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Mount Cleveland (Alaska)

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I've listed this article for peer review because it failed an FAC fairly recently. That experience taught me that over-prepared is still not prepared enough; hence, I'm listing the article for review here as a step towards renominating it and, hopefully, passing this time. ;) ResMar 04:22, 30 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I think it's always useful to research a bit more. Have you consulted all of the resources here? ceranthor 14:39, 30 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

All the ones that are accessible, yeah. The problem with Cleveland is that there's tons of sources, but none are very detailed, most just gloss over Cleveland with passing reference. Still, many of them contain short little unique bits, and it's from that that the article is structured. I don't remember exactly, but I think I talked to Awk and he got me some of the material in there, but it turned out to be nothing new; and if Awk can't get it, I certainly can't, haha. ResMar 16:56, 30 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by Chipmunkdavis

As you noted in the FAC, it is a short article. However, if you have consulted all the resources available, there's probably little that can be done about that. If I see any information that I feel is particularly missing, I suppose I'll note it.

Lead

When I read "a remote landmass 490 km (304 mi) from the western end of the Aleutian Arc" I assume that it is located far to the west of the Aleutians. However, in the next paragraph it states that the island is part of the Aleutians, and from the map it appears to be near to the middle of the arc. Could you clarify its location slightly?
You have two sources currently in the lead, one of which is only found at that point. Per WP:LEAD, the lead should have no information not in the body. Information from these sources should be moved into the main article text if not already there. I notice the description of stratovolcanoes is currently not in the body.
I would think information about the most recent eruption(s) would be useful to mention here. Try to make sure that all sections in the article are mentioned in the lead in some way, at the moment it seems to me that a short description of structure would be helpful.

Geological setting

"As the plate moves deeper into the earth, the increasing pressure results in the loss of volatiles from various hydrous minerals, especially chlorite, and the addition of water to the mantle wedge between the subducting and overriding plates lowers the melting point and causes magma to form." This is a very long sentence, which includes terminology (eg volatiles, mantle wedge) whose meaning may not be obvious to your layman reader. Although they are wikilinked, perhaps a slightly longer explanation would make things clearer.

Etymology

This is a fairly long paragraph, and I would suggest a simple break into two paragraphs separating the Aleut name information from the English name information.
Since this section introduces the Aleut name as Chuginadak, the subsequent phrase "Mount Cleveland and the rest of Chuginadak were separate islands" may be confusing, especially as it still discusses Aleut lore. Something like "Mount Cleveland and the rest of what is now Chuginadak island were separated" would be clearer?
This section includes the phrase "like the other volcanoes in the Four Islands group". The four islands group has not been mentioned before in the article, so to the unknowledgeable (aka me) it raises more questions than it answers at this point. Are all these islands volcanically related, and if so perhaps information about the history of the group could be added to Geological setting? (as I see there is some information in the next section) Additionally, whatever the first mention is, wikilink it at that point.
How is Corwin's rock relevant?

Geography and structure

Is there anything unique about it being almost symmetrical?
When you say Mount Cleveland is "the highest of the four volcanoes" does that mean the volcanoes of the islands of the four mountains? Or are there four volcanoes on Chuginadak?
What island is Nikolski on? Is it an Aleut settlement? Are there anything like research stations closer to Mount Cleveland?
Information about the eastern half of the island does not seem entirely connected. I assume the volcanic peaks are related to each other, are they from the same magma chamber as Mount Cleveland? (excuse my ignorance if I'm saying complete rubbish) In addition, you mention glaciers on the east, are there any on Mount Cleveland?
What is the significance of there being rhyolite?
What does it mean for a volcano to be "heavily dissected"?
The last couple of sentences here have some terminology that again could use some laymanising (laymanising?). By "The flows" does that mean hardened lava flows? By "variably vegetated" does that mean different kinds of vegetation or vegetation only occurring in some areas?
Without knowing we are in the Holocene it is hard to understand the connection between the lack of erosion and the result that it is a Holocene volcano. Perhaps add something such as "...Mount Cleveland is likely a Holocene volcano, formed in the last 10,000 years."

Eruptive history

Perhaps best to separate the description of vulcanian and strombolian eruptions, again for the layman.
Who observed the different eruptions? Why are half of them only possible?
Most of this section seems very good, and besides perhaps more explanation on the size of recent eruptions and the reason some eruptions were only possibly eruptions I can at the moment think of little else to say here.

I'm not an expert on volcanoes, and this article seems fairly thorough to me. It seems you know your volcanoes, and I hope what I have said is clear. If not, I'm watching this page. Good luck, Chipmunkdavis (talk) 14:04, 4 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]