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I'm doing the peer review for this per request, and suggested a copyedit from a member of the GOCE, but a copyedit should only work on the phrasing, not on the content, which was in the process of being reviewed. Edits such as this are worrying, because the page should be as comprehensive as possible and the primary contributor should be consulted before material is removed. So, I'm just making sure that's been done, and that questions are brought to the talk page. Thanks. Truthkeeper88 (talk) 02:40, 18 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Hmmm ... I guess I take a broader view of what copyediting entails. In any case, the requester is keeping an eye on what I've done (and has objected to something else I've taken out). We'll hash it out, now that I've finished my slicing and dicing. Clarityfiend (talk) 04:46, 18 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks. If you discuss here that would be helpful to me, to I can see what's going on. I'd intended to finish the peer review, and then saw you were copyediting so decided to wait. At this point it's easier for me to have an eye on the conversation as I review the page. Thanks. Truthkeeper88 (talk) 12:47, 18 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I added around 3 sentences from the article that I came across just now : one in the casting section, of a character played by Django Reinhardt's great grandson and the others in the music section, about the java track and Catherine Ringer. morelMWilliam18:47, 18 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Okay, I'm done with the copyediting. MorelMWilliam has suggested expanding the introduction. I'm not certain if that's a request for my opinion or for me actually doing it, but in light of Truthkeeper88's comments, I think it's best to put that on hold for the moment if it's the latter. Clarityfiend (talk) 02:34, 20 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Comments
I've fixed some of the issues raised on my talk page. I'll wait until finishing the copy edit to return to the following which require looking at the original version in the history:
Rewording the reason for Claude leaving the orphanage
The manner in which the passports were processed
Deciding whether to retrieve the cut information from the background section
A very minor issue that needs to be fixed now is that according to WP:MOSTITLE single songs have quotation marks but not italics. If that could be fixed it would be great. Generally I think it looks good. Please check my copy edits for accuracy. Thanks. Truthkeeper88 (talk) 01:10, 16 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Regarding the background section, I wasn't aware of the clear template. Now it is fine. And on the processing of passports, Lundy processed their passports, faking their identities, to protect them from the French Gendermarie. To save your time in seeking through the history, the earlier version stated that 'Lundy processed their passports in a way favourable to the Roma'. morelMWilliam05:50, 16 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Questions:
How old is Claude and how does he know about the Romani? Does he just happen to find a caravan or does he actively seek it? I think that needs clarification.
Claude is nine years old. He escapes from his orphanage as he is tired of the confined life there and gets into the woods. He doesn't know about the Romani. The Romani come across him later and adopt him. They name the boy, Korkoro. morelMWilliam15:53, 24 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Processing of the passports: did Lundi not record the movements of the Romani. I understand a manner favorable to them but think it needs to be more specifc - what exactly did she do?
The Vichy France used to control the movements of the Romani by monitoring their movements from their passports. Lundi forges it, choosing not to record their movements. This way, the Romani can escape the law that forbidding travel beyond a threshold.morelMWilliam15:53, 24 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
In the themes section it mentions that it's Shindlerian because of Lavoine's actions - should that be Rosier instead of Lavoine?
On a re-read, I'm finding some repetition between the themes section and the reception - try to go through and eliminate everything that's repeated, or at least as much as can be done.
I'd suggest adding in the clarifications about Claude and the passports as you've written here. When I swing through for a final copyedit, I'll fix if necessary. Truthkeeper (talk) 00:03, 25 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
User:MonelMwilliams has been repeatedly reverting a minor improvement I made to this article's lead for MOS:LEAD. In his last revert he claims that a GAR was done on this article to expand the lead and I should read the GAR archive, I can't locate anything to show that a GAR was done or that any GAR archive exists for this page. RobertRosen (talk) 13:15, 14 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Check the GAR and peer review archives. Content removals are not minor edits; typo fixings are. Refrain from making major edits before discussing here. This article underwent major copyedits, 2 peer reviews followed by a successful GAR and was under the attention of multiple experienced wikipedians. I find no problems with the lead and so did the peer reviewers and the GAR while checking for WP:MOS. If you go read what the movie is all about, you would come across Romanies and this sentence serves to describe the movie's multi ethnic cast. This article follows a style consistently followed in film related featured articles. morelMWilliam14:42, 14 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
