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This is an old revision of this page, as edited by Compost (talk | contribs) at 12:34, 18 July 2006. The present address (URL) is a permanent link to this revision, which may differ significantly from the current revision.

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Hi all. I've just done a fair bit of editing on this profile, just to clean up some poor grammar, and to rearrange the structure of some of the sentences. After reading the original, it seemed that the text was often bouncing from one subject to the next, rather than concentrating on one theme per paragraph. I certainly think it reads a lot better now. Hopefully all will agree that there's a better flow to the words, and a better order to the timeline of the character's life now. If you don't think so, please let me know. Cheers. --Mart Owen 12:34, 18 July 2006 (UTC)[reply]

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