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This is an old revision of this page, as edited by M.hin.ck (talk | contribs) at 02:43, 5 April 2020 (MH comments on draft). The present address (URL) is a permanent link to this revision, which may differ significantly from the current revision.

I have left my feedback on the article draft here.

Overall, great work!

Regards,

Neil Hooloomann Nhooloo1 (talk) 03:21, 4 April 2020 (UTC)nhooloo1[reply]

MH comments

This article is looking much improved! Keep the following in mind as you revise your next draft:

1. Overall, you've done a very nice job with crosslinking with other Wikipedia articles, but go through and make sure you've got all the ones that would be potentially useful for the reader's reference (there is a 1909 shirtwaist strike article, for instance).

2. Make sure that you're citing everything thoroughly, particularly where you refer to her beliefs or those of others. What's the source, for instance, for your statement that 'professionalization depended on their distance from these problems'? If it's one of the ones given at the end of the paragraph, move it up - both here and in your own work, the source for each fact should be easily identifiable.

3. Think about how you could make the article more user-friendly for people doing more research on Dock. Are any of her books available in the public domain, for instance? If so, linking to them could be a useful activity. As you refine the article, use this section and your 'External Links' section as a way to help future researchers.

4. Consider adding another image - if you can find one from her time at Hopkins, this could be a good way of emphasizing the connection, but any image would be a good addition. If you have any copyright questions, don't hesitate to email me!

Also, please post a comment to the Talk page of the original article explaining that you're drafting a new version of this article for a WikiEducation class, providing a short summary of the changes you've made (dividing it into sections, adding information, etc.) so that when you begin moving this across in a couple of weeks, it won't come as a surprise.

I also see that one of your peer reviews hasn't been completed yet; if you would like some more edits, just email me and I'll provide a marked-up copy. Read the one you have and continue to revise in the sandbox (all your old drafts are saved automatically). Keep up the good work!

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