User talk:Jamaistroptard
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 20:12, 6 September 2019 (UTC)
Miwa Matreyek
Minor revisions necessary. This is a great start! You have found some excellent sources. Before moving your work to mainspace, I recommend the following revisions:
- Split the text up into sections. Make sure the lead section is no longer than one paragraph.
- Format the section headings (“Career”) as “Headings.” (Select the text, go to “Paragraph” and change to “Heading.”)
- Fix the error on reference #4 and fix the capitalization.
- When you move your text to mainspace, make sure not to overwrite the text that is already there.
Chronophoto (talk) 17:38, 22 October 2019 (UTC)
Peer Review
Firstly, there’s definitely a lot of great information here, and your sources all seem to be good. The formatting in the introduction section could use a bit of cleaning up - perhaps just keep “Miwa Matreyek is a director, animator, designer, and performer working in Los Angeles, California,” and add the rest to a subsection such as “Early Life.” This would improve the article as a whole and allow it to look more legitimate. As for the “Career,” section, perhaps instead of breaking each bit up into sections, the two beginning parts regarding Matreyek career as a performer could be part of one paragraph and her work as a director could be added to a separate paragraph. The article is on it’s way to being perfected, but these things would allow it to fully appear finished. Southerngothics (talk) 01:44, 4 November 2019 (UTC)