User talk:Dsmith18/sandbox
Hey! So, first off: you have a lot of good information!! Really, I'm impressed by what you have found on Rapp. However, I have found a few places you could improve your article on. First, I would suggest moving the general information about Rapp (like her name, field, where she works at an such) before the box. This is more of an aesthetic thing, but that completely influences the flow of the article. I would also suggest using only a list of selected works that are most relevant to the field of Anthropology, and not necessarily to her; or you could also create a separate page with all publications, a "Complete Bibliography", and just link it to this one. As for the "Personal Life" section, I am always reticent about it when it comes to pages on women. Nonetheless, if the information is relevant and pertinent, then might I suggest an "Early Life and Education" section? A "Background and Career" also sounds good. I guess it all depends on the type of information. Finally, there are to citation issues in the last section. There are no examples of conferences she has spoken at in Europe (the citation for that leads to he NYU page which is a bot vague and might fall into self publication). There is also non citation for her influence over non-invasive prenatal diagnosis tests. Overall, this is a very strong draft! I have not read any bias into your writing and all sections seem well balanced. I can't wait to read the completed article! Mdladams (talk) 05:05, 7 March 2017 (UTC)
Peer Review
Dana! I love how much you added to this article! I especially applaud you for having different sections. I often feel that if there is one or two huge paragraphs, readers usually just skim or feel less interested in reading the material. Therefore, great job! I do believe that you should try adding an image to your article. Usually articles that are based on individuals have images of the individual or of their work (books, art, etc.) Additionally, I feel that in your Career and Education section you should be more clear when stating her educational background. I was a bit confused when you stated the years that she received her MA and BA. Did she also complete those at University of Michigan? Just a thought! One thing that comes to mind is possibly adding a little bit more about her personal life (not too much but just enough)! For example, where she's from, when she was born, possible influencers in her life etc. If I find any good information that you can add or possible sources that can make your article stronger, I will place them under this paragraph. Let me know if you have any questions!