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User:Chautrran/Occupational safety and health/Blueberry5678 Peer Review

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General info

Whose work are you reviewing?

Chautrran

Link to draft you're reviewing
https://w.wiki/CRiH
Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
https://w.wiki/9RSt

Evaluate the drafted changes

Content: I like how you added specific information about the causes for mental health issues in tipped wage workers. Your copy edits make the article more digestible, good job.

Tone & Balance: Your content is very good, but I feel your tone could be a bit more impartial.

Sources & References: Your sources are thorough, current, and accurately cited. However, there are some places in your reference list that read "{{Cite Journal}}" and I am not sure if that is intentional.

Organization: Good organization, I like how you are expanding the tertiary sector content since it only previously had one example about the tertiary sector.

Overall Impressions: You have added a great deal of good information and content to this article, but I feel you can work on making the tone more neutral and have less of an "essay tone". Overall, amazing work!