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Review of Draft:Aerofly_FS

Hello AngusWOOF, Thanks for your previous review, I fully agree your remarks. I hope my last edit will satisfy you. It's true that the article may look complimentary but it is not exaggerated. About the 3D engine for example, Aerofly is much much better than its competitors, it is just a fact. Thanks for your feedback, Vincent. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Turman (talk • contribs) 13:37, 4 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

I have read your last review. I don't understand why I need to make a reception section for the reviews. I have never seen that. Could you please detail it or give a sample from an existing article ? About the other part of your review: in fact FS2 is the notable version as FS1 was more confidential. I'll try to explicit that in the article. Thanks, Vincent. Turman

See Sonic the Hedgehog (1991 video game) for example. It doesn't have to be from a video game review website, but from the other flight simulation / computing reviewers. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 16:11, 4 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for having extending the refs for me ! I have also made small improvements, please tell me if it's enough. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Turman (talk • contribs) 20:45, 4 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Hello Angus, Could you please rereview my draf since I've made a lot of improvements (I don't know if I can contact another reviewers as you have already made some remarks on my draft). Thanks, Vincent. Turman

Turman, please see feedback from previous. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 23:49, 19 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

@AngusWOOF:, could you please help me by telling me which part(s) exactly I should improve ? I admit that the "graphic engine" part may look laudatory but it is only the truth, it is the strong point of the simulator which is undeniable (and confirmed by the independent sources I quoted). Maybe I should rephrase the sentence in a more neutral way, but my level of English is unfortunately limited.Turman (talk) 09:27, 7 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Turman, see the comments I had posted on the draft. It needs a development section and a reception section. How did the product come about? What are the reviews of the product? AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 16:26, 20 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

@AngusWOOF: In my draft there is still some info on the reception, most of the references actually. There are plenty of articles on software that have no section dedicated to reception or to the history / development (including for famous titles like X-Plane) so I do not understand why this would be absolutely necessary here.

Turman, it's a software article that borders on video game, so it should have software reviews / reception. The development section would also help establish notability, otherwise it just reads like a catalog entry for software. The goal is to get the article to show notability by secondary sources independent of the subject. Right now it's full of "features" and such details that are primary source. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 16:23, 10 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Draft:Welcome Tour

You declined Draft:Welcome Tour because it needs more news sources about the tour that aren't coming from fan sites. However, I've been having difficulty finding news sources about the tour that aren't from fan sites. Could you help me please? CHICHI7YT (talk) 00:39, 19 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

CHICHI7YT, how about more newspapers or magazines? If the fan site has archives of news clippings covering the show you can cite those newspaper writeups. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 02:33, 19 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]
AngusWOOF, my main source for the draft was this. However, the page doesn't show news clippings, only posters for gigs. I don't think posters are a reliable source for a Wikipedia article. CHICHI7YT (talk) 02:58, 19 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]
CHICHI7YT, posters and Santana's website only show that they toured. If there are magazine writeups or news clippings that would be better. They can be offline, but they need to be articles that someone who has access to them at a library or whatever can dig up . Look for headlines like "Santana announces Welcome Tour." or "Santana Welcome Tour" How did you know that they changed lineups on a certain venue? Or that they played to 65,000 people at a certain place. There must be news articles for stuff like that.AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 15:41, 20 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]
CHICHI7YT, Here's a nice collection put together by a fan site for The Band when they toured with Bob Dylan in 1974. [1] If there's something similar, you could cite those news articles. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 19:09, 21 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]
AngusWOOF, it turns out the info about Santana changing lineups on a certain venue comes from a memoir by Carlos Santana called The Universal Tone: Bringing My Story to Light. It is okay if I use that book as a reference? CHICHI7YT (talk) 19:23, 21 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]
CHICHI7YT, it would be a primary source, but it at least has information that he publicized. A biography for Santana would be secondary and could be used for that too. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 04:16, 24 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]
AngusWOOF, should I add citations for pages I used in the books for reference? CHICHI7YT (talk) 01:37, 25 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]
CHICHI7YT, you can if it helps. There's a way to do so like with Anthony Field. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 05:27, 25 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]
AngusWOOF, I added a citation to a page I used in Santana's autobiography for reference. So what now? CHICHI7YT (talk) 20:45, 7 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
CHICHI7YT, are there any news articles that call it the Welcome Tour? AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 21:13, 7 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
AngusWOOF, no. The Welcome Tour is how I call the tour, because it started shortly after the release of Welcome. I guess a better name for the tour is "Santana North American Tour 1974" or something. CHICHI7YT (talk) 21:18, 7 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
CHICHI7YT, then yes, the name of the article should be "Santana 1974 North American Tour" or "Santana North American Tour 1974" or "Santana North American Tour (1974)" (like The Beatles' 1966 US tour), not "Welcome Tour". If you have news articles calling it as such, then that would work. It really needs some news article that has verbiage like: Santana launches the Santana North American Tour in (city). The tour will run from (date range) and visit (number) cities " AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 21:27, 7 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
But AngusWOOF, how do I rename the article? Also, most of the info about where and when they toured came from posters from 1974 gigs. CHICHI7YT (talk) 23:26, 7 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
CHICHI7YT, I can eventually rename it, just tell me what you want it to be at the header. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 16:24, 10 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
AngusWOOF, I want the draft to be renamed "Santana North American Tour 1974". CHICHI7YT (talk) 20:26, 11 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Request to help with the submission of wikipedia page of Sanskar Educational Group

Hi AngusWOOF. I have updated the article based on your comments. I have deleted most of the text which did not have adequate resources as per your comments. Can you please review again if further changes are needed to publish it or is it in a minimal required shape for publishing?


Thank you very much.

Regards, Amit

Amit de (talk) 14:09, 23 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]


Amit de, you need to show that the organization Draft:Sanskar Educational Group is notable and can meet WP:ORGCRIT. You need secondary sources independent of the subject that cover the institution in detail. Local newspapers or national newspapers. That it is just an organization means it is probably going to end up in the WP:MILL. I only see a reference to its own website and then a Google search. That isn't enough. Is it an actual school? Then it should explain what grades it covers. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 16:27, 10 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Issues sent to dispute resolution

Hi AngussWOOF. Because our progress on the "National drinks" page was somewhat stalled I sought the assistance of dispute resolution: {{drn-notice}}. Hopefully you're willing to particpate in the process and with the help of other editors we can move forward. Thanks, BrieDeChevre (talk) 14:31, 21 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

BrieDeChevre, thanks, I have aired my concerns there. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 15:08, 21 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Hello AngusWOOF. User: Robert McClenon closed the case on the dispute resolution noticeboard and so please see his comments. As I interpret what he said, we should move the draft into article space and then on the article's talk page copy and paste our discussion that we've had on the draft's talk page and see then what editors think about a "delete discussion". My understanding is that there isn't an issue with a "redirect" because there is no "National drinks" page. Do you agree with my interpretation? If not, what do you think our next step should be? Thanks. BrieDeChevre (talk) 23:40, 26 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Hi AngusWOOF. Please see my message above so we can move forward with our issue. Thanks. BrieDeChevre (talk) 20:42, 5 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
BrieDeChevre, my concerns have been addressed. I'll go ahead and push for making this article official. Thanks again for all your efforts! AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 23:32, 5 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
BrieDeChevre, the article is live now at National drink with National drinks and List of national drinks as redirects. Please help add or clean up the links from other articles that might refer to it. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 16:31, 10 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Hi AngusWOOF. I'm super duper excited that the page has gone live, but I think that the page should be called "National drinks", with an "s", not "National drink". The page listing national liquors in entitled "List of national liquors", not "List of national liquor". A companion page to the drinks pages is called "National dish", but I think a better name for that page would be "National dishes". In my mind, to be consistent we could have "National dishes", "National drinks", and "National liquors". Do you have control over the names of those other pages? Thanks, and I'll clean up and add the links as you suggested from other articles after your response to the issue I just brought up. BrieDeChevre (talk) 18:30, 10 June 2019 (UTC) — Preceding unsigned comment added by 76.167.176.54 (talk) [reply]
BrieDeChevre, if it's going to be a plural then it should be renamed List of national (plural), as with National bird, National tree. If there is a separate article about what National (singular) is, like with National anthem, then retain that singular. Are you okay with List of national drinks then? AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 00:54, 11 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Hi AngusWOOF. Let's go with "National drink", as was your intention. Thanks so much! BrieDeChevre (talk) 01:31, 11 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
BrieDeChevre, it's been renamed to List of national drinks. That should be okay for now. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 22:50, 11 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Draft:Jane Suiter

hi AngussWOOF. I've blitzed Draft:Jane Suiter since you declined the original creator's version 2 months ago, and was wondering if you could have another look at it? Bogger (talk) 16:40, 21 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

*polite bump* Bogger (talk) 14:11, 10 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Bogger, can you indicate on that article how she meets WP:NACADEMIC? What criteria apply? AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 16:32, 10 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
done Bogger (talk) 15:12, 13 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Comment

Thanks for the ping and press at Draft talk:Elena Matei. I can only assume (on the basis of date) that I am likely the editor that "denied" the subject. I am much more interested in the article quoting a "Joe DiRosa", given that the first draft of Draft:Elena Matei was created by a User:Joedirosa around the same time... this might explain the consistent appearance of random ip editors on the article. Thanks again.--SamHolt6 (talk) 18:41, 21 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

SamHolt6, it looks like one of the IP editors wrote a big essay on why she should have an article, but it still cites those primary source interviews. Ugh, can't the editors find secondary source articles on her? Then it'd be easy to add. I've seen stub model pages like Chase Carter based on those non-interview articles. (Oops I actually didn't approve Carter's article, another editor did, but I checked the references and they were pretty good RS'es.) AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 04:13, 24 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Cafetran Espresso

Thanks for reviewing my nascent page on Cafetran Espresson. I am not quite certain to understand why this page causes so much problem. To be honest, I did not want to create it in the first place. However, an editor kept removing all mentions of the software from the CAT software comparison, for lack of notability (while the said page lists software with a lower user-base than Espresso). I will keep trying to include more external references and get the page accepted (BTW, I am not a developer of the software. Just a user, who was very grateful to find it, in a domain where there is an almost monopoly of tools under Windows, with a few under Mac, and almost nothing under Linux. Certainly not of the quality and versatility of Espresso). NB: while I appreciated your nice message on my talk page, I am actually not a new contributor. I edited WP way before you. Nicolas Gambardella Le Novère (talk) 23:17, 23 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Nicolas Gambardella Le Novère, no worries, I think the Teahouse thing just plops the Welcome message regardless of the user's status. But yes, the main concern I had was that it was full of TM marks everywhere like it was copied from a brochure, and then there were no secondary sources to meet WP:GNG, hence the advertising tone. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 04:05, 24 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]
I actually put the TM mark on purpose. I thought it was mandatory for a trademarked name. However, I now realised that this is not the case on WP. So I'll remove them. Thanks for the info. Nicolas Gambardella Le Novère (talk) 07:15, 24 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Nicolas Gambardella Le Novère, per MOS:TM, the trademarks should be removed. Having the brands listed on Wikipedia shouldn't have to be violating or running into trademark issues. . AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 16:34, 10 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Draft:Roger Chung

Dear Angus,

Thank you for your help in reviewing the draft and your comments are very helpful in coming edits. I will edit the article according to your suggestions. Please allow me more time to edit the draft and not deleting the draft ><

ThanksClhy (talk) 03:24, 24 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Clhy, it would need a complete rewrite so that it doesn't sound like a eulogy or profile that praises the subject. See WP:NPOV. Also if you are connected to the subject in any manner you need to declare conflict of interest. WP:COI. If his main occupation is being a professor, then work on that and show how he meets WP:NACADEMIC. If his main occupation is being in a music group then you need to show news sources that enable him to meet WP:MUSICBIO. The Bill Murray thing is just a hobby that would go in Personal life along with his family members. You also need to use secondary sources that are independent of the subject. Look for news articles that discuss his life and career, not ones from his website or school or fans. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 04:03, 24 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Totally understood that I will need to rewrite it. I am asking for keeping the draft because I spent almost a day to create the Infobox..... I just wish to keep that part so I don't have to build it again in the future.....
I am the employee of the subject. I work for him. I read from the article wizard that I just need to declare the conflict of interest in my page, which I already did. Please advise how should I do it if it is not sufficient or I didn't do it right.... I am still quite confused with the functions in the wiki at the moment so I really appreciate all sorts of help and comments.Clhy (talk) 05:03, 24 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]
The infobox can be created later. I would try to rewrite the article using only material gathered from news articles and journals, not his website. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 15:35, 24 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]
It looks like Clhy is blocked, so no further action on this one. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 17:36, 10 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Draft:Chamupa Unlimited (Musician)

Just to let you know he hasn't given up - check Draft:Chamupa Unlimited (Musician). Dan arndt (talk) 02:48, 27 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Dan arndt, thanks for the sock blocks. If he put that much energy into his music and local news picked up on that, maybe he might have an article by now. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 15:32, 27 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Draft Candie Carawan

Is there anyway I could get assistance from an experienced Wikipedia user to help me actually make this a page for more people to see and add to?

You need to provide some context as to who she is. Is she a songwriter? A musician? An activist? Also more articles that describe her career and life, but that aren't coming from her. See WP:ANYBIO and WP:GNG. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 15:38, 27 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Article is in mainspace now. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 16:36, 10 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Draft:Furkan Korkmaz(actor)

Hi, I've added new resources and sent them to the approval. Could you please review?--Spentime (talk) 21:11, 27 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Spentime, do you have external news articles for the actor? It doesn't need social media by the actor. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 02:09, 28 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Spentime, you'll need to find some news articles describing Korkmaz, not posts from the blogs that appear to have yourself as the author. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 18:03, 28 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

/* Bankstown Library and Learning Centre */

--Hi Anguswoof, Thanks for reviewing my draft. I'm quite new to Wikipedia so am not 100% on the logistics of changing old pages titles, although it might be the best course of action. In regards to my article about the new library, I was wondering if it shouldn't be kept separate, as the information on the older page is in reference to a library which was on a different site operated by a no-longer existing government body. Moreover, the old page has information mostly pertaining to that old library. It would make sense to me that the currently existing library have a page dedicated to it, with the old library a subcategory of that article, or the two remain separate as they are two separate buildings. Perhaps the distinction between the two separate libraries could be made clearer in both articles? Thanks for your time, --Bobkillalea1 (talk) 00:06, 28 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Bobkillalea1, I don't see why the article couldn't cover both buildings as they refer to the library in general, with the old library information moved to the history section, like school articles in which the schools change locations. Unless they are two completely different organizations that didn't share material? AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 02:08, 28 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Query about "Myth of the scientist and engineer shortage"

thank you for your feedback regarding my article. I had a feeling the debate format would be contentious and I will be taking your feedback on board. I am thinking of presenting the myth argument as the forefront, and have the opposing argument as "opposing views". ill be working on it over the next few weeks. MarkGoldbridge1123 (talk) 02:00, 28 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

MarkGoldbridge1123, the Wikipedia article shouldn't be an argumentative essay WP:NOTESSAY. It's also not clear what you mean by scientist and engineer shortage. That isn't even a topic here. Perhaps you're looking for Science, technology, engineering, and mathematics#Criticism which has The Atlantic article with that title. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 02:06, 28 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Draft Article: Native American Responses to climate Change

Hey AngusWOOF,

Thanks so much for your feedback on my article. I aim to continue working on my article over the next few weeks, and should hopefully resolve the issues as well as hit around 2000 words. Is it possible that you could check it again then? Thanks again Erikpridgen (talk) 02:04, 28 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Erikpridgen, would you like me to rename the article to "Climate Change and Native Americans"  ? That might be more inclusive of the topics you're trying to cover rather than the specific responses. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 02:07, 28 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]
AngusWOOF, Not at present, I am working on the article as part of a university assignment, and am already down for this particular topic. Erikpridgen (talk) 06:36, 28 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Draft: Hindi Imposition

Hi AngusWOOF, thanks for your comments, I am still working on this topic and I will fix some issues you pointed out. Is it possible for you to check it again a week after? Tokoyaki28 (talk)

Hi AngusWOOF, thanks a lot for your comment. I am still working on it and I will fix it in few days. Could you please check it later again like a week after? Daidai96 (talk)I'm Davia, a student from University of Sydney and doing Econometrics and marketing. I'm passionate about art, food and travelling. 02:31, 28 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Tokoyaki28, Daidai96, I've added {{Educational assignment}} to the talk pages of your drafts. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 02:45, 28 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Draft Quantum Mmeory

Hi AngusWOOF. Thank you for comment. I have read the reason why you declined my article, but the fact is the article which similar to my draft page names "quantum memory" is the article I have submitted in my sandbox, both of the articles were writing by myself and I did some change for it in the draft page. This is also a work for my university course and this article will be marked. Can you check it again? Thank you very much.

I tagged it for Educational assignment like the other drafts. It also needs links to other Wikipedia articles, and citations to show notability per WP:GNG. I also redirect Draft:Quantum memory to Draft:Quantum Memory but the eventual article should be labelled "Quantum memory" unless the term is referred to as a proper noun or acronym like QM. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 17:52, 28 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]
TLLB, it looks like you forced this article into mainspace. I tagged it for cleanup and organizing, so please help deal with that so it doesn't read like a research journal article. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 17:38, 10 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Draft: Asian idol producing industry

Hi, AngusWOOF. Thank you for comment. I am still working on this article to add some content of idol group producing industry in other Asian countries like China and Japan, so I think this article will not be a part of Korean idol. This is also a work for my university course and this article will be marked and I hope it can be an independent page. Can you check it again? I will add more information about other Asian countries' work in this industry. Thank you so much.

I'm still trying to figure out what the scope of the article will be? If it's how the Korean idol / K-pop marketing concept is applied to other countries to start up their own local versions, that's fine. If it's more about how K-pop idols are marketed in other countries, the Korean idol and K-pop articles already cover that in detail. For Japanese idol, there's already 48 Group on how AKB48 uses their brand to create other 48-versioned groups in other prefectures and other countries. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 18:00, 28 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Hi, AngusWOOF. Thank you for comment again. This article will introduce how other Asian countries start their own idol groups. It is not merely about how K-pop idols are marketed in other countries.

Draft: Serial Box

Hello AngusWOOF,

I created a draft for Serial Box and it was looked at by you 7 days ago, but was not approved or declined. I would love to hear any feedback so that I may get my article approved and published. Could you take another look whenever you get a second? I really appreciate your assistance. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Serial_Box Sthreadgill (talk) 16:36, 28 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Sthreadgill, I see that it's been resubmitted, so any AFC reviewer should be able to look at it. I would try to get rid of any advertising tone as that would likely put off reviewers from approving. Also if you can identify WP:THREE key articles that describe the service, that would be helpful. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 17:53, 28 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Draft Antonio Lepore

In relation to the draft

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Antonio_Lepore

I wish I could solve the problem that I expose you here.

Thanks for your answer.

Unfortunately the situation is very complex.

I tried to insert my contribution on wikipedia italia but the administrators have gone crazy accused me of having defamed someone, of having written something fake etc. etc., I tried to convince that it was not like they said and I asked for help to wikipedia English but they proved to be accomplices of Wikipedia Italy and nobody defended me and nobody removed me the block that became global and on the IP address: 93.34.90.94


You can help me to remove the block of my original Antolepore account and the IP block: 93.34.90.94 so I can insert the text on Wikipedia Italy and then Wikipedia English.

Thank you

I'm not connected to Italian Wikipedia, so I can't help with that. Perhaps there are some admins that could help? Anyway, it's not helpful to post the Italian version of Lepore's biography on English Wikipedia. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 17:14, 28 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]
This article is plagued by sock accounts, of which your locations are part of, so I can't help any further on this. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 16:45, 10 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Draft:Çağlar Yüksel

Hello there, Can you look at Çağlar Yüksel? I've added the resources by correcting the required error. Thank you in advance--Spentime (talk) 14:50, 29 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Spentime, I added some feedback on Draft:Çağlar Yüksel. It needs to be clear what were his major roles in major productions. The role in Valley of the Wolves: Ambush is rather confusing as it stands. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 17:46, 10 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Memory and retention in learning

Hello AngusWOOF, thank you for your previous review, I am currently working on the draft article and I really appreciate your feedback. What specific topic do you advise I try and talk about instead to avoid duplicated information? This specific topic was chosen from Wikipedia requested articles which is why I am confused as to how it already exists. Any feedback would be amazing. Thanks so much! Caitlin

Caitlin.cox1999 (talk) 02:53, 31 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Caitlin.cox1999, sorry the previous thread got confused with this one. It looks like the article Memory and retention in learning got put into the mainspace by RoySmith, so I would just try to structure the headers to be similar to the other memory articles so that it doesn't read like a research journal article. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 17:50, 10 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Request on 19:48:22, 3 June 2019 for assistance on AfC submission by Smithryanallen


Hi, there are numerous citations from news articles on a page you reviewed and said it lacks citations. Can you help me understand? It was the R Dub! page. Thanks. Smithryanallen (talk) 19:48, 3 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Smithryanallen (talk) 19:48, 3 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Smithryanallen see WP:PRIMARY. Sources should be independent of the subject. So you need mostly news articles. Also please show how the artist meets WP:MUSICBIO Has he charted on any notable Billboard charts? Has he won any major awards? AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 19:50, 3 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for your reply. I spent time gathering awards information after seeing the Wikipedia standards, and these were added. News sources have been cited and cleaned up to show this isn't just pulled from a personal blog etc. Thanks. Smithryanallen (talk) 19:48, 3 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Smithryanallen, see my response on the draft. There are a bunch of citations but they are coming mainly from his own media groups / radio stations that he is connected to. Are there any other news articles that cover him in detail that are not connected to him? AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 17:58, 10 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Deletion

Deletion
Can you delete my draft article Qwertyvg (talk) 23:55, 3 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
It looks like it was deleted. Was there another draft? AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 04:16, 5 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

List of Kresy born Poles - declined

Hello Angus WOOF. Mine is a Bernese Mountain dog cross, but that is not why I'm responding. Thank you for considering my declined list page. Yes, I am very disheartened and late for his walk, but I have left a question and note at the Tea House. It now occurs to me, should this be a category? Let me know, please. Regards, --Po Mieczu (talk) 19:46, 5 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Po Mieczu, see the Talk:Kresy page. I was thinking it could be a List of people from Kresy instead of just people who were born there and became part of Poland later. Category:People from Kresy would be okay too if you don't want a separate article. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 19:48, 5 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Deleted Draft/Article for Review

Hi Angus, after reading through the article, I concede that it had a promotional tone to it. I tried to make it work for a Wikipedia Education Class assignment however, it did not go the distance. I have removed the entire Code of Ethics section and the "peacock mission statements" that you mentioned. It has since been deleted by another user.

Tanforan Times (talk) 13:31, 6 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Tanforan Times, if you are doing this for solely a Wikipedia Education class, you can make the draft, and add a tag on the page like with Draft:Water Special Project, and not submit it for review. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 20:18, 6 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]


Code to indicate you're a student

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{{divbox|green|Please don’t [[WP:BITE|bite]] me, I’m a newbie!|[[File:Sciences humaines.svg|100px|left]] I’m a university student in a [[:outreach:Education/Countries/Australia|Wikipedia Education class]], and I’m currently learning how to contribute to Wikipedia. This page is a work in progress and I am approaching my subject in [[Wikipedia:Assume good faith|good faith]]. Thanks!}}

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Please don’t bite me, I’m a newbie!
I’m a university student in a Wikipedia Education class, and I’m currently learning how to contribute to Wikipedia.

This page is a work in progress and I am approaching my subject in good faith.

Thanks!

And you should also put {{Educational assignment}} on your article's talk page. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 21:13, 6 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Request on 20:51:22, 6 June 2019 for assistance on AfC submission by Brian Ralston


ON the rejection of the article for Jasmine (film) you mentioned that the film needed critical coverage. Is that not what the major trades and critics from LA Times, Variety, Hollywood Reporter, Deadline Hollywood references, articles and coverage in the links depict? Thank you for helping me understand.

Brian Ralston

Brian Ralston (talk) 20:51, 6 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Brian Ralston, you should write up a Critical reception section with paragraphs detailing what the critics have said about the film. Right now the references are just piled on the end of the Film festivals paragraph so it only shows it maybe was shown at that festival. For example, Noel Murray of the Los Angeles Times wrote that "Phelan throws in a concluding curveball that's clumsily delivered and over-explanatory, sapping much of the picture's ambiguity. The ending is undeniably provocative — and sure to be divisive — but "Jasmine" might have been better served by retaining some mystery." Deborah Young of Hollywood Reporter liked Jason Tobin's performance, calling it "edgy, taut," and "who creates a compulsive character with equal doses of sadness and nervous intensity". AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 21:00, 6 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Brian Ralston, thanks, it looks better now. I pushed it through. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 21:42, 6 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Seeing Machines

Hi Angus

Thank you for all the feedback. Can you have another look at the page for me please?

I have trimmed it down completely and tried to be as neutral as possible. Let me know your thoughts.

Thanks — Preceding unsigned comment added by 203.12.195.243 (talk) 22:42, 6 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

203.12.195.243, please see Drmies's comments at https://en.wikipedia.org/enwiki/w/index.php?title=Draft:Seeing_Machines&oldid=900660917 This needs more secondary news sources and cleanup in tone. The timeline should be converted to prose and sourced with external news articles. Are you sure they designed that particular Driver Monitoring System? I don't see that name mentioned at all in that article, which references Toyota/Lexus instead. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 18:03, 10 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks Angus. Hey, I told one of my students that you were something of an expert on K-pop, J-pop, all other pop, etc. and that they might ask you some questions about sourcing for those topics--let's see if I remember their name correctly: Historynerd52. I hope you don't mind; you have a ton of experience in that area, certainly compared with me. Thanks, Drmies (talk) 21:03, 10 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Drmies, we could refer your students to WP:KO/RS, WP:ANIME/RS, WP:CHART, and of course WP:RSP for sourcing suggestions? AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 03:24, 11 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks. Shoot, capital in username: HistoryNerd52, we were talking about you. Drmies (talk) 15:07, 11 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Concerns regarding my draft

I kind of understand why you declined my article. You said that I might be subject to COI. I am the person talking about "Naveen Chandra Lal" The information regarding date of birth and a few more information is not found on sites that I can research, but he is also not anywhere close to my family. Meeting the person gave me an idea that he deserves a wikipedia page. I am not sure if more information could be found regarding his personal life, probably because of him not disclosing them. The fact that there are very little logs about him specifically either than news coverages and journals talking about his acts, and my privilege of having that knowledge about him inspired me to write about him. If it is the false information that wikipedia is nervous about the editing option could be put to allow changes as the page develops. The person who I am talking about is relevant in matters to which organization, news companies and blogs talk about him, but not to a level where he has a biography by another source. To do that, I am creating this page. The person I am talking about doesn't quantify as COI, as I have no relationship with him, either than my awareness that he exists and a little bit background knowledge. My creation of the wikipedia article is to fill this gap that I have the ability to about his public appearance. I would only request an acceptance to the article with information on how to improve so that I can make the article become as close as wikipedia wants it to be :)Abhinavdabeast (talk) 06:59, 9 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Abhinavdabeast, how do you know the person's birthday, spouse's name and children's names and birthdays? Are there newspaper articles that specify that? You share the same name as one of his children. You need to find news articles that discuss his career. Do not use company profiles (primary source, self-published). Do not post personal information that you have gathered from interacting with him. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 14:09, 9 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Speedy deletion nomination of Draft:Joseph of Nazareth's immaculate conception

I have to ask, was this really the right template? I had a look before deletion, and it was unsourced, OR and not at all mainspace-ish, but since the user was a newbie I thought it in good faith and not at all vandalism. Gråbergs Gråa Sång (talk) 17:53, 9 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Gråbergs Gråa Sång, I used the hoax one rather than the vandalism one, but it still maps to G3. I don't see any theories or news articles / journals presented or sourced where they claim Joseph was immaculately conceived, so it was going mainly by the editor's own original research / made up. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 22:56, 9 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Ok. My basic assumption was "probably exists somewhere/doesn't get WP yet". Gråbergs Gråa Sång (talk) 06:18, 10 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]


Review of Draft: Philippe Dufour

Hello AngusWoof,

Thanks for reviewing the article in such quick manner, very much appreciated.

I want to contribute wikipedia on watchmaking topics more and more so your feedback is invaluable to me. However, I need to understand why it got denied.

You mention "how general public has viewed his career and work" in watch industry especially at this level there is no general public. Only certain experts and collectors notice these people's work thus appreciate. The general public here is collectors who write in forums which I do not think can be shown as reliable sources. People I sourced on the other hand are Journalists and reliable Auction Houses and nytimes article. On notable museum subject, unfortunately all pieces are sold to collectors thus make it impossible to be exhibited at the museum, at least so far. However; the aforementioned auction houses exhibits them during seasons.

I've added couple of more resources. Hope you'll find them worthy.

Have a nice day! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Dufourp (talk • contribs) 9 June 2019 (UTC)

Dufourp, yes, the journalists would be the public. It needs more articles that cover Dufour's career and history, not just forum discussions of his work or news announcements of his transactions/auctions. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 19:21, 10 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Swiss School of Higher Education

AngusWOOF, I have added all the necessary sources and sent them for verification, but the article has been in the process of being verified for almost 90 days. What do I need to do to continue the process? Thank you. Vladislav at SSHE (talk) 16:31, 10 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Vladislav at SSHE, I don't see any news coverage of the school. Can you look for newspapers that discuss the school? AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 19:22, 10 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
AngusWOOF, Yes, of course! Here are the publications that discuss the school: report.az 1news.az Dukascopy TV Vladislav at SSHE (talk) 18:21, 14 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Draft:David Rose (Schitt's Creek)

The redirect deleted to make space for the article in the mainspace. Cheers. Sasquatch t|c 21:49, 11 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks Sasquatch! AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 22:22, 11 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Draft:Hallmark_Baby

hello. updated with more sources and waiting review. let me know what else is needed

You still need more external news sources, not press release announcements, regarding the specific subsidiary. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 17:16, 13 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

draft:mindustry

Polyarch (talk ⋅ contribs) 05:40, 13 June 2019 (UTC) Thank you for reading the draft! I understand that the page probably didn't have enough references, i think i submitted it too early. I'll continue to work on it![reply]

Draft:Poitiers Campus, Sciences Po

Hello AngusWOOF. Please revert the name change of the page. This is not a US university. The European norm is to place the campus name, followed by the university name. For example Royal Holloway, University of London or Balliol College, Oxford.

In France, there are numerous IEP (Instituts d'études politiques). The Paris one, called Sciences Po has six decentralised campuses, including the one in Poitiers. The other IEP are often called Sciences Po Lille, or Sciences Po Grenoble for example. Calling the Poitiers Campus, Sciences Po Poitiers will lead to confusion over its relationship with Sciences Po. Thanks for the other edits, by the way.

Update: Just noticed you've changed it back. Thank you very much!

— Preceding unsigned comment added by Oscargarnier (talk • contribs) 17:06, 13 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Oscargarnier, I've reverted the name, but it still needs independent notability. Please find more sources that aren't coming from the school institution itself. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 17:15, 13 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
AngusWOOF, Very well, will do. Thank you for your help. Oscargarnier
AngusWOOF, Hello. I would be grateful if you could review Draft:Poitiers Campus, Sciences Po again. I have added additional external sources. Thanks. Oscargarnier
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