Talk:En Ami/GA1

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Reviewer: DAP388 (talk · contribs) 23:52, 31 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

"Jason McPeck, a young cancer sufferer"; Sufferer doesn't sound right in this context. Patient would be a better replacement.
"The Smoking Man, who is starting to succumb to lung cancer"; Again, succumb is used in the wrong context. Try this, "The Smoking Man, who has a progressive case of lung cancer"
"and that he wants to make right his wrongs by giving the cure to Scully." I'm not sure what is meant by this. Are you trying to say he is setting things right?
"She agrees to go on a trip to retrieve the cure, but wears a wire." If possible, please explain why she is wearing a wire.
Be consistent with capitalization in regards to Smoking Man and Lone Gunman. In some cases, the "t" in the is capitalized, while other instances it is lower-case.
"They also find that Scully's computer was hacked into and someone has been posing as Scully, sending Cobra messages calling for a meeting." -> "Furthermore, they find that an anonymous being has hack Scully's computer and stolen his identity, sending Cobra messages calling for a meeting."

"The script went through many revisions. Several scenes were cut, including one that featured The Smoking Man teaching Scully how to water-ski." A semicolon should be placed after revisions, as the other sentences are related to the aforementioned one.

"The episode received mixed-to-positive reviews from critics." -> "The episode received varying responses from critics."

That's all. On hold for seven days. —DAP388 (talk) 19:39, 2 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I believe I've addressed all the issues. Thank you for reviewing this!--Gen. Quon (talk) 20:26, 3 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Looks good. Happy to pass this one. :) —DAP388 (talk) 21:08, 3 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]