This entry in my sandbox is in regards to the article that I read on the Assyrian army. Prior to reading the article I decided to take a look at the talk page first to see if the article was created by an individual ::or more, and if it was ever vetted through a trusted peer? The peer review process did happen, although with some shortcomings in which the reviewer identified to the authors on the talk page. However the individuals that authored/maintained the article never updated it and the article ultimately received a B ::rating.
After reviewing the talk page I then read the article itself and found it rather easy to follow with a very good outline, grammar, and most importantly facts. One of the areas that I did find to be of a concern was where a sentence was identified in 2012 as needing a citation but it has gone five years now ::without every receiving one. I will now take a look into my textbook to see if I can find the text that supports the authors claim that the Assyrian army used psychological warfare against its own troops, in the form of deportation into slavery, to discourage rebellion. Wwarren2019 ([[User ::talk:Wwarren2019|talk]]) 01:15, 22 October 2017 (UTC)
After looking through the textbook, I found the area that I remembered reading in regards to the Assyrian army deporting those who resisted. I took this information to the talk page of the article that I read and provided them with it. If it is accepted/approved I will update the article at a future date. For ::now, and safekeeping, the information is: "Forced labor—including serving in the military—and deportations helped integrate the empire and undermine local resistance."[1]Wwarren2019 :(talk) 01:33, 22 October 2017 (UTC)
Since I changed my article for this class, I chose to review the new article and now I completely understand why the article is rated the way it is (start class article). Not only is the information on the topic completely lacking, but the information provided is also cited wrongfully (leads only to a splash page of a news site). I also would not be surprised if the information within the article itself is not correct. (The war started over an incorrectly ironed shirt? Really?) Although, it did contain some factual information (the climate, geographical location, and the pyramids) it ultimately lacked a lot of material that can be found with a simple google search, or the reading of some other sources.
I foresee a quite a bit of time being invested into this article in my near future. But it will be a great learning opportunity not only on the topic, but also on applying the techniques that I have recently learned.Wwarren2019 (talk) 02:08, 5 November 2017 (UTC)
Dahshur Article Edits/Rebuild/In work
Pyramids
Building the Dahshur pyramids was an extremely important learning experience for the Egyptians. It provided them with the knowledge and knowhow to transition from step-sided pyramids to smooth-sided pyramids. Ultimately their breadth of experience would allow them to build the Great Pyramid of Giza; the last of the Ancient Seven Wonders of the World still standing to this date.
The first of the Dahshur pyramids was the Bent Pyramid (2613 – 2589 BC), built under the rule of King Sneferu, The Bent Pyramid was the first attempt at building a smooth sided pyramid, but proved to be an unsuccessful build due to the miscalculations made on the structural weight that was being placed onto the soft ground (sand, gravel, and clay) which had a tendency to subside. Other calculations that were proven to be erroneous were that the blocks being used were cut in such a manner that when placed onto the pyramid their weight was not distributed appropriately, causing the angle of the pyramid to be off and achieving the name “The Bent Pyramid.” https://www.ancient.eu/Great_Pyramid_of_Giza/
Realizing his shortcomings and learning from his mistakes, King Sneferu ordered the building of the second pyramid of Dahshur, the Red Pyramid. Once completed, the pyramid was considered to be a success, as it was a fully constructed, smooth sided, and a free standing pyramid rising to a height of 341 feet (104 meters), with an angle of 43 degrees. The Red Pyramid’s name reigns from the material that was used to construct the pyramid, red limestone. And this pyramid is believed to be the resting place of King Sneferu. https://www.ancient.eu/image/5732/ , https://www.nationalgeographic.com/pyramids/north.html
Another pyramid located within Dahshur is that of the 12th Dynasty King Amenemhat II (1929 – 1895 BCE). This pyramid has not been preserved as well as the others within the area due to the materials that were used to fill it (sand on the outside and limestone on the inside). Naturally the weather caused the sand to erode from it, but the limestone was taken intentionally for use on other pyramids allowing the pyramid to collapse and ultimately desecrating the tomb of King Amenemhat II. http://www.worldhistory.biz/ancient-history/55779-7-6-12th-and-13th-dynasty-pyramids.html
The Black Pyramid dates from the later reign of Amenemhat III and, although badly eroded, it remains the most imposing monument at the site after the two Sneferu pyramids. The polished granite pyramidion or capstone of the Black Pyramid is on display in the main hall of the Egyptian Museum in Cairo.
Several other pyramids of the 13th Dynasty were built at Dahshur. Only the one of the reign of Ameny Qemau has been excavated so far by Ahmad Fakhri who was the archaeologist whom excavated this site.
Tombs & Cemeteries
Located closely to the pyramid of the 12th Dynasty several undisturbed tombs of royal women were found, containing a large amount of lapidary and jewelry that have been determined to be of the highest stage of metalworking in Egypt during this time period[1][2][3]. The pyramid of Sesostris III was part of a huge complex, with several smaller pyramids of royal women, along with another pyramid to the south. In a gallery tomb next to this pyramid were found two treasures of the king's daughters (Sithathor). Extensive cemeteries of officials of the Old Kingdom and Middle Kingdom have been found around Dahshur's pyramids. Dahshur was Egypt's royal necropolis during the reign of the 12th Dynasty king Amenemhat II.Wwarren2019 (talk) 02:43, 21 November 2017 (UTC)
