User:Corinnemark/sandbox

Article Evaluation

I evaluated the Health and Disease section on the Human Body Wikipedia page . Everything in the article is relevant to the topic and written in a neutral perspective. This section of the article is only one paragraph long, and only briefly addresses some of the many diseases that the human body could contract. It seems like one could take the time to go into more detail on each of the complications addressed. Unfortunately, there are no citations in this portion of the article, but many key words are links to other Wikipedia articles on related topics. When browsing through the talk section of the article, there were a couple of users discussing information with a citation link to about.com. The users agreed that about.com was a rather unreliable source, and that the information featured on the Wikipedia article should come from a more trustworthy source; I found this quite interesting. The article is not rated nor part of any WikiProjects.

Potential Topics for Unit 2 Project

Two potential articles that I would like to contribute to for my Unit 2 Project are the Silicone page and the Separation Anxiety in Dogs page. On the Silicone page, I would like to specifically improve on the "Personal care" section and perhaps create a section on alternatives to silicone in personal care products, since there is no information on that anywhere on the page. As for the Separation Anxiety in Dogs page, I would like to further research the "Treatment" section and explore alternative drug-therapy treatments besides the benzodiazephine treatment.

Finalizing Topic/Finding Sources

I have decided to improve the existing Silicone Wikipedia page. In particular, I wanted to improve on the "Personal care" section and write why silicones are used in personal care products in relative to their economic cost. I also intend to write a section on alternatives to silicone in personal care products. Below is a (draft) bibliography of some of the sources I intend on using to improve the Wikipedia page.

1. Musa, M.A., & Tallon M.A. (2013.) Hair Care Polymers for Styling and Conditioning. Polymers for Personal Care and Cosmetics (1148), 233-284. http://apps.webofknowledge.com.ezproxy.neu.edu/full_record.do?product=WOS&search_mode=GeneralSearch&qid=1&SID=1Cdc92pZiNrI9bJXWTQ&page=1&doc=2
2. Gao, T., Pereira, A., & Zhu, S. (2009). Study of hair shine and hair surface smoothness. Journal of Cosmetic Science, 60(2), 187-197. http://apps.webofknowledge.com.ezproxy.neu.edu/CitedFullRecord.do?product=WOS&colName=WOS&SID=1Cdc92pZiNrI9bJXWTQ&search_mode=CitedFullRecord&isickref=WOS:000266293700010&cacheurlFromRightClick=no
3. Gao, T., Pereira, A., & Obukowho, P. (2004). A new multifunctional, shine-enhancing emollient: PPG-3 benzyl ether myristate. Journal of Cosmetic Science, (55), S143-S150. http://apps.webofknowledge.com.ezproxy.neu.edu/CitedFullRecord.do?product=WOS&colName=WOS&SID=1Cdc92pZiNrI9bJXWTQ&search_mode=CitedFullRecord&isickref=WOS:000225427200015
4. A micro-wax dispersion to condition hair and reduce breakage, H.-M. Haake, W. Siepel, S. Cornelsen, Cosmetic & Toiletries, Vol. 124, No.11, p 46-52, Nov. 2009
5. https://www.cosmeticsbusiness.com/technical/article_page/Silicones__alternatives__spoilt_for_choice/74765
6. http://www.cosmeticsdesign.com/Formulation-Science/Multifunctional-replacement-of-silicone-D5-launched-by-Croda
7. http://www.crodapersonalcare.com/home.aspx?s=157&r=401&p=2804Notes for Improvement

There is a lot of information missing in the existing article for silicones. For example, the article does not mention that any form of silicone is a rather cheap ingredient, and mainly only drugstore personal care products include silicone. On the other end, more higher end personal care brands do not include forms of silicone in their products. There is also no mention of alternatives to silicone in personal care products, which I will be writing about in my improvement of the article.