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This article is not good enough, I think so. What should I do? 202.40.210.178 02:07, 29 November 2005 (UTC)[reply]

  • My comments:
  1. There are no references (list books, newspapers, articles, websites, etc used to write this article)
  2. The lead is short, the lead of the article should be ideally two paragraphs and summarize the entire article.
  3. There is not enough context, quite a considerable amount of the article is lists. Specifically, which school did he go to? Has he done much recently? (2003,2004,2005), info about his personal life doesn't seem to be mentioned (his marital status, where he lives now, etc)
  4. Some of the sentences do not have a very good flow, it could do with a copy-edit to improve the reading experience.
  5. Early life and International sections are very short.
  6. The image Image:Ronny.jpg has no source, description or license.
  7. The image Image:Ronaldo.jpg has no source, description or license.

You might want to read Wikipedia:How to write a great article and Wikipedia:The perfect article for suggestions on how you can make this article better. — Wackymacs 20:54, 29 November 2005 (UTC)[reply]