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Hard Justice (2008)

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I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to make it a GA. Now I know the Reception isn't finished, the attendance, and the times are not done. Pro wrestling history still has not placed up the results. I just want to fix all the small stuff before the DVD is released in October. I'm just trying to get stuff I have on the ppv list finished before Bound for Glory IV starts being hyped. So I want to know if the references are fine, if everything is sourced that needs to be sourced, if it reads well, really just everything that is needed for GA standards. Thanks, WillC 05:14, 16 September 2008 (UTC)

Resolved comments from ThinkBlue

Lead

ThinkBlue's comments

• Lead:
  • This sentence ----> "The first was between Team 3D (Brother Ray and Brother Devon), and Christian Cage and Rhino in a New Jersey Street", has a lot of "and" repetitions.
• Background:
  • The use of the brackets are only for tag teams and the use for it in Sharmell's name needs to be fixed.
  • This sentence ---> "This was followed by Sting hitting Joe in the back and the gut with a baseball bat", I don't think the mention of "gut" is important.
  • Angle and AJ Styles feud; "When the darkness was lifted", sounds off, may need to be reworded.
    • What do you think?
• Preliminary matches:
  • This ---> "The match was mainly fast paced", sounds like POV.
    • I just removed it. It doesn't really help.
  • "Most of the match was dominated by Beer Money, Inc as they weakened the injured Homicide", how did they weaken Homicide?
    • How does it sound now?
  • Hmm ---> "When Rhino and Ray impacted with the table it did not break", "impacted"?
    • Any better?
  • "until Abyss (Chris Parks) came to Cage's and Rhino's rescue", "rescue" ---> "aid".
• Main event matches: Angle and AJ Styles, damn that's long.;)
  • "The referee then began his count", "his" ---> "the".
  • "Angle went to perform some type of suplex", "some type"?
    • How about now?
  • "who has widely known to have broken his neck multiple times in the past" ---> "who has been widely known to conjure multiple neck injuries".
  • "While Kevin Nash asked him why he just attacked Styles", is it important to include?
    • Well I feel it is worth noting since TNA aired special footage between Sting and Nash later on Impact that week after Sting's attack on AJ.

Here are my comments. --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 17:41, 19 September 2008 (UTC)

Okay, thanks. How does it look now?--WillC 07:20, 21 September 2008 (UTC)

Looks good. --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 21:26, 24 September 2008 (UTC)