Talk:Polistes canadensis
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Peer Review
I fixed multiple grammar and wording mistakes within your paper. The writing style could certainly be improved in this article. I liked how you included background on the name of the species (how the name was created by Linnaeus who was misinformed that this species exists in Canada), because this is unique information pertaining to this species only. I think the colony cycle section could be expanded upon. At what periods during the year does the cycle take place? What are the stages within the colony cycle? I also looked at the sources you used and noticed some useful information that I wish you had included. For example, the Juvenile Hormone (JH) is very unique to this species (I have never heard of it before), so I wish you had added it to the behavior section. If you wish to expand upon this article further you can add this. I also thought you could have added more about the fact that this is a paper wasp. You do discuss what the nests are made of but how are the nests made and is this different from other species? Why is its common name the red paper wasp? A picture of the nest (if you can find one) might help the readers picture this wasp species in its natural environment. Overall, I liked your article and think that the content is pretty good. I also think the resources you used are scholarly and insightful. Probertsg (talk) 23:22, 30 September 2014 (UTC)
A few recommendations
(1) From Wikipedia, it says that the sources remain unclear because it lacks inline citations. Remember whatever is not common knowledge needs to be followed by an inline citation. (2) Include a picture so readers can see more clearly the species’ physical characteristics. (3) Link more terms to other Wikipedia pages
- a.Under overview section, I would link hibernation, caterpillar, larvae and invertebrates.
- b. Under taxonomy and phylogeny, I would link Canada, Nicaragua, Brazil, and South America.
- c. Under description and identification, I would link thorax. Also, explain what ‘tergite’ is if you cannot link it.
- d. Under colony cycle and dominance hierarchy (and a few others), there are no words that are linked. Generally the
more words you link, the better your page will be to readers. (4)Italicize subgenus
- Under taxonomy and phylogeny, “ The red paper wasp is a member of the New World Polistes, which are found in the subgenus Aphanilopterus. Because morphological variation among the Aphanilopterus is small…”
(5) Break up long sentences to be more concise
- a.Under kin selection, this sentence is very long and can get confusing. - “While many female workers choose to care for their nestmates while waiting to become breeders in their original nests, for younger female workers, the benefits of direct fitness may be greater than the benefits of indirect fitness; these younger females can choose to leave their original nests for a more uncertain future (in terms of indirect and direct payoffs) to co-found a new nest.”
(6) It would be nice to include a section on how these species interact with humans. Are they considered pests? What are the stings like?