site, describing a large tourist attraction and the features found on it. I have read all the tutorial articles, and this is my first attempt that I've put together for public consumption. However, I was looking to get some feedback from those of you who are more experienced at this and some pointers to ensure the content of the page is appropriate.

Please have a look through and give me your feedback (however critical!) and I'll do my best to apply your suggestions to the article.

Thanks in advance, Stuart Hardy

Thestuarthardy (talk) 18:01, 11 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

French Bull, LLC

French Bull, LLC http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User_talk:161e61 fb161 2/11/10161e61 (talk) 19:09, 11 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

At the moment the draft is way too promotional in tone (please read WP:Spam) to be moved to the mainspace. It also will need references to significant coverage in reliable sources to support notability per WP:CORP. – ukexpat (talk) 20:02, 11 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Uyama Hiroto

A beginner here, writing an article about an established Japanese musician and producer who ironically does not have much information posted about him on the web. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Elliotmc (talk • contribs) 22:32, 11 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

[1]

Hi I'm preparing a new article about the Scottish writer, Mark Fleming. I believe he is notable because his work is concerned with promoting a positive image of mental health issues.

Would appreciate feedback about the layout / content of this article.

(When previewed, why do hyperlinks appear as numbers rather than text - is this something to do with hyperlinks needing to be verified?) —Preceding unsigned comment added by ColinKNewman (talk • contribs) 13:16, 12 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Rather than [http://www.laurahird.com/], try <ref>[http://www.laurahird.com/ this is the laura bird website]</ref>. See WP:CITEHOW. You could temporarily add a {{reflist}} during the preview, if you wanted to see how it would look. Usually only one {{reflist}} is in an article, at the bottom. jmcw (talk) 13:33, 16 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Health Advocate Inc.

I would like to have my article Health Advocate Inc. reviewed.

Thanks for your help, Arianne13 (talk) 09:38, 13 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Looks like a good start! I've done a llttle cleaning up and editing to make it more wiki-like. I also moved it to Health Advocate, as we don't use the Inc. part of the company's name in the article title. The article could still really use some incoming links. Dori ❦ (Talk ❖ Contribs ❖ Review) ❦ 10:36, 15 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Teaching Writing in the United States

I posted this article on Feb 6 and have not yet received feedback. How should I go about getting feedback on this article?

Diana Leddy (talk) 15:02, 13 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Nice article. I made some minor stylistic changes.

My main observations:

Two of the sections start in a style that seems more suited to essay writing than encyclopedia writing. One starts "Sensing a serious gap...". The other starts "Emerging from both the Writing Process...". I don't know whether the format is officially discouraged, but I didn't like it.
The lede is too cryptic. Check out WP:LEAD, in particular "The lead should be able to stand alone as a concise overview of the article."--SPhilbrick T 16:56, 13 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Reconnective Therapy

Reconnective Therapy Reconnective Therapy ```` —Preceding unsigned comment added by Psullivan7 (talk • contribs) 13:03, 14 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Crazy Waiting

user:chasingflowers/crazywaiting A recent South Korean movie that I love. Several of the actors have their own Wikipedia pages already, so I thought it would be notable. Chasingflowers (talk) 01:28, 15 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Physique 57

Physique 57 Physique57

Please assist me with ensuring this article meets all guidelines for Wikipedia. Thank you.

FitHealthy1 (talk) 05:40, 15 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I'm concerned about whether it meets the Notability threshold. You do have references, some of which probably qualify as reliable sources, and some of which may not, but the reliable sources mentioning Physique 57 barely mention it. I'm not familiar enough with the sources you cite to know which qualify and which do not - you might be fine, but this is just a heads up that there could be a problem.

You have included references, which is good, as many new editors fail on that score, but please look at footnotes and WP:CITE to see how they should be formatted.

In "Future locations", you say "The first California location will open in May, 2010 at 320 N. Canon Drive in Beverly Hills." Wikipedia has a policy called WP:CRYSTAL, to avoid the problem, you could say "planned to open" or similar wording, and it should have a reference.--SPhilbrick T 17:15, 16 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Feedback requested, please.

Hello,

May I please get some feedback on the following page?

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Weatherlands/European_Climate_Assessment_and_Dataset_%28ECA%26D%29

I would like to make it live as soon as possible since our website, eca.knmi.nl, has been updated as well.

Note: All images are intended to be copyrighted as open to the public. They are generated by "using" the website which anyone can do.

Thanks for your time, please respond in "my talk."

Good day, ~WL

Weatherlands (talk) 10:24, 15 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

This post says "our website"; what is your connection with this organization? --Orange Mike | Talk 17:45, 16 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Orangemike, sorry it has taken me so long to respond. I say "our website" because I sometimes work on the project and they gave me the task of sharing information about the database. It is a database of freely available data that is downloadable on the website so no costs are involved at all. The project was initiated by the European Climate Support Network (ECSN) but is coordinated by KNMI. Do you still consider this a conflict of interest?

Also, can you please explain to me why all of my external links have been broken?

Thanks,

Weatherlands (talk) 10:18, 2 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

French Bull, LLC Revision

French Bull, LLC[[2]]

I've revised this article any feedback would be outstanding

thank you 2.16.10 161e61 (talk) 21:00, 16 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Joseph Matheny

New unreviewed article/Joseph Matheny

(````) —Preceding unsigned comment added by Setianson (talk • contribs) 18:43, 17 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Edwin Hodge

New unreviewed article/Edwin Hodge

tjbw (talk) 21:03, 17 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

User:Derrynoel/Roland Carl Backhouse

This is my first article and I am attempting to marshal the information into a standard format. I am almost finished but need to get my text into the proper layout. Many thanks. Derrynoel Derrynoel (talk) 21:47, 17 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Progressive Death Metal

I've been working on a Progressive Death Metal article in my users page, I'd just like someone to have a look before I publish it.

The problem in the past has been that there aren't enough prog death sources but I think I've found enough. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Chairmaneoin (talk • contribs) 22:00, 17 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I moved the article off your main user page to a subpage and started a new talkpage ("Discussion" page) just for the article with handy search tools. I also posted a welcome template on your talkpage which has some helpful links. Your goal will be to find a at least a few more sources that don't just mention the subject but actually talk about it. You don't have to source every statement but adding more sources to the first several paragraphs will help. Keep up the good work! -- Banjeboi 23:38, 17 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

History of Hartford City, Indiana

I have added some sections to History of Hartford City, Indiana since it received its initial rating. What does it need to get beyond a "B"? Does it have too much, too little? What is the preferred style of footnotes and references? TwoScars (talk) 01:25, 18 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Article quality ratings are not, in general, as far as I know, undertaken by the editors who visit this feedback page. Ratings are generally managed by projects. The article you mention is part of Wikipedia:WikiProject Indiana. Usually, projects has a list of volunteers you can contact. I don't see one for this project. I suggest you post on the project Talk page, and/or directly contact some editors who regularly post there.--SPhilbrick T 16:53, 7 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

List of Academy Award Winning Families

User:Klantry01/List of Academy Award Winning Families

List of Academy Award winners related to other winners, subdivided into Extended Families, Siblings, and Couples. Started it after moviemom posted trivia that there was only one 3-generation winning family (The Huston's), when in fact there are two others (The Coppola's and the Farrow/Previn/Allen's), and I couldn't find a reference.

Main concern: I can't say for sure I've done the full geneology on every oscar winner. There may be an ex-spouse, in-law, or cousin I've missed. How should I reflect that?

Klantry01 (talk) 21:40, 18 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

p.s. Open to input on an alternate title. Current one, strictly interpreted, could be "the families of anyone who has won an award." List of Multiple Academy Award Winning Families is similarly ambiguous. List of Academy Award Winners Related to Other Winners is clunky. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Klantry01 (talk • contribs) 13:33, 19 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Environmental Law in India: Judicial Activism, Public Interest Litigation and Green Benches

Can someone please help me with formatting and with general comments on this article about environmental law in india Thank you --Ahhjean33 (talk) 23:25, 18 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Here is a link to the article User:Ahhjean33/new article name here ~~ GB fan ~~ ^talk 23:30, 18 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Quite good. Some formatting issues:

Wikipedia generally puts reference citations after punctuation, in particular just after the period that closes a sentence.
Wikipedia generally uses "logical quotation" meaning that punctuation is palced inside quote markss only if it was part of the original quotation.
Wikipeida normally uses "straight quotes", not "curly" or "angled" quotes in which the opening quote is different from the closing quote.
The use of named references (see Help:Footnotes and citing sources allows multiple references to the same paper or source to go to a single footnote, which improves consistence. I have made this change in one case, as an example.
When a source is cited as a specific reference to a specific statment, it is redundant to include it also as a "general reference" -- that is, to list it in the references section without being attached to a specific citation. Some such sources might be listed in a "Further reading" section.
You might want to consider the list defined reference format, which separates the detailed reference metadata from the body text. It does have the disadvantage of requiring two edits to add a reference if section editing is being used.
There needed to be more wiki-links to other wikipedia articles, I have added several.
I personally recommend the use of citation templates, but this is not required. I have converted the first two references as an example. The reference toolbar gadget (found in the gadgets tab of the preferences dialog) makes adding such references easier, but sometiems manual editing is still needed, as not all options are supported by this gadget.

I hope this is helpful. DES ^(talk) 07:12, 21 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

International media reaction to Barack Obama's election

I would like to invite feedback on this draft article on the international media reaction to Barack Obama's 2008 election. Please note that images are available to improve the article's look and will be added once the page is published. Please leave comments on the draft's discussion page. Thank you! --Amandaroyal (talk) 19:06, 19 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

User:UAB Wiki/Underwater Archaeology Branch, Naval History & Heritage Command

I have undertaken my first wikipedia page to draw attention to a very interesting branch of the NHHC which does not get recognized, although there are numerous mentions of UAB in H.L. Hunley and CSS Alabama. I feel confident my page is well written, but I am having a hard time knowing whether I have the necessary references to be considered encyclopedic. Any feed back would be most welcome. User:UAB Wiki/Underwater Archaeology Branch, Naval History & Heritage Command

UAB Wiki (talk) 21:24, 19 February 2010 (UTC)Leachers, 19 February 2010[reply]

Decent start, fair amount of interesting information, however, you need some work on references. I assume some of the material came from here, but you need to identify the source of each fact. Check out WP:CITE and footnotes for help.

I also suspect that there are dedicated editors at this task force page who may be interested in providing specific help. Just contact one or more at their talk page.--SPhilbrick T 02:05, 21 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Bungaroosh

I've just written a draft of my first article, User:Shermarama/Bungaroosh, and I'd appreciate some feedback. It's heavily based on one source, which reflects my experience of this peculiar building material very well. Other sources are proving difficult to find, because it's a really specifically regional building material only found in the Brighton area - its obscurity, the fact that most people don't know what sort of mess they've bought, is part of its notability. But does it sound sufficiently notable for wikipedia? Worth carrying on trying to find other references? --Shermarama (talk) 22:03, 19 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I'm not _sure_ if it's notable, given it's limited usage--but then Clutch is just about as notable. It sounds like an interesting topic tho, and there are a lot of different building materials up here. I did find a couple of references:

http://www.highbeam.com/doc/1P2-5278654.html

http://www.buildingopinions.com/Archive/S/stamford.html

Also see http://www.urbanwords.info/supplement.php?initial=B, there's reference to Rob Fraser in regard to Bungaroosh, you might see if you can track that down.

Nuujinn (talk) 01:35, 20 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the feedback. The Rob Fraser article (the one referred to on urbanwords is the same single reference I've got) seems to be the only source article anywhere - would adding other references that mention bungaroosh, rather than being about it, help establish its notability? --Shermarama (talk) 19:29, 20 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

It depends on the nature of the source. What you really want are books or newspaper articles, but if you find a reference to a particular aspect of the topic, other sources might work. If you're local to the area, you might contact newspapers or libraries to see if they have any references.

Take a look at this:

http://www.independent.co.uk/news/uk/impact-funding-to-aid-heritage-1428094.html

I think that's a good source, since it's from a reliable newspaper and references a public program designed to cope with the problems related to the building material. Nuujinn (talk) 20:06, 20 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

General Paul Johnson

I wrote an article on General Paul Johnson, and I'm looking for some feedback. I found a few sources, and he meets the guidelines for notability, but I haven't found much on his actual career. I'm hoping someone could help with that. Rin tin tin 1996 (talk) 15:32, 20 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

It definitely needs a fair amount of work. Check out WP:CITE and footnotes to see how to add references. (While you listed two external sites that should qualify as references, you didn't include the footnotes to identify the source of information.)

This page is for general help, I suggest that you talk to someone with experience regarding military biographies, as there is a style and format desired for those biographies, and those involved in the project are likely to be interested in helping and know how to find additional sources to help you.

Check out Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/United States military history task force, in general. Note the list of members, along with their areas of interest/expertise. For example, User:Colgator lists US Air Force. Consider leaving a note at the talk page of one or more of the project, and I'll bet they'll be willing to help. If you don't know how to leave a message at a Talk page, click on the word "talk" after their name, then click on "new Section" at the top of the page, and ask them to contact you. They'll respond at your talk page.--SPhilbrick T 01:32, 21 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Pasquill Cavaliero

Hi folks,

Please provide some feedback on the new page. I'm especially interested in informed or expert opinion from those with a knowledge of early modern literature and theology, if we have such experts on board. Thanks!--BenJonson (talk) 16:56, 20 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I posted a request here

You are encouraged to contact Ret.Prof yourself, he promises not to bite.--SPhilbrick T 22:13, 20 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Inclusion in New Jersey page

Is there a way to include magazines in the New Jersey page? I'd like to include New Jersey Business magazine, the oldest business magazine in New Jersey. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Vinlynne (talk • contribs) 17:17, 20 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

There is a section on media, but it isn't perfectly clear where it belongs. I suggest you think about where it belongs (perhaps changing Newspapers to Newspapers and Magazines, but post your proposal at the Talk Page, in case someone has a better idea. If there are no objections or better ideas, go for it.--SPhilbrick T 22:00, 20 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Anthony Lombardi

Arlombardi (talk) 19:03, 20 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Well, your userid id suggests you may not be able to maintain a neutral point of view, and the article reads like an advertisement. Until the TV episode is shown, I'm not sure this Antony Lombardi is notable, and I think the article also needs additional reliable sources to establish notability. Nuujinn (talk) 20:13, 20 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Please read WP:COI. While it may seem odd that you would be discouraged from contributing to an article when you probably know more than any other editor, it actually makes sense in the context of the Wikipedia goals. All is not lost, though, if someone else creates an article, you are permitted, even encouraged, to post information to the related Talk Page, suggesting corrections, addition, or relevant sources, but other, uninvolved editors should make the changes.--SPhilbrick T 22:07, 20 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Battle of the Argesul

I was just wondering if this is ready for launch, so if any comments are available, either voice them here or update the article itself at User:Buggie111/Battle of the Argesul. Pretty fun working on it. Buggie111 (talk) 00:50, 21 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

It would be helpful to explain what is notable about this battle. I don't know enough about the rules for military notability; if all battles are deemed notable, then this will qualify, but even if true, it would be helpful to explain what is special about this battle - was it important to either side in any particular way?

You have a couple references, but the citation style could be improved. Check out WP:CITE and footnotes for help.

You might check in on this task force page. There are editors hanging out there who may be able to give you more specific feedback.--SPhilbrick T 02:53, 21 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Mark W. Moffett New page to post

I would like to post a new page about the Sociobiologist/National Geographic Top Photograher/Ant expert/etc. Mark Moffett. Below is the revised draft of the article with more references. I would also like to add one or two photos, but do not know how to do that. Thanks. Never did this before. -Roc Ordman

Mark W. Moffett, Ph.D.

Attempt to post new article

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“Mark has developed a career that combines science and photography, in spite of being a high school dropout. Although his family was not academic, encouraged by his parents he sought out biologists by the age of 12. “ [1] Moffett received his BA in Biology at Beloit College in Wisconsin in 1979. He received his PhD from Harvard University where he studied with E. O. Wilson, who developed the field of sociobiology. Mark was the first PhD candidate that Wilson had accepted in about a decade, but Mark was so fascinated by ant behavior that Wilson agreed to accept him as a student. Moffett taught himself novel photographic techniques for his 1989 Ph.D. on ants. National Geographic magazine published these novel photographs, and he went on to become a top photojournalist of that magazine^[1] Moffett became curator of ants at Harvard, and then directed Harvard's Museum of Comparative Zoology. His research concerns insect social behavior and the structure and dynamics of forest ecosystems, particularly their canopies. He travels the world studying different insects and ecosystems. He has investigated and written about ^[2]canopies of the Amazon rain forest, where he operates a research station in Peru. He also has worked on the supertall coniferous forests of the Pacific Northwest, for which he led the first ever ascent and study of the world's tallest tree, known as the National Geographic redwood. In 1993 Harvard University Press published Moffett's book, The High Frontier: Exploring the Tropical Rainforest Canopy ^[3]. He has a new book coming out in early 2010. Today his research and National Geographic photography are interspersed with writing and public lecturing about rain forests. In 2010, he is Research Associate, NMNH, the Smithsonian Institution, Associate Curator, the University of California, Berkeley, and Contract Photographer, National Geographic Magazine. He also operates a research station in the Amazon Rainforest in Peru along the Amazon River. A photomural he produced there can be seen at Olbrich Botanical Gardens in Madison, WI.

Among his achievements, his home page is ^[4], giving a list of over 80 peer-reviewed publications and 20 articles in National Geographic. Among his awards are the Lowell Thomas Medal from National Geographic ^[5], and the Beloit College Roy Chapman Andrews Award ^[6]. He has written books on ants, frogs, and the rainforest ^[7].

EXTERNAL LINKS

TuneVibez

Link: User:Charliebobgordon/TuneVibez Charliebobgordon (talk) 16:16, 21 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

This needs more citations, particularly to independent reliable sources, both to support the facts stated, and to establish notability. Your current citations are to "The Year's Best Small Business on Twitter" which seems to be a user-voted award award thus not a reliable source at all. Your further reading section currently lists writings by two people involved with this project, which are therefore not independent, and a you-tube link which is highly unlikely to be considered a reliable source --youtube almost never is. The external links are no better: sites by involved people, blogs, twitter, youtube, facebook and a forum. Not a reliable source in the lot, by Wikipedia standards. You need independent, published comment. I advise that you consult WP:CITE, WP:RS, and WP:WEB. Mind you, with better sources, this isn't a bad start on an article. The main issue is establishing notability. I hope this is helpful. DES ^(talk) 17:01, 21 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I'll add that this all seems to be an advertisement. I see that you are a new member of wikipedia, but you might read up on Wikipedia and conflict of interest. From your userid and the TuneVibez web site, can I assume that you are the DJ and webmaster for TuneVibez? If so, I congratulate you on the effort that you and your friends are putting into this endeavor, but wikipedia is not an appropropriate place to promote your business. I agree with DES that the article is pretty good, but you will definitely need better sources. Nuujinn (talk) 17:11, 21 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Vukovi Beograd

Vukovi Beograd article Vukovi_Beograd --Alexbgd83 (talk) 20:07, 21 February 2010 (UTC)Aleksandar Andjelkovic 21.2.2010[reply]

Ir looks very good and is well--written, subject seems notable enough. However, there are no inline citations. I'm sure that since you were able to write such a good article on the subject, you got your information from somewhere. Simply credit your sources. Hope this helps.BillyJack193 (talk) 21:55, 21 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

References can be tricky, but check out WP:CITE and footnotes, which should help you. Come back if it isn't clear, and we can provide an example.--SPhilbrick T 22:20, 21 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Mehgan Heaney-Grier

The name of the article is Mehgan Heaney-Grier. The wikilink is Mehgan Heaney-Grier or [[7]] - (not sure which link will work).

I authored and posted this article for wikipedia. It is about freediver Mehgan Heaney-Grier who, in 1996, established the first-ever freedive record for both men and women in the United States. Additionally, she is an actress, model and has hosted, been featured in and produced many television shows.

This article was done in conjunction with Mehgan for fact verification and with her permission. She has also given permission (in writing) to Wikipedia to use the images that are included in the article and on/in Wikipedia Commons.

Lastly, I saw the clean up tag requesting fewer photos in the article - thus we removed two of them.

Please give us any other feedback that might help us better the article.

Thank you, Petey Jones and Mehgan Heaney-Grier 2/21/2010 Mhg165 (talk) 21:50, 21 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I don't think this is too bad, but it comes off as promotional, and although she's clearly notable, the article needs additional 2nd and 3rd parties references. I don't think it quite reaches neutral point of view. The lede says she's a naturalist, and I see that she's working towards graduation, but the article would be better if it listed her work in this area beyond hosting tv shows and giving talks, especially if she has any publications. The http://sanctuaries.noaa.gov/news/features/0107_ecocenter.html link doesn't mention her, so I think it may not be relevent. As for the pics, I think the face shot and the shot of her deep diving are the only pics you need for this purpose. She's an attractive women, but my thought is that a picture should add to the content in a substantial way. The mermaid shot isn't explained--I'm guessing she worked with Weeki Wachee, if so, why not mention that? Also, I'd suggest dropping the last two external links--linking to her facebook and youtube pages suggest the purpose of the article is promotional in nature. Nuujinn (talk) 00:26, 22 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

The Prometheus Institute

Dlasker88 (talk) 00:11, 22 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

not a bad start. It needs more details if possible, and more references, particularly from news sources, if possible. References should not be just bare links, but should include such metadata as the name of the work, the title of the articel or story or web page, the date of publication, the author when known, etc. If the reference is a bare link, all data can be lsot if the link goes bad, and a user looking at the list of references needs to follow each one to see what sort of sources are being used. I recommend the use of the citation templates, although this is not required.

I have adjusted most, but not all, of the references to use citation templates.

~~Oh the last reference, the one to http://www.statehousecall.org/ doesn't seem top mention the subject at all. Perhaps the story is now in the archives?~~

my error, the site is run by the organization.

Nice work so far. I hope this is helpful. DES ^(talk) 02:42, 22 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

User:HealthGal/Tracey_Powell

This is an article about Tracey Powell, a healthcare entrepreneur who is highly-recognized in the industry as having produced the first and only FDA-approved at-home kits for anonymous HIV and Hepatitis-C testing. By de-stigmatizing STD testing and providing an online, confidential forum for risk evaluation and expert test recommendations, he has enabled thousands who otherwise would not have sought out such information to receive anonymous STD testing, and subsequent treatment as applicable.

HealthGal (talk) 01:34, 22 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Sun Yat-sen's prayer at the tomb of the Hongwu Emperor

Hi

This is my first article (lot of fun). In fact I have never edited a page either. I was going through the page on Sun Yat-sen trying to find out about this prayer that he made at the tomb of the Hongwu Emperor. I had seen a reference to the fact that Sun Yat-sen had visited and prayed at the tomb three days after he took power in a book on the Forbidden city. I got very curious as to why he, who had been trying to overthrow the Qing dynasty, would visit the tomb of the founder of the Ming dynasty. In any case one thing led to another and I managed to find the original prayer mentioned in a book published in 1912.

I would like to add a reference to this prayer in Sun Yat-sen's original article and as such would like to add the prayer itself as an article which can be then be linked.

User:MalikFeb2010/Sun Yat-sen's prayer at the tomb of the Hongwu Emperor

MalikFeb2010 (talk) 04:49, 22 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

For starters, welcome to Wikipedia. Please continue to edit here. Looking at the article on Sun Yat-Sen, I see no reason for this to be a separate article. But it is very well written and sourced and probably belongs within the article if it is indeed notable enough. Unfortunately, I do not know enough about his life to tell you if it is notable or not, but regardless, it does not need its own article.BillyJack193 (talk) 04:58, 22 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the quick feedback. I think this was a very graceful tribute by Sun Yat-sen to the Ming Emperor and as such should be part of the page on him - also points to the centuries long conflicts that have taken place between the Chinese Han race and the Eastern and Western Tartars. I presume (not sure how it gets determined if it is notable enough or not) that it will be okay for me to go ahead and figure out the appropriate place and add it into the original Sun Yat-sen article.MalikFeb2010 (talk) 05:43, 22 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

From what you have said, it is notable enough, so go ahead and add it. If you put it in the wrong place, I am sure some of the other editors of the article will help you out. Good luck.BillyJack193 (talk) 06:04, 22 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I am going to have to disagree with the above comments. The place for the complete text of the prayer is Wikisource - the text can be posted there and linked to in the main article. Large chunks of source material like this should not be added to a Wikipedia article. – ukexpat (talk) 20:40, 22 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I have no problem putting it in Wikisource. However can you point out which category you think is appropriate? Please do consider that this is not a "religious prayer" in the strictest sense of the word. I checked Wikisource and am not sure where you would like to see it placed. Any recommendations? MalikFeb2010 (talk) 03:43, 23 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Miaohui

Literally Temple Fair, this is a festivity common in China during the Chinese New Year. A lot of materials are already present on Chinese WP. I wonder if anyone wants to have a look and make some translations if possible. It is amazing that no article exists yet about this tradition.Btmachine333667 (talk) 09:52, 22 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Johnnie Bassett

I created a new article, which was nominated for speedy deletion under section G12. Eventually I had the item returned to my user page, here - User:Derek R Bullamore/Johnnie Bassett. I have had several trial attempts at re-writing it, but always seem to end up back in the same place. Correspondence on my user talk page, here - User talk:Derek R Bullamore, may give you more background. Basically I am stuck, and would much appreciate another pair of eyes to try to knock this into shape. Please do feel free to sub-edit the 'draft' article itself, if this is easier for you. Maybe it is me that needs knocking into shape, not the article ! Many thanks,

Derek R Bullamore (talk) 14:39, 22 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Council of Residential Specialists

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Council_of_Residential_Specialists I have created an article about the largest subsidiary for the national association of realtors. They are a non for profit council that has several different functions in the real estate market. Thank you for your time!

216.21.37.146 (talk) 15:08, 22 February 2010 (UTC)Rob Kairis 02/22/10[reply]

There are a number of problems

All of the references are bare hyperlinks, and need to be converted to include the relevant metadata, either manually or by use of citation templates, I would favor the latter. See WP:CITE and Help:footnotes for more details.
Most of the citations are to parts of the organization's own web site, or to press relatives or directory entries. Few are to independent reliable sources, and more such are needed. As it stands the citations do not establish notability, see our guideline on notability of organizations.
The article violated our style guideline on trademarks which advises "Follow standard English text formatting and capitalization rules even if the trademark owner considers nonstandard formatting 'official'" and "Do not use the ™ and ® symbols, or similar, in either article text or citations, unless unavoidably necessary for context". I have fixed this issue, buyt please note it for the future.
The article is written in a rather promotional tone. Phrases like "seeking the knowledge, tools and relationship-building opportunities needed to maximize their income and professionalism in residential real estate." are marketing-speak.
The "Mission Statement and Objectives" are apparently direct quotes, but are not formatted or explicitly attributed as such.

I hope these notes are helpful. DES ^(talk) 20:39, 22 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Alpha, Washington

Sorry if I'm asking for feedback too often, but I would like to know what is left before I launch User:Buggie111/Alpha, Washington. I've nearly knocked myself insane finding info about this, and I'd like to move it to it's namespace home as part of my unannounced de-redlink the Lewis County, washington tempalte campaign. Constructive critiscisim would be appreciated.

Buggie111 (talk) 17:09, 22 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I've done a revamping of the references and formatting. It could certainly use some more detailed information and sources, though my searches turned up nothing.--Fuhghettaboutit (talk) 18:34, 22 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Well, I could not find anything else in searches, and I do not want to pay for a flight to Seattle to reasearch. I'd say that this is as far as I could go. Buggie111 (talk) 19:24, 22 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Visionlearning.com

I just created the article Visionlearning.com User:Neopropism/Visionlearning.com and would love some feedback on the tone, etc. I've tried to be as unbiased as possible, but am not sure if some of my descriptions seem too favorable.

Thanks! Neopropism (talk) 17:22, 22 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Wendy K. Wilkins

Hello,

I am looking for feedback on my first Wikipedia article on Wendy K. Wilkins. I know the Wikilink will not work, so here is the link to the page itself: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:CLEARllh/Wendy_Wilkins

Does anybody know how I can change the Wikilink so it links correctly? There is already an article on Wendy Wilkins, but not the one this article is about, so I've changed my article to Wendy K. Wilkins, but only in title. How do I change it so that when you search for Wendy K. Wilkins it comes up with my article?

I have a request out to Ms. Wilkins for her birthdate and as soon as I hear back I will change the dummy text in my article to that date. I am working on uploading a photo of her for the article, but doing everything on here for the first time seems a little overwhelming and confusing at best. I'm working on it, though! Any feedback would be greatly appreciated. CLEARllh (talk) 17:41, 22 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Hi CLEARllh,

You can link to the article in its current location using User:CLEARllh/Wendy Wilkins. To move an article, you can click on the move tab at the top of the page.

I think your page should be the Wendy Wilkins page, since it refers to a real person, but perhaps that is an issue best left for another day. Your article seems pretty well referenced and ready to move to article space so if I were you I would click on the move tab and where it says "User:CLEARllh/Wendy Wilkins" change it to say "Wendy K. Wilkins". On the Wendy Wilkins page, you will need to add a disambiguation hatnote pointing to your article. If you are not sure how to do that I can help.

In terms of the actual article, it doesn't have to have the date of birth so I would remove the place holder. It is generally well researched. My main concern is that a lot of it is just a big list, which isn't really the style you would expect from a biography article. Perhaps it should be cut down to the more interesting things. Maybe other editors have some suggestions.

I don't think you have violated WP:BLP. I'm no expert on this, but I think a "Provost and Vice President for Academic Affairs" meets WP:Notability (academics) but it might be a good idea to find a reliable independent source that talks about her so that your article meets the standard of WP:GNG. What counts as an independent source is a contentious issue in Wikipedia, but I would suggest that it shouldn't come from either her or the University of North Texas.

I hope that is helpful.

Yaris678 (talk) 18:48, 22 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

David Newman aka Durga Das (Chant Artist)

Hello,

I posted an article about musician David Newman a few months ago in my userspace. At that time I was advised to wait until his next album came out on the Nettwerk label since he would then meet notability requirements. That album is coming out in a few weeks so I've made a few edits and would like to get the ball rolling again. If anyone has any input, thanks in advance!

Here is the article: David Newman aka Durga Das (Chant Artist)

AmaruKR (talk) 23:07, 22 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Having an interest in the world of chant generally, I read through the proposed article and checked for Newman and Durga Das on line. The text of the article is pretty much all based on personal websites and social media. I was unable to find a third-party source beyong the one Yoga magazine and it seems to be more pr than anything else. Until there are reviews of the albums or the studio in WP:RS, which might occur after the new album which is still in the porudction process, this appears to be a local musician/entrepreneur looking for WP publicity. I would say certainly not yet; the subject needs to have more more prominence than he has right now. If you have a careful read through Wikipedia's guidelines for notability in musicians, you will see that this individual meets none of the tests as far as I can tell. Bielle (talk) 23:22, 22 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Bielle,

Thank you for taking a look and for your feedback.

One of the guidelines for notability is "Has released two or more albums on a major label or one of the more important indie labels (i.e., an independent label with a history of more than a few years and a roster of performers, many of which are notable)" which I believe is applicable here since Newman's new album is being released through Nutone/Nettwerk, as was his last. The latest album was produced by a Grammy-award winning producer, who is also listed on WP. In addition, though chant is certainly a niche genre that will never get mainstream air time, there are other kirtan artists on WP who are also now making music through Nettwork/Nutone.

Would it help to have more review articles referenced for past albums? I did not do so since a lot of the information was repeat or strictly reviews of albums.

A few more points that might help the case: Newman has been putting albums out since 2003. In 2004 his second album was reviewed on NPR. In 2008 he was mentioned in an article called "Yoga Rock Stars" in Yoga+Joyful Living Magazine.

In any case thanks again for taking the time. I won't say the impetus for this article is devoid of promotional considerations but I have tried to make it objective and do want to respect the WP guidelines. I wouldn't submit an article if I didn't believe the person belonged here. However, if the consensus is to wait, I will.

Best,

AmaruKR (talk) 16:59, 24 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I appreciate your work and your interest, AmaruKR. However, I am still not seeing notable here as WP defines it for musicians; "at least" ia an absolute minimum standard. If there is some press in a major publication about the person, that might be helpful; the Yoga magazine is more pr than news, I think, and so is much of the writing still. As for the albums, if they get significant coverage, they might warrant an article with a paragraph on the musician, but I am not even seeing the grounds for that yet. This is just my opinion. Others' opinions are welcome. Bielle (talk) 17:05, 25 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Anybody else care to weigh in? Advice on how to proceed is welcome. Thx,

AmaruKR (talk) 23:27, 3 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

VertiKa

I started the page VertiKa and revised it after first review and seek another. --Ewikiwriter (talk) 13:07, 23 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Just read through your article, and I think it's pretty good. There's plenty of references and reliable sources in there, and the structure makes it really easy for me to read and find out the important information. However, I would say with the 'history' section that you could perhaps put the dates in bold and separate the sections a bit more. Apart from that, I think it's a really well written article! Please ask if you require any more opinions on the article. Chevymontecarlo (talk) 16:18, 23 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Edgar Blazona

Edgar Blazona Hello, I welcome all feedback on this new article I created. Please let me know where and how I can improve. Thanks! Taramelinchuk (talk) 18:09, 23 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Laimes

A new page on Laimes a venacular building type of Upper Silisia --AnnaSomerset (talk) 16:23, 24 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

You mean Laimes (User:AnnaSomerset/Laimes), not Laimes. If your article turns out to be acceptable, we'll work out how to avoid the confusion, for example, the article you are working on might become Laimes(building).--SPhilbrick T 17:15, 24 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Astro Solo

The Astro Solo is a new vehicle mentioned on several automotive blogs. I've put together some basic facts and a link to the company website.

Jwakeman (talk) 19:33, 24 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Interesting. The pictures in the two references do not appear to be the same vehicle. One clearly shows solar cells, the other does not. The side panels are shaped differently. Any thoughts?--SPhilbrick T 20:56, 24 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Kathryn Wallace

Kathryn Wallace is an American film and print journalist. Please review and let me know if this person is notable enough and what else I might need to move to mainspace. Link to article is here:

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Joeistaller/Kathryn_Wallace

Joeistaller (talk) 01:06, 25 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Not a bad start, although I would suggest a review of the external links and the in-text links. Also, the "Inside Guantanamo" section does not appear to be entirely relevant. -Reconsider! 01:32, 25 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Glencadia

My town had a nice name, Glencadia. I wanted to set up a place to clear up why the word is floating around the area but is no longer the name of the town. Apologies if I did not follow all guidelines.˜˜˜˜ —Preceding unsigned comment added by Willpflaum (talk • contribs) 02:36, 25 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

You would need to add reliable sources to establish notability. I think a better solution would be to merge this info into Stuyvesant, New York and then redirect it there. If you do merge this info it will need to be established through reliable sources that Stuyvesant Falls was once called Glencadia because at this point the external links do not establish this. The article at this point does not even establish that this name is notable or that the hamlet of Stuyvesant Falls is notable. ~~ GB fan ~~ ^talk 02:50, 25 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Create Synchronicity

Hello world!

I've just created the Create Synchronicity Wikipedia article, describing briefly the backup application bearing that name. Since I'm it's developer, it may not be totally objective, although I tried to be as Neutral as I could. The application is growing int terms of user base, and I thought it deserved its entry on the List of backup software page. As the software needed to have its own article to appear on the list, I created the article to.

Create Synchronicity has been written about by many sources, in many different languages. It was recently updated to version 3.0, and already appears in the French Wikipedia.

Could you please review this article? I'm pretty new to creating fully new articles.

Thanks a lot! CFP. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Cfpcompte (talk • contribs) 14:30, 25 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

There is at least one mistake in the article it curently says, "Its development started in June 2010." I am not sure what date belong there.

Currently the article does not explain why it is significant it just states the software exists and what features it has. I would suggest you read through the notability guideline, Wikipedia:Notability. The main thing you will need to do is add references from reliable sources to the information in the article so that it can be verified. It looks liek you have a good start on the article, it just needs to be expanded with references. Hope this helps. ~~ GB fan ~~ ^talk 15:34, 25 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

[[[GB fan]] has indeed commented a lot on this article. Could somebody please review the changes that I made to satisfy his demands? Cfpcompte (talk) 00:34, 26 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I am sorry if you feel like I demanded you do anything. You asked for an opinion on the article and I gave it. Orangemike has also reviewed it and felt it was lacking enough that the article should be deleted. ~~ GB fan ~~ ^talk 01:40, 26 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry for my previous comment, I basically missed your answer. It is nice to suggest ways to improve the article. I've corrected the date problem, and added other references. What do you think of it now, and what remains to improve? Cfpcompte (talk) 08:55, 26 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I suggest you remove the links in the article that go back to the projects sourceforge site, it's release notes, or any web pages that automatically collect and publish data about the code. What you need are more links like the karp review (although that one's not a great reference, it's better than the others). Not all software packages are notable--I think you have a tough row to hoe here. I think you would be best off to start by adding this project to the List of backup software article. Nuujinn (talk) 21:17, 28 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Hamilton Bradshaw

User:CodyJDick/Hamilton Bradshaw

I have created a page about the UK private equity firm Hamilton Bradshaw. Here is the link to the page I have made in my userspace: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:CodyJDick/Hamilton_Bradshaw

I believe the page has the quality required to go live. However I would REALLY APPRECIATE if the page could be reviewed. I will gladly listen to suggestions and accept edits. Thanks for your time.

CodyJDick (talk) 15:08, 25 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

E-Z Pack Manufacturing

Please let me know if the article: Tkincolorado/E-Z Pack Manufacturing, meets your criteria for publishing to Wikipedia. Thank you for your time. -Tom Kennedy (tkincolorado) 2/25/2010 Tkincolorado (talk) 19:04, 25 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry, but it comes across as too promotional.

Please see WP:CORP for guidelines on what is needed for an article on a company to be included.--SPhilbrick T 22:08, 25 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

The Invisible Thieves

The Invisible Thieves is a description of a case of attempted extortion, bombing, and murder that occurred in Madison County, Illinois, in January of 1901. Three men were eventually tried and one convicted.

MarshaEns (talk) 19:43, 25 February 2010 (UTC)Marsha L. Ensminger, 25 Feb 2010[reply]

Fascinating.

It will no doubt not surprise you that Wikipedia articles rarely rely solely on references that are not available online, but it is not a requirement that they be online. (Sorry about the multiple negatives). One worry I had was how to confirm the basic story, but this (sort of) online link from the Atlanta Constitution will both help satisfy that concern and add to your point about widespread coverage.
Wikipedia articles except for stubs, are not generally written as a single section. I don't have a lot of useful advice beyond breaking out a WP:LEAD, but check out Article Layout and see if there is a natural way to have a lead followed by two or three sections.
I didn't like the phrasing "said that" (used twice). Is it really necessary, or can it be written in a more straightforward way.
The External Link was a placeholder in the Wizard for you to add any if you had any. I removed it,
I made a tiny grammatical change.
Nice work, I won't be surprised if this article is challenged for inclusion, but I hope it survives.
I fixed the link to the article --SPhilbrick T 21:35, 25 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Gamma Phi

Was hoping to get some feedback on my new article, Gamma Phi. This is my first article to write, and while the information is all from the same source, the purpose was to consolidate a lot of information into one relatively small article. No rush on the review, but I'd be glad to have it looked over, especially for any violations or other potential warnings.

To whomever reviews this--thanks in advance for your time. :-) --Warbirdadmiral (talk) 05:23, 26 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Slobodan origins

I am trying to research the Family surname Slobodan. From what I have found, it was dirived from the word Sloboda which ment freedom or Peace. I know that the name Slobodan is a very comon firts name but from what I read and understand from speaking to people in the so called "Old Country" the name Slobodan is rare as a last name. My family came over from Galicia, Austria in 1909 and setteled in Canada. Can someone please more information on the last name Slobodan and where it may have originated. Thanks, Terrill Slobodan —Preceding unsigned comment added by Slobodan1 (talk • contribs) 15:13, 26 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

That's not really the purpose of this page, which is to review draft articles created by editors. You may do better by asking at one of the Reference Desks, where they specializing in answering questions like this. I'm not quite sure which on is best, you might start with Wikipedia:Reference desk/Humanities, and I suspect they'll let you know is another one is better.--SPhilbrick T 18:38, 26 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Please check this article for publication

Jo Hamilton (musician)

Hello

I have comprehensively referenced this article, as well as adding a photograph of the artist.

I need the thumbnail to be accepted as I have reduced its size considerably.

Please contact me regarding this

Thanks

Shelley Atkinson ^{[details removed]} —Preceding unsigned comment added by Artsdeville (talk • contribs) 16:18, 26 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Dice.com

Hello, I just created an article for Dice.com. Dice is the leading IT recruiter in the United States and has also provided industry reports that have been published by Reuters. The article is here: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Athard/dice.com. Please look at it and let me know if this is good enough for Wikipedia. Thank you.

Athard (talk) 18:47, 26 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Jordanmakesmusic/Faces_On_Film

I made a page for the band Faces on Film. Since it's my first page, general feedback would be appreciated. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Jordanmakesmusic (talk • contribs) 21:45, 26 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

p-derivations

A map type of map in differential algebra that is used to prove diophantine results. Anyone with a background in abstract algebra can review it. —Preceding unsigned comment added by 97.123.25.21 (talk) 21:56, 26 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I made a couple small fixes.
Someone has added tags noting that the article has no WP:LEAD and needs a better introduction. A good lede could solve both issues.
The external link is subscription only - not having a subscription, I cannot determine whether it should be in here, but per WP:ELNO (see item 6) probably not.
Many mathematical articles do not follow current practice regarding referencing. Presumably because many of them were created years ago, before referencing guidelines were written. I don't know whether they have been grandfathered, and new articles should comply, or if the community accept that math article will not be properly referenced. If I find discussion of this point, I'll pass it along—at this time, I'm just noting that it doesn't meet my referencing standards.
You said An example such lift could.... Did you mean An example of such a lift could...
Your reference (Buium) lists 1998 as a publication date. Are you sure it isn't 2005?
Did you consider mentioning the quotient field in your second example?
My algebra is very rusty. I hope someone else will take a look. --SPhilbrick T 01:58, 27 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Jim Lord, Singer/songwriter

Jim Lord, Singer/songwriter Jim Lord, singer/songwriter requesting feedback on article. Lord is considered by many to be "one of the best artists you hear little about" (source: CHIC Magazine, Music Notes, January 1983 Issue, P.9). He was a singer/songwriter in the 70's/80's, influenced by the British folk scene, recorded a couple of successful albums but changed career tracks in the mid-80's to pursue a career in photojournalism, where he was a very successful, award winning, wartime photojournalist particularly known for his work in Nicaragua and Guatemala during the civil wars in those areas on the 1980s (the information on his photojournalism career is NOT included in his musicians bio page, but for your edification). Lord returned to his singer/songwriter roots in early 2000's and is currently working on an album, scheduled for release later in 2010.

Thanks for taking time to review Lord's singer/songwriter bio.

Jdlongshot2 (talk) 18:21, 27 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

NatalieWynnePace

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:HeatherSophia/NatalieWynnePace

```` HeatherSophia February 27, 2010

FYI: I haven't put in her rock and roll years yet, but I plan to once I find more links to support her work there. —Preceding unsigned comment added by HeatherSophia (talk • contribs) 00:35, 28 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Well, I personally don't think she herself is notable, and the article doesn't contain very good references. Links to personal home pages, to youtube, and esp links to a site owned by the subject of a biographical article are not good sources, see Biographies of Living Persons for more information. Mere lists of interviews and speaking engagements do not really establish notability and do not really contribute much information to the article. The link to http://www.womensfoundca.org/site/pp.aspx?c=aqKGLROAIrH&b=4993029&printmode=1#LADC might help if it mentioned her, but I do not see any information about her located there. What you need are articles from reputable magazines and newspapers, books, or the like. The article is also very promotional in tone, and lacks a neutral point of view. Sections also appear to be directly copied from press releases on external web sites, eg: http://vanguardpress.net/book.php?isbn=9781593154912, http://www.everythingfinanceblog.com/2009/01/book-review-put-your-money-where-your.html. I'm pretty sure that's a violation of copyright. I'm sorry I can't think of anything good to say about this article, but I can't. Nuujinn (talk) 21:08, 28 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Joey Allcorn

Page for indie alt-country artist Joey Allcorn[8], singer/songwriter from Columbus, GA who's collaborators include Hank III, Don Helms, Lloyd Green and Johnny Hiland. This is my first attempt at Wikipedia authoring; let me know what you think. Thanks, Dr. Magnifico

Village Roots Garden

Thank you in advance for your time and consideration. I've just completed my 1st Wikipedia aricle ever, on community gardening at User:VitusKonter/VillageRoots. Please let me know how it looks. VitusKonter (talk) 07:27, 28 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

It looks really well done, nice organization nice pictures, nice layout, so it pains me to report that it may not meet the Notability requirements. I hope it does, but you should search for more examples of coverage in reliable sources.--SPhilbrick T 16:14, 28 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you. I've added a few more citations, and hope to add more in the next week to help establish notability. VitusKonter (talk) 06:51, 5 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

If it doesn't meet notability, see esp WP:LOCAL, then perhaps it should added to the Bay View, Milwaukee article. Nuujinn (talk) 20:50, 28 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I've already done several edits and added 3 new sections to the Bay View, Milwaukee article (and I plan on adding more), but I think that the Village Roots article is too large to be included within the Bay View article. VitusKonter (talk) 06:51, 5 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Nope, not even in "the other East Side" is this notable. --Orange Mike | Talk 02:38, 4 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

User:NotableCheckertools/Sarey (singer)

How can i improve this article any help? Feel welcome to change the article to improve the quality. (NotableCheckertools (talk) 19:15, 28 February 2010 (UTC))[reply]

/User:Wikiwhackjack/KSM_Guitars

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Wikiwhackjack/KSM_Guitars

User:Wikiwhackjack/KSM_Guitars

I would like to publish this article and would like to know if there are any reasons that it would be denied.

Wikiwhackjack (talk) 20:53, 28 February 2010 (UTC) Chris Lott, 2/28/10[reply]

You haven't established why these guitars are Notable. You need to show that they are discussed in multiple reliable sources. So far, you have zero sources.

It will help (but not be sufficient) to show that notable musicians use the guitar. While you have listed two, you've haven't cited any references to verify that they do own the guitars.--SPhilbrick T 23:47, 2 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Great Melbourne Telescope

User:Rgillespie/Great Melbourne Telescope

Rgillespie (talk) 03:56, 1 March 2010 (UTC) Richard Gillespie 1 March 2010[reply]

First, I'll note this is the type of article I enjoy seeing added to WP. However, there are some challenges to overcome.

You've provided references, but not in the required format. See WP:CITE for help. Additionally, it is not sufficient to merely list the references, you have to provide footnotes to identify which references support which claims. See footnotes.

I'm surprised at the claim that this was the second largest telescope at the time. While it was obviously smaller than the Rosse, it may also have been smaller than Herschel's telescope. (Here, we may have to do some sleuthing, as 40-foot telescope identifies it as a 48 inch, but List of largest optical telescopes historically identifies it as 49.5 in. This is one reason why it would help to see the specific reference, to help sort this out.

I wikilinked a few terms.--SPhilbrick T 00:16, 3 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Smoked Bear

Please provide feedback on a short article describing a public education campaign called Smoked Bear. Once I find the text or an MP3 of the radio spot(s) mentioned in the article, I will also include them on the article page.

Thanks in advance for any reviews. TnCom (talk) 04:59, 1 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

You linked to one article about the campaign, but I've found no other mention of the campaign, so I'm worried that it would not survive a proposal to delete on the basis of lack of Notability. Are there other discussions of this campaign in reliable sources?

Please do not copy the entire text of the campaign, as it is almost certainly a violation of Copyright. You may be able to use excerpts, but even that has to be done with care. An MP3 of the campaign is also almost certainly a copyright violation. You are free to investigate getting permission, but let's see if you can satisfactorily establish Notability first.

Sorry I can't be more positive.--SPhilbrick T 00:29, 3 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I agree with SPhilbrick, I only found the one reference on google. It sounds like this is the personal mission of one indvidual at this point. Nuujinn (talk) 00:34, 3 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for the feed back SPhilbrick and Nuujinn. I was able to find another source and put it in the reference section. I will also try to find where the campaign is posted and provide a link there instead of posting the text or the MP3 TnCom (talk) 05:08, 5 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

24SevenCart

24SevenCart Shomikz (talk) 06:16, 1 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

You need to establish Notability, by showing this product is discussed in multiple reliable sources, which you support with references.--SPhilbrick T 00:34, 3 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Green Horizon Magazine

I'd be interested in having this article reviewed Green Horizon Magazine

Stevewelzer (talk) 08:13, 1 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

You need to establish Notability, by showing this product is discussed in multiple reliable sources, which you support with references.--SPhilbrick T 00:39, 3 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Sven Windahl

Hi, Just created a page on Swedish professor of communications Sven Windahl. This is my first Wikipedia article, so I hope someone out there will be able and willing to provide some constructive feedback.

Brainfu (talk) 10:32, 1 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I'm sorry, but I'm just not sure he's really notable--it seems like he has the normal credentials for an active academician, but nothing out of the ordinary or of particular notablity. This isn't a criticism of him or his work, there are very many people who do valuable and significant work who aren't notable. Nuujinn (talk) 16:03, 6 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

FANTASTIC MAN magazine

Hello I created an article for Fantastic Man magazine last week and it does not seem to be live yet. I suppose it still needs feedback. I'm having a hard time with the whole Wikipedia submission process -- it is very convoluted if you ask me -- but from what I can tell, my article still needs to be reviewed. I'm eager to get it live so if someone can help me out, I would really appreciate it...

Thanks!

Matthew Stewart Matty stewart (talk) 12:54, 1 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

It is live as Fantastic Man (magazine). I made some minor edits. When you reference a website you need to provide a brief title for the website, not just a link. See what I did with the New York Times reference. Anyway, a good start and OK as a stub article. Itsmejudith (talk) 13:58, 1 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Alex Hibbert

User:TinTin7/New article name here

hiding draft text

Hello,

Below is the updated version of Alex Hibbert's wikipedia page. I would much appreciate some feedback and hope all is adequate before it goes live. Thank you very much!

Alex Hibbert is a polar expedition leader, outdoor photographer, athlete and zoologist. In 2008 he broke the record, along with his teammate George Bullard, for the longest unsupported polar expedition in history. At 21 years old Alex led the 1374 mile, over 113 day Tiso Trans-Greenland Expedition.

Alex Hibbert wrote the story of his expedition in his book The Long Haul which will be published by Tricorn Books on March 15th, 2010. [edit] References

<http://www.tricornbooks.co.uk/menu-reviews}

<http://www.londonspeakerbureau.co.uk/alex_hibbert.aspx]

<http://www.wideworldmag.co.uk/features/alex-hibbert-s-polar-expeditions} [edit] External links

[www.alexhibbert.com ]

TinTin7 (talk) 13:15, 1 March 2010 (UTC)March 1st, 2010[reply]

Claire Buchar

I would appreciate any feedback on the following article

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Claire_Buchar

Many thanks —Preceding unsigned comment added by TinaEPO (talk • contribs) 15:09, 1 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

A couple of things to consider:

You need to have a lede.
The first paragraph is not a paragraph, just a series of sentences. You should try to rework that into a narrative paragraph. Have a go at that and drop me a note on my talk page if you need some help.
You refer to the subject of the article by her first name, this comes across as familiar and that suggests a particular point of view. My suggestion would be to use her surname.
The article really needs a better set of references, I've put a few for consideration below (using google's news search in the archives is a good way to find references). You need a reference, for example, for her marriage.
I think if you could both provide some more general biographical data and also try to place her in her professional context (rather than just listed races she's won), that would also help.

http://www.torontosun.com/sports/othersports/2009/09/07/10775296-sun.html

http://www.cyclingnews.com/races/australian-mountain-bike-national-championships-cn/downhill-elite-women/results

I realize this may seem like a long list of things to work on, so please contact me on my talk page if you feel daunted or need help. You have made a good start, and this can be a very good article if you keep at it. Nuujinn (talk) 15:56, 6 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Mark Moffett

This is my first article (though someone kindly did an article about me), an article about a distinguished explorer/photographer/expert on insect behavior, who is a top photographer for National Geographic and distinguished former student of E. O. Wilson. User: Rocordman/Mark Moffett is not currently on wikipedia but has given me permission to post an article about him. I also would love to know how to put a photo or two in the article. Feedback/suggestions are welcome. You can reach me directly at <redacted> Thanks

Roc Ordman March 1, 2010---- —Preceding unsigned comment added by Rocordman (talk • contribs) 16:13, 1 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

It's a good start but needs work. I would say that the subject meets the notability guidelines for professors as a former director of the museum at Harvard. That should go in the first sentence. Not "wonderful man". See WP:PEACOCK. Itsmejudith (talk) 12:46, 2 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

User:Tjarrett/Veracode

(Also posted on the New Contributors' Help Page, where they suggested I post here.)

I am an experienced editor with a conflict of interest on an article in my userspace--the article is about my employer. I have made a few passes through it for peacock terms etc and have done my best to establish notability, but would appreciate new eyes on the article to help me weed out any other issues. I'd like to request a review of the article to see if it can be moved to the main article namespace. -Tjarrett (talk) 17:12, 1 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Well, there does appear to be a conflict of interest problem, but I'm sure we all appreciate your honesty. I think you can establish notability given that you have a handful of sources not directly associated with the firm. I'd suggest dropping the references that come from the veracode website, regardless of the original source, and see what else you can find out and about on the net. Nuujinn (talk) 00:16, 4 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks, Nuujinn. Am going to go through and remove the references that point to Veracode.com and source from other locations, and see what else can be done to bring in external points of reference. -Tjarrett (talk) 18:04, 5 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Okay. Citations that previously pointed at Veracode.com now point to appropriate conference websites (for research presentations) or the referenced content has been deleted from the article. I also added content from two articles about the company in the offerings section. Could you take another look and see if there are other areas of concern I should address? -Tjarrett (talk) 20:10, 5 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I think it's better, but it's still pretty promotional. Someone else should probably take a look, tho, I work in IT, and my POV is a bit slanted. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Nuujinn (talk • contribs) 15:41, 6 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

PeerPong

Please give a general review of newly posted PeerPong Wiki entry. I am looking for ways to improve it.

Thank You! Lforrest11 (talk) 19:20, 1 March 2010 (UTC)Laura Forrest 3/1/2010[reply]

The big problem here is notability - as the site is still in private beta it is most unlikely to meet the notability guidelines at WP:WEB nor does the company appear to meet the guidelines at WP:CORP. The website/company may meet the guidelines at some time in the future, but they do not at the moment. I have tagged the article for speedy deletion. Sorry. – ukexpat (talk) 18:53, 2 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Jack Garson

If anyone could review the above article it would be greatly appreciated!!

Jack Garson (born December 19, 1960) is the founder of Garson Claxton LLC and leads the firm’s business and real estate practice groups. Jack serves as a legal advisor for numerous local, regional and national companies, focusing on business transactions, commercial real estate, commercial leasing, and construction law. He is also a US author of How to Build a Business and Sell It for Millions published by St. Martin’s Press in March 2010.

Thanks!

MegOTMM (talk) 22:06, 1 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

User:Eriktb/Ala Moana Bowls

Hello, this is my first wikipedia entry. Please give me feedback. Eriktb (talk) 03:40, 2 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I think it's a pretty good start. The first thing I'd suggest is cleaning up the citations, see WP:CS for exmples--you might start with the basic footnote examples. If you have any questions or problems, drop me a note on my talk page. Nuujinn (talk) 15:35, 6 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Tongal

User:Fightonfortroy/Tongal

This article is about the crowdsourcing company Tongal. I'd appreciate any constructive criticism. Thanks for the help.

Fightonfortroy (talk) 04:03, 2 March 2010 (UTC)Fightonfortroy[reply]

Edward W. Estlow

Hello, please review [W. Estlow] for inclusion LSClark (talk) 07:56, 2 March 2010 (UTC)LSClark March 2, 2010[reply]

It's coming along nicely. In the headings, only capitalize the first word. The Manual of style helps with such things. Make sure you refer to the subject as "Estlow" throughout; avoid chatty phrasing like "Ed and his wife". Don't include the names of his children unless any of them are notable in their own right. Include links to relevant firms and institutions, especially University of Denver, on first mention. When you say "internal university documentation", that may be all right, but we prefer to use sources that other people can check. If you are referring to university web pages, give the URLs. Itsmejudith (talk) 12:41, 2 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Portland (communications)

Dear All,

I would greatly appreciate it if someone could review this article have written on a PR company. Not the most interesting I know, but the consultancy has links to a fair few British politicians so I think it is of notable interest.

Many Thanks. --Adam Wildman (talk) 09:55, 2 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I'm not sure the company meets notability requirements, since it appears that the sources cited focus mostly on the people rather than the corporation. See WP:CORP for some more detail. Nuujinn (talk) 23:24, 2 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Hi,

Thanks for taking the time to to back to me so quickly. In regards your comments, do you mean that the article needs re-wording, i.e. having quotes/references directly refering the company itself. What I'm asking is, will re-wording the article save it from deletion?

Thanks again. --Adam Wildman (talk) 11:31, 3 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I can't say what will or won't save an article from deletion, since I'm not really involved in that part of the process at this point. I will say I think that if you move the article into your user space and work on it some more there, it's got a better chance of lasting longer. And yes, what I take from the article in it's current state is here's a PR firm seeking PR on the basis of the fame of the people who are associated with them. Wikipedia isn't about promotion, and while it seems that some of these individuals are themselves notable, I'm not seeing any evidence that the firm is. Nuujinn (talk) 00:20, 4 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Robert "Bob" Olszewski, Miniature Figurative Artist (Born: May 2, 1945 - )

User:ROlszewski/Robert Olszewski —Preceding unsigned comment added by ROlszewski (talk • contribs) 15:30, 2 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

This appears (based on your user name) to be an autobiography. Creating an autobiography is strongly discouraged as it is hard to write about yourself from a neutral point of view. The draft is very promotional/non-neutral/unencyclopedic in tone and will need a lot of toning down and rewriting before it can be moved to the mainspace. It will also need more references to reliable sources to demonstrate notability per WP:CREATIVE. If you are the subject, I would suggest that you abandon the draft but ask for it to be created by posting at articles for creation. – ukexpat (talk) 18:32, 2 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Shameless autobiographical spam; nothing of merit, nothing salvageable. --Orange Mike | Talk 01:23, 4 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I concur with ukexpat and Orange Mike that this is not appropriate for WP. However, it is quite extensive, and shows evidence of a lot of work; it would be a shame to lose it. There is another site which accepts bios, without the NPOV requirement, but I've forgotten the name of it. Can someone remind me, so that Bob might move this work to a better venue?--SPhilbrick T 14:24, 4 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Poking around, I found two options: Biographicon, WikiBios --SPhilbrick T 14:39, 4 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Montana Justice Foundation

I have recently updated the Montana Justice Foundation page to include links on and to the page. I am hoping for someone to review the article again with these changes in place.

The Montana Justice Foundation is a non for profit organizations that uses IOLTA funds and donations to fund legal aid initiatives around Montana.

Lauren Asprooth (Lauren Asprooth 16:53, 2 March 2010 (UTC)) —Preceding unsigned comment added by Laurenasprooth (talk • contribs)

Before we worry about links, there is a more serious problem. The article needs citations to reliable sources that demonstrate how or why the organization is notable per the guidance at WP:ORG. Without such references, the article is destined to be nominated for deletion. References to the Foundation's website do not qualify as reliable to show notability. There are some formatting issues too: please take a look at {{Infobox non-profit}} to see how to use infobox code correctly; the tables for the executives and directors are not necessary, bulleted lists will do. Hope this helps. – ukexpat (talk) 18:45, 2 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

International League of Conservation Writers

User:PattyMaher/International League of Conservation Writers

PattyMaher (talk) 22:38, 2 March 2010 (UTC)Patty Maher[reply]

Music_Teachers_Association_of_California

Hi, I would like feedback on my article about the Music Teachers' Association of California, MTAC, at User:Lowellwebster/Music Teachers Association of California. My article is very similar to the article MTNA. When my page is accepted, then a new entry needs to be made in the MTAC disambiguation page. Thanks, Lowellwebster (talk) 22:40, 2 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Please read the notability guidelines for organizations set out at WP:ORG - at the moment the draft has no references to reliable sources that demonstrate the notability of the subject. Note that the org's own website is not a reliable sources for establishing notability - significant coverage in third party sources is required. Hope this helps. (The same comments apply to MTNA and I have tagged it accordingly - I am surprised that it has survived for so long without references.) – ukexpat (talk) 16:59, 5 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Ramekin Counterpane

Thanks for reviewing my new article on Ramekin Counterpane, the '70s art-rock band from the Southern California desert.

I appreciate your help.

Rememberthe60s (talk) 02:21, 3 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Saying that the band's popularity is comparable to 10cc does not reflect reality. You should have another look at this statement. Also, the quote needs attribution.

Brhodewalt (talk) 03:06, 3 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

The fact that this band has no mention at Allmusic, instantly suggests to me that they are not notable. Please read the guidelines - they may save you much time and effort.

Derek R Bullamore (talk) 15:36, 3 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Carl Moyer Program

Please give a general review of this recently posted Wiki entry. I want to make sure it is clear and that all citations are noted.

Carl Moyer Program

--Riezebos Holzbaur (talk) 02:37, 3 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

As a preliminary review, right now the article is almost entirely sourced using primary sources. You need secondary sources (also called third party sources) in the article—reliable newspaper articles, documentaries, books, magazine articles—written by people unaffiliated with the program. This type of subject is necessarily going to have to rely to some extent on primary source material but it should not rely on them entirely. Because of the way it's written, it reads like a brochure. When the subject of an article is a person or a company and it reads like this the impression is much worse because promotional on such subjects smacks of self-aggrandizement, wheraes this is a government program—but it still sounds like ad-copy. We strive for neutrally written, balanced articles, giving voice to positive and negative criticism where appropriate. I also imagine you have a conflict of interest; that you are in some way personally involved with this topic, which makes writing a balanced article not only difficult, but usually it is not something the writer wants to do. Right now I could see it being nominated for deletion as promotion.--Fuhghettaboutit (talk) 03:58, 3 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

The Real Estate Investment Securities Association (REISA)

This is original information about a real estate industry trade group. There are currently about 30 of these type of groups listed in Wikipedia, but nothing on REISA. Errors pop up related to the references and am not experienced enough to resolve it. I tried to be neutral and only state the facts. Help me to not make this an advertisement, but an informative piece on what the association is about.

(Investmentconnector (talk) 05:47, 3 March 2010 (UTC))[reply]

It's not bad at all. It will be better if you take out a lot of the detail, because that is what makes it read like an advertisement or corporate website. For example, it isn't appropriate to have the full postal address; the city is sufficient. The article could be about half the length. If there is any discussion of the association in independent sources, for example trade press, that should be added. Itsmejudith (talk) 16:46, 5 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Organizational Behavior And Leadership During A Political Revolution

To Whom This May Concern,

Hello, this is my first real contribution to Wikipedia. Please feel free to edit this so it meets the encyclopedia standard, or help teach me so I can do this myself.

Thanks! —Preceding unsigned comment added by Robsmyth40 (talk • contribs) 07:23, 3 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Hi, I will see if I can provide some helpful points. First off, this article indeed reads a lot like an essay - and needs to be re-written in encyclopedic style. Also, please look at incorporating good inline citations (see here), and add a good introduction that properly summarizes the entire article - with a short succinct statement that truly defines what is meant by "Organizational Behavior And Leadership During A Political Revolution", and that this can be considered a truly encyclopedic article. Jwoodger (talk) 02:18, 4 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Hamilton Bradshaw

The Wikipedia page Hamilton Bradshaw was recently created. Much thanks to the help that has been provided by my peers editing the page. However, as can be noted when viewing the page, there is still work to be done. Specifically, I need help removing the "advert" designation at the top of the page. It was added when the page was more biased than it is now, but I think almost all of the bias has been eliminated. Can someone please review the page and help me to make it sound completely neutral? I would really like to get the "advert" designation removed.

Additionally, to get the page legitimized, the page states that "This page is a new unreviewed article." I would like for a verified Wikipedian to review the site and remove this designation when reviewed. I would love for the site to be legitimized. Thanks for your time.

CodyJDick (talk) 11:17, 3 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I think this one needs a lot of work on the tone, it's still very promotional. For example, these phrases are very far from a neutral point of view:

However, Caan isn't the only human capital asset that Hamilton Bradshaw touts. Because Caan is often away from the office, between filming Dragons' Den, interviewing on major news and talk shows, and huminitarian and philanthropic projects, the company has many other staff.

Also, I think you should eliminate pretty much all of the material that comes directly from HB's web site and promotional materials. You have some good references, but they are overshadowed by the promotional material, and I'm not sure that what you have established notability.Nuujinn (talk) 15:21, 6 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Head Cut (Stream Geomorphology)

Would appreciate a review of my first article about a geomorphological feature I encountered on a recent field visit. I was calling this feature a small waterfall in the field but I assumed there was a better name for it. Thus I found info on a head cut from the North Carolina Dept of Water Quality and summed up what I learned in this article.

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Submerged-arc_furnace_for_phosphorus_production

To whom it may concern

Very little is found in Wikipedia on submerged-arc furnaces. Submerged-arc furnaces is a very important subset of electrical arc furnaces and should have a rightful place on such a great website. This article deals with the production of phosphorus by using such a furnace.

I hope you find this a good first step Regards Emile —Preceding unsigned comment added by Emilescheepers444 (talk • contribs) 16:03, 3 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I think it's a very good start, but I think you need more references. It's best if every assertion made in an article can be supported by an external and reliable source. I think you should be able to find some more with just a little work, but drop me a note on my talk page if you get stuck. Nuujinn (talk) 21:17, 6 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Electro Thermal Dynamic Stripping Process

Can someone please review my article?

Thanks!

174.0.65.21 (talk) 17:22, 3 March 2010 (UTC)Phil mc2 2010/03/03[reply]

I am afraid that I have tagged the article for speedily deletion as spam - it appears to be an advertisement and how-to for the process masquerading as an article. – ukexpat (talk) 16:50, 5 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Ski Utah

Hello- I am trying to create an article on the history of skiing in Utah. This is the first draft User:Jkunzer/Ski Utah. The article discusses the history and development of skiing in Utah and the state's 13 resorts. I would really appreciate any feedback.

Jkunzer (talk) 22:32, 3 March 2010 (UTC) Jessica Kunzer 03/03/10[reply]

At the moment the draft is far too promotional in tone and would be speedily deleted if moved to the mainspace in its current form. Some of it is written in the first person which may indicate that you are connected with the organization - if so, you have a conflict of interest and should not be creating the article. Final point for now, the draft has no references to reliable sources to demonstrate that the subject meets the notability guidelines set out at WP:ORG. – ukexpat (talk) 16:45, 5 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

User:Maclau/Cecilia López Montaño

I would really appreciate a ny reviews on the Senator's page in english. She already has one in Spanish but given the nature of her international work, she feels it would be helpfull to have an official version in this language.

Thank you,

MC —Preceding unsigned comment added by Maclau (talk • contribs) 22:47, 3 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I’m afraid this is not suitable to go live at present, firstly because it does not comply with Wikipedia’s policy on neutral point of view. The layout is fine and some of the material is neutral and factual, but in parts it reads like a promotional piece written by the senator herself or a press officer, and contains a number of peacock terms and value judgements: (“... a tireless and determined writer” “... effective and strong political control” “...her most outstanding work is ...” “...solid professional background that keeps growing every day”). These all need to be removed or rewritten in a neutral tone, as does the comment about “the government’s inefficient management of the financial crisis” which is political bias. If you are writing this on behalf of Ms. Lopez, you should read Wikipedia:Conflict of interest carefully before proceeding further. If you do go ahead, the second sentence in the lead section would be better as the first sentence, stating exactly what Ms Lopez does before anything else. Most crucially of all, this article is completely unreferenced and has no citations at all for any of the information in it. You need to find reliable third-party sources and cite these correctly - see Wikipedia: Citing sources. The two links to Ms Lopez’s websites are currently embedded in the text; they should be removed to an external links section at the end.

I am slightly concerned by your reference to an “official” version in English. Please bear in mind that if this article goes live it is in no sense an official work: you will not own it and nor will Ms Lopez. Anyone can and will edit it, and you will have no right to keep your own preferred version. It’s always worth reading through WP:LUC before making an article about a person or subject with which you are closely affiliated. Ka renjc 20:47, 4 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Paintball

Over the last several months I have worked on Paintball quite a bit, and would be curious to see if it could be a candidate for a higher ranking (currently sitting at B ranking - and is a former good article nominee). Jwoodger (talk) 00:52, 4 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I'm not involved in quality assessment at all; perhaps someone who checks in here on occasion can help, but my impression is that Quality assessment of articles tends to be managed by projects. There is a Wikipedia:WikiProject Paintball; perhaps check in there (and add your name to the list of volunteers :) and you might ask one of the regulars in that project who does the assessments.--SPhilbrick T 16:45, 4 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

James W. "Jim" Case

(Jborrego16 (talk) 06:49, 4 March 2010 (UTC))[reply]

It's a well constructed, well organised and and generally well written article, though it suffers somewhat from POV language and "anecdotism" in places and should be toned down to a more neutral style. The lead section should be more specific about what the subject actually did - his notability isn't down to his university, it's down to his work as a TV production executive. I did have some anxiety about his notability at first, because there are few checkable references and those that exist don't make too strong a case for his notability, but reading through WP:N again I think he makes it on his association with pioneering programmes for public TV, and perhaps this could be emphasised more in the article. The "personal interview" cited in several places is an inadmissible piece of original research unless it's published somewhere in a neutral third party source, and it should be removed from the citations list along with any important facts that rely solely on it. Subheadings should be initial capitals only, per WP:MOS. The article title should not have both versions of his name in, and should be changed to Jim Case if that's how he was always known, or alternatively James W. Case with the first line of the lead section beginning "James W. "Jim" Case was ..." etc. Hope this helps, and thanks for writing the article. Ka renjc 11:21, 4 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Good Garage Scheme

Please could the page Good Garage Scheme be reviewed and any appropriate feedback left so I can ammend and build upon the page. I have added all appropriate sources and information to my best ability, but would appreciate any constructive criticism.

Thanks

Laurahuet (talk) 09:28, 4 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

You need to establish Notability, by showing this is discussed in third party, reliable sources. While you do have some references, all but one is to the entity itself, so do not qualify as external references. The remaining reference may not qualify, but I didn't even see the reference to the campaign.--SPhilbrick T 14:57, 4 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Winifred Marshall Gales

I'd love to get any feedback you may have on this article on Winifred Gales. I've included all of the biography I could find, and also some external links. Thanks! NCandbeyond (talk) 13:50, 4 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

One of the key issues to address is Notability, in particular, look at WP:AUTHOR. I don't know anything about the books this author has written, but there are books and there are books. The notability could be established by identifying reliable sources discussing either the author or the books, ideally both.--SPhilbrick T 14:49, 4 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Wylie Stateman

Wylie Stateman User:Soundsoff/Sandbox

Hello and thank you for taking a look at this page, especially interested to hear your thoughts since Wylie is up for an Oscar this weekend.

Best

Soundsoff (talk) 00:46, 5 March 2010 (UTC)Soundsoff[reply]

Lost Boys: Why our Sons Turn Violent and How We Can Save Them

The article in question
My first ever article so need some help. Wrote a simple introduction with external links for an important book in the comprehension of youth violence. Thanks in advance --Mbret001 (talk) 08:10, 5 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Well, the article itself lacks inline citations--you're providing a simple description of the work, and an external link to a review. You could improve the article by adding some inline citations for some external references that help establish why this book is notable. Nuujinn (talk) 14:59, 6 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Lemma about a Greek professor

Hi! I have created a page about a Greek professor and academic. He is notable person and world famous because of the invention of two methods for dating ancient artifacts. This is the link: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Nikplas/Ioannis_Liritzis Please, if it is easy, I would appreciate a last check from you before the final upload. Many thanks in advance. --Nikplas (talk) 08:59, 5 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Looks great on first reading; I'll have a couple specific comments in a couple hours, specifically relating to footnotes.--SPhilbrick T 13:02, 5 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Oops, ran into a snag working on one of your journal references. I was going to suggest how to improve the footnotes, with an example. I still will, but I'd say you can go live with out. The one thing you might want to address first is "He has written over 200 original papers in international cited journals and 8 books (3 in english)." Do you have a reference? It is an important claim for notability, but isn't referenced.--SPhilbrick T 14:46, 5 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I am grateful to all of you for your efforts to make this lemma looking right. I will wait for the suggestions to improve footnotes. As for the phrase "He has written 200 original papers..." how can I prove it with a reference? Scopus mention only 82 articles that has at least 1 citation from 1996 up today. But scopus do not index all scientific journals of the world... This link http://www.mediterraneanstudies.org/ms/vol_10.html from MEDITERRANEAN STUDIES ASSOCIATION ( http://www.mediterraneanstudies.org/ ) make a reference to professor's published work. is it acceptable? What you suggest for this lemma if I can't find a reference for this sentence? Many thanks in advance. --Nikplas (talk) 00:03, 6 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

The question would be, how do you know that he's written over 200 original papers? If, for example, he told you this over coffee one morning, that's not a usable reference. If he has a CV that you have access to, that's better, but you'd need to note that it's his claim. I think the url you list is a good reference, but it claims only over 100 articles in international journals, 60 in greek journals, and a few books. I'm also curious if there's any overlap between the greek and international publications. But I'm not sure that the number of articles is really all that important. Nuujinn (talk) 15:07, 6 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Regarding the citation for the paper count, I'd suggest going with the MEDITERRANEAN STUDIES ASSOCIATION link, and adjusting the claim to match the link. Of course, 200 papers is more than 100, but it is better to have a claim supported by a reference, than a stronger claim not supported.

I resolved the "snag" I mentioned earlier.

You can improve the style of the citation by using a citation tool. I like the one you can install by editing your preferences. (Click on "preferences at the top of your page, then the last tab "Gadgets", then look for "reftools" under "Editing Gadgets". Click the box, then "save" at the bottom of the page. Next time you edit a page, look at the toolbar of buttons, and you'll see a new one at the right end call "Cite". Click on it, and choose one of the options, for example, Journal or Web. Then fill in the boxes, and it will create a properly formatted citation for you.

I did an example for you with your first reference.

Before I talk about the reference, I prefer LDR style references, which keep the edited page cleaner. This approach puts a short ref name in the main text, but the full citation is spelled out down in the refs section. Ask me for more info if this isn't clear.

One thing you have to help me with - I don't know whether the "283" is a volume or an issue - I assumed volume, but if it is an issue, look at the reference and change "volume=283" to "issue=283". If you don't follow, let me know and I'll do it.

I think it would help to convert your other online references using this tool.

Nice article, especially for someone new to the process. Thanks for your fine contribution.--SPhilbrick T 15:15, 6 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Dear Nuujinn, I totally agree with your point of view concerning the 200 papers. There is no way to find it, and will be time consuming to read his whole web page to cross check them. As dear Sphilbrick says, and I agree 100%, I prefer a claim supported with a reference than a assumption. So, I adjusted the sentence to match the link. Also added the link to references.

I am not sure I understood what "snag" is...

I formatted all references with the citation tool. Very useful tool! Now the edited page is much more clear.

Thanks for the example. Very helpful.

"283" is the volume. I also added the issue number "issue=5742"

Many thanks for your help and kind words. I planning to help, in my free time, with Wikipedia:WikiProject Archaeology and Wikipedia:WikiProject Greece. Please, tell me if there are other corrections that I have to do or when I can uploaded to the main space. Thanks. --Nikplas (talk) 19:34, 6 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Oups! I think I made a mistace in merging my changes with Sphilbrick's (addition of issn)... I have to re-make refs... Just give me few minutes... First time is always difficult.. :) --Nikplas (talk) 19:48, 6 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Fortunately I had saved a copy of the main text in a notepad! References are ok again! I also added the issn of all journals. Thanks --Nikplas (talk) 20:31, 6 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

"snag" is american slang (I should try to keep to internationalist english), a snag is something sticking out that prevents forward motion (eg, a branch of a fallen tree in a river that catches a boat). Good effort on your article! Nuujinn (talk) 21:12, 6 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry for using a colloquial expression "snag". I had tried to convert your refernce intot he proper format, and I hadn't used the "Journal" option before - my first attempt gave an odd result. I looked into it and found my mistake.

This looks good, I'd say ready to go live. Do you know what to do next? (Move it to mainspace). If you want to do it, go ahead, if you don't know what to do, say so and I'll do it. I hope you will continue to contribute to Wikipedia—I'd say the project will have gained a great editor.--SPhilbrick T 23:13, 6 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

There is no problem with the word "snag". One new word to my vocabulary! :) I prefer to move it to mainspace by my self in order to learn how to do it. If I will encounter problems I will tell you! Many thanks for your efforts. Nick --Nikplas (talk) 17:24, 7 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I moved it and I am very excited! In top of the main page is the sentence "This page is a new unreviewed article." Thanks! Nick --Nikplas (talk) 17:48, 7 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I pulled the tag for you since it's been reviewed. Good work! Nuujinn (talk) 00:24, 8 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Project Noah

Peterhorvath (talk) 15:12, 5 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I have reviewed and added a couple of maintenance tags. The main issue is notability - I am not convinced that the references demonstrate notability per the guidelines at WP:PRODUCT. – ukexpat (talk) 16:34, 5 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

John Russell (musician)

This is my first article. I've put quite a lot of work into it but would appreciate it if someone could review it or give some feedback. Many thanks!PressedBack (talk) 15:49, 5 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Here's the link: John Russell (musician)PressedBack (talk) 15:52, 5 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Unfortunately the link you have provided is to the disambiguation page for John Russell. Could you try again ?

Derek R Bullamore (talk) 16:13, 5 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

A very impressive first article; congratulations. I've removed the unreviewed tag. If I had a (very) minor quibble it would be the reference to events being "ongoing" as this type of material tends to date. Other than that, nice work. Ka renjc 18:46, 6 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Hey, thanks! I take your point about "ongoing" and will find a way to ammend that. --PressedBack (talk) 22:38, 6 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Employer Branding and Employer Brand Management

User:R W Mosley/Employer branding and Employer brand management

(R W Mosley (talk) 18:20, 5 March 2010 (UTC))[reply]

I have taken a look and made some formatting fixes to the headings to comply with the manual of style. The subject would appear to be notable. A couple of points - please take a look at WP:LEAD for an explanation of what the lead section should do. At the moment it is not at all clear from the lead what the subject actually is/means. Also there is some jargon in the article which may not be immediately comprehensible to the layman reader. When it is ready to move to the mainspace, I think Employer branding would be the correct title. You have plenty of references, which is good. If any of them are online, please use the {{cite web}} template to cite them, and similarly {{cite book}} for citations from books and {{cite journal}} for journals. There is also a technique for using the same reference more than once and that's explained at WP:NAMEDREFS. Hope this helps. – ukexpat (talk) 18:35, 5 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

User:Rangertee/75th_Ranger_Regiment_Association,_Inc.

Hi.

I am looking for feedback on my first article. The Article is: User:Rangertee/75th_Ranger_Regiment_Association,_Inc.

I have tried to read the help articles and guidelines thoroughly, and would appreciate some feedback. I have permission to reproduce the material contained in the article, and have footnoted all the information in the article itself.

The wikilink to the article is:

User:Rangertee/75th_Ranger_Regiment_Association,_Inc.

Thank you, in advance, for your time.

Rangertee (talk) 20:13, 5 March 2010 (UTC)Rangertee. March 5, 2010: 3:07p.m.EST (GMT-5:00)[reply]

Entries in "See Also" should not be full links but Wikilinks. I fixed the first two for you.
Please read Article Layout, as your layout does not match the desired layout.
Links in External Links should not be the same ones as in References.
You have a Notes section with some references, but a separate Reference section with others. The second section is not how references are done. See footnotes
In many cases, you've linked to a term in WP, but used the full url, not just the Wikilink. I fixed the ones in your lede, as examples.
Most importantly, you said you obtained permission to use material. This is a tricky and serious area. Sometimes, people will give permission to use material as long as it is used in Wikipedia only. That type of permission is not sufficient, and people need to understand that once in Wikipedia, it can be used elsewhere, for many purposes include for profit and for parody. You need to have permission sent to Wikipedia, in proper format. See WP:COPYRIGHT for general info, and WP:PERMISSION for specific steps to ensure that proper permission is obtained. Sorry for the bureaucracy, but copyright is taken very seriously and we want to make sure we do it right.--SPhilbrick T 15:45, 6 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Ideatree

IdeaTree

Looking for general correctness. Thanks.

Ronman57 (talk) 21:09, 5 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

You need to establish Notability, by showing this is discussed in third party, reliable sources. While you do have one reference, you need more. --SPhilbrick T 15:28, 6 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Lost Boys: Why Our Sons Turn Violent and How We Can Save Them

Would like to request feedback for the revisions I have made for my page. Page link. Thanks in advance for your time. It is much appreciated.--Mbret001 (talk) 21:34, 6 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Dimitri "Mobengo" Mugianis

dimitri "mobengo" Mugianis —Preceding unsigned comment added by Bovenga (talk • contribs) 21:37, 6 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Denver Depression of 1893

Denver Depression of 1893 I would just like to have my article reviewed to make sure things are in order for a wikipedia entry.

MichelaA (talk) 21:57, 6 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I don't think "bimetallism" should be capitalized. I changed it.
I made a few other minor fixes, you can click on history to see what I did (ask if you need more help on how to see historical changes).
I'm not enamored with "disestablished" as a word choice under causes. What about "repealed" (assuming it was repealed)?
You have some phrases indented with a bullet point for no obvious reason, e.g "Owned by Reverend Thomas Uzzell".
Your opening sentence of "Effects" could use a more specific time frame.
The next sentence is too long, consider changing July to "in July and ending the sentence there.
The sentence that starts "Many unemployed miners.." needs work—it starts fine, but ends awkwardly.
The sentence starting "August 11, 1893" shouldn't start with a bare date; work it into the text. The end of that sentence is awkward; I can guess what it means, but it needs improvement.
After footnote 12, you should have text that flows, not bullet point type items in text.
In the last sentence before Politics, this should not be a bulleted. What does "this" refer to? "broadway" shows are in New York. I assume you mean something like theatrical productions.
In People, I presume all of these people are dead, so it is odd to see the death date for one of the people. I suggest removing it.
"Only saved from destitution in 1898 by his appointment to Postmaster." Is not a sentence.
Despite this longish list, everything I've mentioned is easy to fix, but give it a good run through to see if other wording needs tightening up. --SPhilbrick T 23:00, 6 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

External links are for links not in references, so I removed the external link.--SPhilbrick T 23:03, 6 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

User:Joey_Babbitt/Cornerstone_Church_of_San_Diego

I'm working on an article about a local church, Cornerstone Church of San Diego. It has gained notoriety lately since it was named the 3rd fastest growing church in America by Outreach Magazine. The pastor also has the service broadcasted on a local Christian radio station, KPRZ, on Sunday morning. Looking at other churches in Wikipedia, I believe this church merits inclusion. Am I correct? Joey Babbitt (talk) 02:21, 7 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Bexhill Amateur Theatrical Society

Bexhill Amateur Theatrical Society Bradburp (talk) 09:37, 7 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Please read Article Layout, your article structure isn't in the form desired. You'll also need to establish Notability by providing references to reliable sources.--SPhilbrick T 13:13, 7 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Publishing Article

Hello - can you please let me know why my article isn't posting? http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Mbeaudreault/Mercator_Risk_Services

THanks,

Maura —Preceding unsigned comment added by Mbeaudreault (talk • contribs) 12:20, 7 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

By "posted" I assume you mean you want it to show up if someone does a search for it. That won't happen until it is moved into mainspace, but that shouldn't happen until it is ready.

Sorry to be blunt, but it reads like a advertisement, not an encyclopedia article. See WP:PROMO.

You haven't established why this company has Notability. I'm sure it will meet the standard; I'm familiar with the company, but you need to establish it by providing references to reliable sources. References can be tricky for new editors, see WP:CITE and footnotes for help.--SPhilbrick T 13:10, 7 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Alan Loveday

Dear Wiki Editor

Please review my article on the violinist Alan Loveday Alan Loveday Flying spiccato (talk) 15:19, 7 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

You have no references to reliable sources. The format is not appropriate for Wikipedia, see Article Layout for some guidance. The style of writing is not encyclopedic; check other articles on other violinists to see the difference.--SPhilbrick T 16:32, 7 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

article name Mark W. Moffett

I cannot figure how to do the wikilink - here's the URL: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Wikipedia:Requests_for_feedback#Mark_W._Moffett_New_page_to_post

He is a distinguished scholar of sociobiology, top photographer/writer for National Geographic, runs a research station in the Amazon Rain Forest canopy, etc. I have posted a draft for comments. I responded to a previous comment and added many more references. I would like to add a photograph but I do not know how. I would like to post it a week from now depending on comments. You can email me at <redacted>. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Rocordman (talk • contribs) 15:45, 7 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Check out WP:Article wizard 2.0. It will help you start the process, including the steps to create your draft in a user subpage. --SPhilbrick T 16:38, 7 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

It's good that you have found some references, however the structure is not appropriate for Wikipedia, see Article Layout for some guidance.--SPhilbrick T 16:41, 7 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Article named Virtual disk image

I will appreciate a review of the technical article virtual disk image

Categories: Virtual machines | Virtualization software | Hypervisor | Computer Storage | Computer File Systems

Thanks (Barnet.Herts (talk) 23:53, 7 March 2010 (UTC))[reply]

I took an admittedly quick look through, and it seems fine to me. I'll take another look later once my head cold clears up, but that seems like a very useful article for sysadmins. Nuujinn (talk) 00:17, 8 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Trozzolo Communications Group

Please review the userpage for Trozzolo Communications Group Trozzolo Communications Group Moraqjo (talk) 02:17, 8 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Abraham Lincoln Institute

I am working on my first article, an entry on an organization I am a part of named the Abraham Lincoln Institute. It is in my userspace and I believe it is close to ready (although I would like to make the institute's website a little more prominent than it is now--as a reference) but would appreciate feedback. I received some kind help from Wifione a few hours ago. Many thanks.

Gleidner (talk) 08:45, 8 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I have not looked at your potential new article, but your comment of "an organization I am a part of" immediately brings to mind Wikipedia:Conflict of interest. You may already be aware of this guidance, but if not, it is well worth a look.

Derek R Bullamore (talk) 09:07, 8 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

[1] ttp://photography.nationalgeographic.com/photography/photographers/photographer-mark-moffett/ Photographer of National Geographic

[2] ttp://www.amazon.com/s?ie=UTF8&rh=i%3Astripbooks%2Cp_27%3AMark%20Moffett&field-author=Mark%20Moffett&page=1

[3] ttp://www.amazon.com/s?ie=UTF8&rh=i%3Astripbooks%2Cp_27%3AMark%20Moffett&field-author=Mark%20Moffett&page=1

[4] ttp://www.doctorbugs.com

[5] ttp://ngm.nationalgeographic.com/ngm/0611/moffett.html

[6] ttp://www.roychapmanandrewssociety.org/roy-chapman-andrews-society-awards/dr-mark-moffett-2008/

[7] ttp://www.amazon.com/s?ie=UTF8&rh=i%3Astripbooks%2Cp_27%3AMark%20Moffett&field-author=Mark%20Moffett&page=1

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