User talk:Noah.hirshorn/sandbox

Nice write up Noah. Here my comments:

Homogenous section
- First sentence - I think you mean ‘phase’ instead of ‘face’; correct?
- Skip the detail regards the collisions below -35C and keep it simple.
I am torn on whether the breakout of the different nuclei is too detailed for a snowflake page. It almost deserves it’s own page as it is a nice overview for that alone.

I second Joayer's comments; good write up Noah - great amount of research!

I found a few quick sentence edits:
- Missing a word in 3rd sentence of Heterogeneous section, "largely dependent [on?/upon?]..."
- Mineral dust section -- consider removing "another" in the first sentence. While you mention in the heterogeneous section the preferred characteristics of an ice nuclei, this is the first time you list a specific type.
- Last sentence in Biological Aerosols you have double between "between between".
Additional thoughts
- The heading differences between the Heterogeneous Nucleation section and your examples of aerosols is likely adequate but maybe further clarifying that that list refers to various examples of nuclei for heterogenous nucleation may be helpful (again, maybe not necessary but a thought).
- Lastly, in the heterogeneous section, the last sentence states "specific location of ice nucleation" does location refer to altitude? May be worth a clarification there.
- Enjoyed the write up, and great use of hyperlinks throughout!

I think you do a really good job at covering all the different ice nuclei

In the first paragraph you write "larger sized droplets nucleate into ice crystals easier than smaller particle", should it be "smaller particle" or "smaller sized droplet"? If it's supposed to be "smaller particle" maybe saying smaller ice nuclei would be better.
second paragraph: clarify that it's two "water" particles. It's hard to tell if you're talking about aerosols or water nucleating together
"biological aerosols an aerosol type that can trigger ice nucleation at relatively warm temperatures comparably to other aerosol types": this may leave the reader confused thinking "why are you saying it's better when the previous aerosol, mineral dust, had a warmer nucleating temp?"
otherwise, I like how your writeup is straight to the point, good for a wiki article

Overall I think the article is very clear and written at a level appropriate for the audience which is good. Here are a few suggestions that I have:

I think it may be helpful to say whether homogenous and heterogenous nucleation can occur simultaneously within a particular cloud or area
It may be useful to lead into the section where you talk about the type of aerosols by adding a "types of aerosols" header or something along those lines
You talk about anthropogenic aerosols so it may be useful to list some examples