Talk:The Mustache Gang
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This article is or was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): BrazilSean (article contribs). Peer reviewers: Alexisvictoria93, Johnmdaigneault.
Looking good
Looking good! I did some copyediting but it still needs more. Next steps could include photos (what about the articles for the actual players?) and making sure it's not an Wikipedia:Orphan. -Reagle (talk) 18:01, 29 October 2015 (UTC)
- Reagle Thanks Prof! How can I make sure it isn't an Wikipedia:Orphan? I checked the link and I need links to my page but how am I able to accomplish this? Can I link pages to the article myself? BrazilSean (talk) 17:05, 3 November 2015 (UTC)
- BrazilSean, yes, you can be bold. -Reagle (talk) 17:52, 3 November 2015 (UTC)
Hi Sean! This is such a different topic and I think you've done a really good job organizing the information. My biggest edit would be to play with the introduction paragraph to make it read a little smoother, or to connect the various parts of the story more. Also, it could be beneficial to include some more information about the crucial Mustache Gang players as well as the players mentioned who sported facial hair before the rest of the league.
Also, it might be interesting to add a content box to the page that is full of information like their season records before/after the facial hair. Just a thought! It looks really good though!
Alexisvictoria93 (talk) 16:33, 2 November 2015 (UTC)
- Alexisvictoria93 Hi Alexis! Thanks for the advice. I shall work on the intro paragraph to make it flow into the rest of the article better. I am also working on a content box to the page, just currently collecting all the information I might want to include. I might also include the World Series championship game in 72 since it has been called "Hairs vs. Squares". Thanks for the review! BrazilSean (talk) 17:42, 3 November 2015 (UTC)