Talk:Animatronics/GA1

RESULT

Article failed 27 December 2014; no response from nominator

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GA Review

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Reviewer: Spinningspark (talk · contribs) 17:29, 29 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]

This article is not ready for GA so I am not going to do a full review now. However, I am not going to instant fail it as it could conceivably be brought up to standard in a reasonable period of time with some hard work. On the other hand you may prefer to take it away and work on it in slow time and resubmit it later.

Either way, I am restricting my comments here to some general remarks on the more important shortcomings.

The lead does not comply with WP:LEAD.
1. It is not even close to being a good summary of the actual contents of the body of the article.
2. It also makes comments that are not found in the article body. For instance anatomy and puppetry are mentioned in the lead but not in the article.
There are numerous uncited passages. Here are a few examples (they are just examples, not a definitive list)
1. It is claimed Walt Disney invented the term
2. It is claimed that Su Song built a water clock in 1066
I also found examples of cites that do not verify the material presented. For instance, the article claims that animatronics are "typically designed to be as realistic as possible". The source for that paragraph does not support this (at least on the page cited) saying that they can be "simple or complex" and then goes on to talk about a simple reindeer cutout with a pivot in the neck on the next page.

Regards, SpinningSpark 17:29, 29 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Please respond here if you intend address the shortcomings of this article, otherwise it will be failed. SpinningSpark 16:15, 6 December 2014 (UTC)[reply]

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