Talk:Lana Rakow

Megan Lilja's edits - "She also has numerous other published works that are primarily in the fields of communication and feminist theory". - I like what you are trying to say, but this sentence with the previous one sounds somewhat chunky. If it could be re-worded, I think it would make for a stronger intro.

In the intro part I think that maybe the two paragraphs could be flip flopped. Have her basic information first (where she was born, etc) and then follow up with what she is known for.

Retirement statement twice a bit redundant

Great picture and I like the comment under it, just maybe center it? I don’t know if that is an option or not

"There, she graduated in 1974 with degrees in both Journalism and Humanities" - Possible to reword this? Maybe “There she received degrees on Journalism and Humanities, graduating in 1974” - obviously, it doesn’t have to be that, but just so it reads better.

"Dr. Rakow’s long-term career as a professor and researcher at the University of Wisconsin-Parkside where she was an assistant professor from 1896 – 1890" <- I’m guessing you just mixed the numbers up!!

Finally, she returned to the University of North Dakota, … Maybe don’t use the word finally, since she isn’t dead. Could be reworded as “She finished” or “She then”, just an idea.

Have you thought of citing the information within the article? So the little numbers pop up and bring you down to the citations? - not sure if that is a requirement or not, but just an idea!

Overall I think this is a great first draft! There is a lot of good information, with just some parts of it needing re-wording. I think with a little more work, this will be great. Good first start.