User talk:Chase503/sandbox

Hi Josh! Your article revision has a lot of good information! Your sources show clear, neutral information about Otter Rock and some of the places located in this community. Your sections are also organized in a good fashion. I enjoyed the fact that you added more information about the population and its location. I also enjoyed reading more about the Otter Rock Marine Reserve and some of the activities that take place in this community. One piece that I would maybe expand would be the Flying Dutchman Winery. When I looked at the source http://www.dutchmanwinery.com/, I found some info about some of the history of the winery, and some info about where they get their grapes from and how they make their wines. I think these pieces of information might be useful in the article. Another thing that I've been advised to refrain from is the use of the word "you" in Wikipedia articles, which I found one or two of in your revision. These can make the information bias because you are putting a perspective into the article. For example, "You can access the beach by trails " could be changed to something like "The beach can be accessed by means of trails" or something like that, making it neutral. I also liked the fact that you added links to other Wikipedia articles to your revision, further explaining a piece of information you are stating, as my article could use some of those. JensenByler (talk) 05:46, 14 February 2019 (UTC)