Talk:Nerve net

October 21, 2012

Hello, our names are Nicole Carroll, Kishanraj Bhakta, and Craig Parsons and we are students at Boston college enrolled in an Intoduction to Neuroscience course. We are currently working on a project attempting to expand upon the Nerve Net wikipedia page. This task is udertaken by the Society for Neurosciences and we hope to do our best in improving this article. This project is scheduled to be completed by December 3, 2012. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 136.167.252.92 (talk) 00:44, 22 October 2012 (UTC)

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I thought this article was very good. You did a good job describing the various organisms and the evolution of a nerve net. However, the first thing I noticed was a grammatical error in you evolution section. It was in the third to last sentence "This is due to the first appearance of neurogenesis occurred in eumetazoa, which was a common ancestor of coelenterates and bilaterians". Also I think that you do a good job describing sensory and motor neurons but I think the article could benefit with some description and talk of intermediate neurons, which detect patterns in sensory neurons and send signals to groups of motor neurons. Overall I think you did a good job and there were minor tweaks that will make your article just slightly better. Cameron Perry 91 (talk) 20:37, 19 November 2012 (UTC) ===Peer Review===

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Hey guys, I really enjoyed your article. I found the examples of organisms that have nerve nets and how they function within those organisms to make the article more accessible. On the other hand, while I find these examples help with the overall content of the page, I think sections such as the Developmental Neurogenesis section would benefit from a few sentences on the development of nerve nets in general, not just in cnidaria. By beginning sections with a broader description, the specific examples of nerve nets would make a lot more sense. In addition, I would suggest putting the Anatomy section earlier as it gives a good broad description that will help the reader apply that information to the rest of the article. Also I found a one or two minor grammatical errors in your evolution section's second paragraph, so you might want to read it over again. Overall great page, and from the comments below it seems you really were able to overhaul this stub!Devitod (talk) 19:21, 18 November 2012 (UTC)

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I thought that there was a significant amount of good information in this article, however I found that its organization made it a bit difficult to understand. The introduction was well written, however I feel as though some sentences, such as the last one, weren’t completely necessary and could be included later in the article. In terms of organization, I was unsure as to how the first paragraph of the evolution section related to the rest of the section or where exactly nerve nets were introduced in terms of evolution. The information is definitely there, I just feel like it could be shifted so that it would be clearer to the reader. For development, maybe the title or the first sentence could talk about how only cnidarian are talked about within this section. Other than that, this section describes neurogenesis in cnidarian in an informative and engaging manner. The anatomy and physiology sections are both well organized but could possibly be elaborated on. For instance, maybe ongoing research could be mentioned in the physiology portion when you mention how it’s not completely understood. A minor tweak needs to be made to fix the references at the very bottom of the page. Overall, I thought this article was well researched and well written which could be significantly improved by small adjustments in organization. Cmrossin (talk) 02:00, 20 November 2012 (UTC)

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What? Pain isn't something that is simply sensed, it is something that is perceived. This article seems to imply that these extremely simple, decentralized nervous systems somehow allow the animal to be consciously aware of their environment, which is utterly ridiculous.

I've rewritten it, I simply couldn't stand to see such nonsense... Richard001 11:02, 1 August 2007 (UTC)

While I admire your intolerance of nonsense, I fear that it could lead to madness if you apply it to Wikipedia.  Mr JM  23:12, 8 November 2010 (UTC)

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Hello, I think you have a great start to your article, the examples are used very well in some cases to accurately put the information into perspective. However, I believe that overall you need to include more descriptive information about the general definition of what a nerve net is, without relating it to Cnidaria or other organisms. The Introduction section seems also seems to have a tad of a tangent, which I would watch out for. This section needs to be concise and tell the reader exactly what the nerve net is and how it functions generally. Some of the information you put in the Anatomy section may be a good example of this. Some of the information now in the introduction may also be expanded upon and put in its own section, for example "Examples in Organisms." (Or something along those lines). The Evolution section needs some work as some the writing was a bit confusing to understand. Also I think it may be more clear if the second paragraph came first. One example of grammar that you should watch out for is "and they are the first two phyla that differentiated nervous systems based on synaptic conduction." I read this sentence several times and was trying to grasp exactly what you mean. From what I gather you mean that these were the first to phyla that had nervous systems that were based on synaptic conduction? Try to make some of these concepts more clear. Also, try to briefly describe some of the terms that you hyperlink. Hyperlinking is very useful in that it can provide more information on a topic, but no one wants to stop reading frequently to understand a term. This will effectively make it flow more. Finally, I would suggest the use of pictures in some areas, for example the section on Developmental Neurogenesis, as it may serve as a helpful tool for the reader to refer to while reading, often times it is hard to picture so much information in one's head. Overall, I think your section of physiology and anatomy is good, perhaps expand on it more if there is available information? In general, I think your biggest issue you should focus on is organization and flow, your key focus should be making the article accessible and as comprehendible as possible to a wide audience, as wikipedia is used by all age groups. Overall this is a great start, and with a few tweaks your on your way to a very good final product! Goldbejk (talk) 22:33, 18 November 2012 (UTC)

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The article touches on a lot of interesting point, but I think that you need to be more specific as what a nerve net is and include information about how a nerve net affects the fitness of organisms like Cnidarians. I also think the the Physiology section should be expanded and more information should be included about the mechanisms involved in the nerve cells communicating in a nerve net. Overall, the article has great descriptions and explanations but the addition and expansion on information that I mentioned would make for a great final product. Bellre (talk) 25:03, 19 November 2012

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I like how well put together this article is. The explanations and definitions are very organic. As far as improvement, I would suggest that the anatomy section should be expanded a bit further, specifically in example cases. An image would definitely help amplify the information being explained in that section, such as this one: http://w3.shorecrest.org/~Lisa_Peck/MarineBio/syllabus/ch7invertebrates/Invertwp/2007/eby/nervenet.gif

Aside from the anatomy section, the intro could maybe use less of an explanation in terms of specific examples towards species, and rather more general information on the nerve net itself. What makes it different from symmetrical nervous system specifically. Advantages? Disadvantages? Reasons for a species having radial symmetry needing this trait? Not that this was not already mentioned or intended to be explained, but I thought it could help. Otherwise it's looking very good. Waleedfarag (talk) —Preceding undated comment added 22:18, 19 November 2012 (UTC)

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This article is well researched and well written. I have a few suggestions that might be helpful in the editing process. I think that the introduction, while it tells us about nerve nets in a general way, really does not deconstruct what a nerve net is enough to understand it on a first read. Since the introduction is the first paragraph people on Wikipedia read, it is important to grasp and maintain their attention. This can be done by being concise and also by not starting the first sentence referring to other organisms. I found this to be confusing. Maybe this sentence from the anatomy section should be the first sentence, “A nerve net is a diffuse network of cells that can congregate to form ganglia in some organisms, but does not constitute a brain.” It is clear concise and avoids any other complications that may hinder understanding. The second paragraph is clearer, though should avoid too much detail since the introduction is an overview. The last paragraph of the introduction really seems to belong in the anatomy section since it is detailed and it is never mentioned again. The evolution section is helpful and it was a good section to include. My suggestion for this section is to maybe be a little clearer. For example, in, “Larvae differentiate sensory cells which respond to stimuli including light, gravity, and water movement” what larvae are you referring to? I understood that it was sponge cell larvae, but it is not exactly clear. Things like this could be fixed and greatly add to the overall clarity and understanding of the article. The developmental neurogenesis section seems to be a little dense and can probably be helped by just adding a few words that help simplify the material—for example, “coelenterates” and “bilaterians” could use a couple words to identify them as an animal phyla perhaps. The physiology section is very good, but a few small mistakes can be avoided such as in “The motor neurons communicate with cells via chemical synapse to produce a certain reaction to a certain stimuli.” The word “certain” is repeated and makes reading more difficult to follow. Overall, this section helps clarify some questions I may have had as I read the introduction. MellaNatalie (talk) 23:31, 19 November 2012 (UTC)

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I thought the article was well written and constructed because I could follow it pretty well. One suggestion I have is that you may want to consolidate the information you have on hydra. I understand that you are commenting on different aspects of the nerve net in hydra, but it seemed as if some of the general headings were specifically talking mostly about hydra. Maybe you want to have a separate section for hydra, since it is a model organism used to study nerve nets and seems pretty important to the article. It would also be nice to see more pictures, since it looks like there are a good amount out there of the nerve net in different organisms you mentioned in the article. You might also want to considering moving most of the information you have in the introduction to the other sections (perhaps even the evolution section, expanding on what such a simple nervous system could provide for an organism – its purpose). Overall, it is a good article, you may just want to tweak a few things here and there. Financ (talk)

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You guys did a wonderful job of providing a comprehensive picture of this special type of nervous system. I think your scope was very thorough, and the individual sections are well-written and informative. My first and biggest suggestion would be adding pictures (evolutionary tree; cnidarians; the actual anatomy of a nerve net), because I'm sure there are many great ones out there that could really give your article that extra polish. I also agree with the reviews above me that specify the need for a more transparent introduction. You should try to boil down what exactly distinguishes a nerve net, and perhaps consider breaking these paragraphs down into smaller segments in order to maintain the reader's attention. Furthermore, under the "Evolution" heading, you should have a better introductory sentence. You jump right into a description of Porifera but up until this point, haven't made any connection between Porifera and cnidaria or even nerve nets for that matter. Also, in the third sentence, what is a "partly synaptic formation?" Perhaps this section would flow a little better if you started with the second paragraph, and then made the connection to Porifera after. If possible, you might want to consider including a picture of an evolutionary tree that connects all of the phyla you discuss in this second. Additionally, the second sentence in the second paragraph would read better like this: "cnidaria and ctenophora both exhibit radial symmetry and are collectively known as "coelenterates."" Next, what are some of the neurophysiological mechanisms shared between coelenterates and bilaterians? And finally, what types of environments do organisms with nerve nets usually occupy? I think this information could help flesh out this section a little more. Overall, great work! Good content, nice flow, great scope. Lyndsey Brozyna (talk) 10:37, 19 November 2012 (UTC)

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This was a great article. I think that using the example of a specific organism like cnidarians is a good idea but you should still make sure to talk about the topic in general or at least explain if there are any clear differences between the organism being described and other organism. Continuing with this idea I think it is important that it is made clear at the beginning of the developmental neurogenesis section that only cnidarians are discussed so maybe change the title to “Developmental Neurogenesis of Cnidarians.” The anatomy section could be more insightful since the article is about an anatomical aspect of the organism. Also in the physiological section you could expand a little by talking about specific mechanisms in the communication between the nerve cells. Another thing I think is important when doing science related articles is to talk about the research that lead to the discovery of the topic discussed or current research being done. Also I found a couple of grammatical mistakes here and there so I would just suggest some proofreading. Overall it’s a good and easy to follow article. If you want to go the extra mile adding a couple more pictures or diagrams depicting the anatomical structure would be great. Noor9279 (talk) 03:08, 20 November 2012 (UTC)

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You guys are off to a really good start with this article! Overall, you cover the basic questions regarding your topic (history, anatomy, physiology, etc.), providing substantial information for each section. In terms of organization, I thought that the order in which the information was given was logical, making your article both fluid and easy to follow. Additionally, I thought that your section entitled “Developmental Neurogenesis” was particularly strong.

My main critique would be for you guys to proofread your article a few more times, since there are quite a few run-on sentences, grammatical errors, and most of all awkward phrasing. Sentences like “although the nerve net allows the animal to respond to its environment, it has trouble alerting the animal from where the stimulus is coming,” are rather misleading and if re-worked, could provide for the reader with a much clearer interpretation of the information you are giving them. In the case of this sentence, perhaps considering revising it to something along the lines of “While the nerve net allows the organism to respond to its environment, it does not serve as a means from which the organism can detect the source of the stimulus”, would help to clarify exactly what you are trying to get across. Similarly, instead of “For this reason, simple animals with nerve nets, such as hydra, will typically respond in the same way to contact with an object, regardless of where the contact occurs,” try revising it to something like “Because of this, simple organisms with nerve nets, such as hydra, will typically produce the same motor output in response to contact with a stimulus, regardless of the point of contact.” In re-wording some awkward phrasing, the ideas of your article will come across much more clearly. In reading your article, I personally found it interesting and full of some really good information, but I did find myself re-reading certain sentences in order to better understand exactly what you guys were trying to say.

The only other suggestion I would give is to consider adding in a current research section where you discuss the importance of the nerve net in today’s science. This would be a great way to end your article in terms of regaining the reader’s attention and wrapping up your ideas. In this section you can present recent or ongoing experiments in which scientists are learning new things about the nerve net, or even experiments in which the nerve net is being used to study some other kind of concept.

Once again, you guys are off to a really great start. With some proofreading and perhaps the addition of a section addressing current research regarding nerve nets, your paper will be much stronger, and your ideas will come across much more clearly. Hope this review was helpful for you guys!

Estradja (talk) 04:27, 20 November 2012 (UTC)