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Article Evaluation: 22Kill

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Link to Talk page: Talk:22Kill (I added the section titled "More Information")

  1. Is everything in the article relevant to the article topic? Is there anything that distracted you? Yes everything is relevant, but the brevity and lack of information throughout the article concerns me.
  2. Is the article neutral? Are there any claims, or frames, that appear heavily biased toward a particular position? The article seems neutral to me. Not heavily biased toward a political/social agenda.
  3. Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented? No.
  4. Check a few citations. Do the links work? Does the source support the claims in the article? Yes. I checked. All the links work, and the sources support the claims in the article.
  5. Is each fact referenced with an appropriate, reliable reference? Where does the information come from? Are these neutral sources? If biased, is that bias noted? Yes. References are located at the bottom of the Wikipedia page. Most of the references are links to news articles, which are typically reliable and neutral sources presented in an unbiased manner.
  6. Is any information out of date? Is anything missing that could be added? More history, program explanations, and background information about the work of 22Kill could be added. Also, information about the 22 Pushup Challenge social movement is missing.
  7. Check out the Talk page of the article. What kinds of conversations, if any, are going on behind the scenes about how to represent this topic? The talk page has been edited by classmates saying the the entire article should be much more developed. The article is a solid starting foundation, but it could be expanded so much more.
  8. How is the article rated? Is it a part of any WikiProjects? It is a stub.
  9. How does the way Wikipedia discusses this topic differ from the way we've talked about it in class? In class, we discussed that not many people were familiar with the #22ADay movement and that the #22ADay movement is leaderless. The 22Kill article mentions that the 22 Pushup Challenge went viral, but it does not address any specific people as leaders associated with 22Kill.

Potential Article Contributions: 22Kill

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Link to article: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/22Kill

The 22Kill article could be improved by adding more information to the history section and including additional sections with information about the programs that 22Kill is involved with. It might be beneficial to include a section about the statistics of 22Kill (Ex: approximately how many families the organization has helped and how much money was raised). More information could also be added about the impact that the 22 Pushup Challenge social movement has had on public awareness about military veteran suicide rates.

Potential Article Contributions: 22 Pushup Challenge

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Link to article: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/22_Pushup_Challenge

There is great context in the "Origin" section of the 22 Pushup Challenge article; however even more information could be added. More specifically, more background information could be included about Andrew K. Nguyen and the veteran organizations that he is involved with. The "Initial Success" section could either be renamed to "Success" and include more information about the notable figures/organizations that have participated in the 22 Pushup Challenge and about the widespread news coverage since the start of this social movement.

Response to user Parouz:

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Thank you for your in depth evaluation of our article and additions. Lead: This is a great point, while our hashtag is #22ADay, cited figures as in this article often range in values around 22. We will absolutely implement an explanation for this difference in values. Content /Organization: We appreciate the positive feedback in this section and will next focus our attention on adding to additional sections of the article. This particular critique has been mentioned previously and wit that will become our main focus. TONE/BALANCE/NEUTRAL PERSPECTIVE: We will be going back through the article and our additions to address this. The specific examples you gave are incredibly helpful and will help us identify potentially biased language. This also will be a top priority as we move forward. SOURCES: For the future of our additions we will continue to add more diverse sources to help bolster the content of the page. MULTI-MEDIA: We will be adding the caption to the photo on the page and our currently seeking media to add as you had mentioned to help increase the impact of the content. CONCLUDING THOUGHTS: With your evaluation we and the other evaluations of our article it is clear that we need to turn our attention to adding to other sections within the article and address some of the language used. These evaluations will help us to continue to improve our article.