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Reviewer: Kosack (talk · contribs) 09:03, 15 December 2019 (UTC)[reply]


I'll take a look at this one, will post review as soon as possible. Kosack (talk) 09:03, 15 December 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Initial review

Infobox

  • Not a major issue, but is there a reason you have two refs for his full name even though there doesn't appear to be any contradictions?
Removed one.--EchetusXe 13:12, 16 December 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • Source for his height?
I cannot find one.--EchetusXe 13:12, 16 December 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • Prescot Cables are listed as a youth team but in the text it states he began his senior career with the side?
Done.--EchetusXe 13:12, 16 December 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

  • Linking Chinese but not English seems rather unnecessary. Nationalities are generally considered an WP:OVERLINK.
Done.--EchetusXe 13:12, 16 December 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • "and then was moved on to Luton Town", a little overlong perhaps. Given the later part of the sentence gives a timeframe, I don't think we need both then and was together. Reads a little clunkily I would say.
Done.--EchetusXe 13:12, 16 December 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • Any reason Djurgården aren't linked?
Done.--EchetusXe 13:12, 16 December 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Early and personal life

  • Our own article on laundry would suggest that the British English wording would support laundrette rather than laundry?
Done.--EchetusXe 13:12, 16 December 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Stoke City

  • The final part of this section appears unreferenced. Paragraphs shouldn't really end without a source.
Done.--EchetusXe 13:12, 16 December 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • No need to link Poland.
Done.--EchetusXe 13:12, 16 December 2019 (UTC)[reply]

World War II

  • Same as above with the first paragraph here.
Done.--EchetusXe 13:12, 16 December 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • Add the abbreviation (RAF) after Royal Air Force to explain future uses of the shortened term.
Done.--EchetusXe 13:12, 16 December 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • "pathological dislike of star players", do we know who made this quote? It seems a little like its being stated as fact rather than an opinion.
I've changed the sentence.--EchetusXe 13:12, 16 December 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Luton Town

  • The second half of the paragraph appears unsourced.
Done.--EchetusXe 23:54, 16 December 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Chelmsford City

  • "Soo signed with Chelmsford City directly from Luton", is directly needed here?
Done.--EchetusXe 23:54, 16 December 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Kidderminster Harriers made of a bid of £1,000", doesn't quite work.
Changed.--EchetusXe 23:54, 16 December 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • "City finished in fourth-place position", position isn't really necessary here, fourth-place is perfectly explanatory I would say.
Done.--EchetusXe 23:54, 16 December 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • Again, could do with a ref for the end of the section.
Done. Weird habit I developed.--EchetusXe 23:54, 16 December 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Managerial statistics

  • As obvious as it is, the table could do with a total.
Done.--EchetusXe 23:54, 16 December 2019 (UTC)[reply]

References

  • Refs 1 and 2 appear to have expired.
Changed.--EchetusXe 23:54, 16 December 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • Ref 23 has an available author.
Done.--EchetusXe 23:54, 16 December 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • Ref 24 needs filling out, publisher, accessdate etc. Is the site a reliable source as well?
Done. Yes it is.--EchetusXe 23:54, 16 December 2019 (UTC)[reply]
This ref doesn't appear to have changed? Kosack (talk) 06:57, 17 December 2019 (UTC)[reply]
I've changed the source now.--EchetusXe 23:52, 23 December 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • Refs 44 and 50 require an accessdate.
Done.--EchetusXe 23:54, 16 December 2019 (UTC)[reply]
No change made to 44 (now 48)? Kosack (talk) 06:57, 17 December 2019 (UTC)[reply]
I've removed that line now, I can't access the source to check it.--EchetusXe 23:52, 23 December 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • Ref 51 appears to have expired (the joy of FIFA's ever moving web pages).
Seems fine?.--EchetusXe 23:54, 16 December 2019 (UTC)[reply]
It's not working for me still, I'll try it from a desktop when I get to work later, see if that makes a difference. Kosack (talk) 06:57, 17 December 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Working for me from a desktop, seems the issue is just with mobile. Kosack (talk) 13:21, 17 December 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • Ref 54 needs a publisher and the title should avoid using WP:ALLCAPS.
Done.--EchetusXe 23:54, 16 December 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Overall, this is a high quality piece of work. A few minor issues to address, so placed on hold for now. Kosack (talk) 14:57, 15 December 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Okay I've acted on those, thanks very much for the review!--EchetusXe 23:54, 16 December 2019 (UTC)[reply]
@EchetusXe: Add a ping incase you missed my follow up comments on the refs. Kosack (talk) 08:03, 22 December 2019 (UTC)[reply]
@Kosack: Okay thanks.--EchetusXe 23:52, 23 December 2019 (UTC)[reply]
@EchetusXe: The only thing I would add is that the height should really be removed if we have no source for it. I can't find any anything to support this in a search so it seems rather unfounded. Other than that, I'll be happy to promote this. Kosack (talk) 19:45, 28 December 2019 (UTC)[reply]
@Kosack: Okay excellent, I've removed the height. Thanks for your work.--EchetusXe 17:12, 29 December 2019 (UTC)[reply]
No worries, well done on the article. I'm happy this meets the relevant GA criteria. Promoting. Kosack (talk) 07:40, 30 December 2019 (UTC)[reply]
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