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A fact from Albert P. Halfhill appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the Did you know column on 7 June 2017 (check views). The text of the entry was as follows:
Did you know... that Albert P. Halfhill is considered the father of the tuna packing industry and was the first to use the slogan "chicken of the sea" as a sales gimmick?
This article was copy edited by Twofingered Typist, a member of the Guild of Copy Editors, on September 22, 2020.Guild of Copy EditorsWikipedia:WikiProject Guild of Copy EditorsTemplate:WikiProject Guild of Copy EditorsGuild of Copy Editors
"He was a partner with August Decker for a few years in a dry goods business in St. Mary's." - how many years exactly?
Done No sources say.
"He then moved to Van Wert, Ohio. There, in 1875, he purchased a grocery store that he operated with Lester Paterson." - considering merging these two sentences together
Done
"like olive or cottonseed oil." - such as
Done
"Albacore was unattractive and called the "hog of the sea"[1]" - a comma is missing between "sea" and the citation
Done
"called the "hog of the sea" - called by whom?
Done
"with a texture like chicken.[14][2][15]" - refs in numerical order please
Done
" he sold 250 cases (packaged in three-quarter pound cans) of cooked" - cases packaged in 3⁄4 pound cans of cooked
Done
"to a grocery store owner in Los Angeles named H. Jevne.[19] Jevne's employees and customers" - try not to start the beginning of the following sentence like this
Done
"Halfhill used the tagline "chicken of the sea" to promote sales,[20][14][21]" - refs in numerical order please
Done
"The product did not sell well at first," - for what reason?
Done
"It became a successful seller in New York before doing so in California." - it was in California.
Done
"for gathering tuna 200 miles out" - the convert template will need to be used on the text in bold
Done
Later life
"Halfhill is considered the father of the tuna-packing industry." - considered by whom?
Done
"Captain Halfhill (an honorary title bestowed on him by his competitors) retired in 1922." - the text in bold doesn't need to be in parentheses
Done
"His sons Charles and Harry took over the operations" - business
Done
"which then sold about 200,000 cases of tuna," - subsequently
Done
"Halfhill died at the age of 76 on May 7, 1924." - where did he die and what from?
Done
Citations
All mentions of newspapers.com should begin with a capital letter
Done
The name of reference 4's work should be fully wikilinked
Done
Reference 18's page number is B3 not 11
Done
Reference 20 contains the error "Smith 2012, pp. 277ndash;28." which needs to be fixed
b (citations to reliable sources): 
Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 21:36, 6 October 2020 (UTC)
Working --Doug Coldwell (talk) 17:12, 6 October 2020 (UTC)