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Organization of the Luftwaffe (1933–1945)

Nominator(s): Perseus 71 ^talk 02:33, 31 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]

This is second time I am nominating this article. The First nomination has been archived here. The nomination got archived for one reason only. There were not many extensive comments on the subject of this article. As you can see, there were no opposes. Only Comments on the Sources and image copyrights.

My rationale for nomination is same as before. This article is predominantly about the organizational structure of Luftwaffe during the period of 1933 to 1945. This was the period when an Air Force was not yet recognized as a strategic armed force. One of the lesser known facts is that Luftwaffe during this time was probably the only force to have a tank division of its own. Point is, this article goes into the distinctive organizational structure compared to other contemporary Air Forces of the time. At the same time its not going into the the history of Luftwaffe.

From assessment standpoint, this article has undergone A class review and has been assessed to meed those criteria. A Peer review was conducted and is now archived. The Article also underwent a proper CopyEd by an editor from WP:GoCE. I think that at this point its in a good enough shape that it could be reviewed to see if it can be a FA candidate. The Sources of this article were extensively validated as part of the A Class review and the first nomination. Perseus 71 ^talk 02:33, 31 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Comments - no dab links or dead external links. Nikkimaria (talk) 03:16, 31 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Oppose after further consideration, based on concerns about sourcing (particularly the following inconsistencies). Nikkimaria (talk) 03:45, 31 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Please be more consistent in the way references are formatted. Consider: "United States War Deparment" vs "US War Department"; multiple-author references with second author first-name first vs last-name first; shortened citations with two authors using "and" vs "&"; etc.
Is Frieser and Greenwood 1995 or 2005?
Is Caldwell and Muller 2002 or 2007?
Does the book by Lepage have one author or two? The formatting leaves this unclear
Is the second author of the Taylor book Percivale John or John Percivale? Again, unclear formatting (and Google search suggests neither is correct?)
Is the second author of the Williamson book Andrew Stephen or Stephen Andrew?
Deighton appears only in References, not in Citations
You have two Mitcham 2007s on the Reference list, but the Citations don't consistently distinguish between the two (one says 2007-b - which one does this refer to? What about the one that says only 2007?)
Weal 2001 appears only on the Reference list
Check publisher for Caldwell

comment - stylistic issues:

theres a lot of paratheneses (and in some case double parenthesis (brackets within brackets)) in use for the German words and abbreviations. Further the German word and the link to German language taking the wikilinks eg the article has " formed a Luftwaffe high Command (German: Oberkommando der Luftwaffe) for operational management" which seems to my mind clumsy compared to "formed a high Command (the Oberkommando der Luftwaffe) for operational management of the Luftwaffe" GraemeLeggett (talk) 09:25, 31 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]
The lead - introduces the expansion of the Luftwaffe to have its own ground troops and goes on to list some of them, but not the why of it. How about dropping the list of ground units for a sentence on the reason for these units? GraemeLeggett (talk) 09:38, 31 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Quick question is there a reason the article is not named "Organization of the Luftwaffe in the Wermacht" instead of the year period? Nergaal (talk) 18:36, 31 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]