User talk:Joannaberg4/sandbox

Bacteriotherapy

Overall, I like your article and how it was divided by types of bacteriotherapy. However, your lead seems to have diverged slightly at the end from the focus of bacteriotherapy. You have an additional entire paragraph that talks about FMT, when since it's only a type of bacteriotherapy, I think you should just mention it in your lead and expand upon it as you do in your following sub-section. For your lead, all you need is a general explanation of what bacteriotherapy is and the different types. I like that you included the medical uses for FMT and probiotics, but perhaps you can do the same for synbiotics. That section seems a little sparse. As a whole though, I think your article contains a good amount of information and has good organization. If you can divide it so the information would be easier to process than in just paragraphs, that would be nice. However, it is not completely necessary. Just some suggestions. Exu12 (talk) 19:05, 19 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Bacteriotherapy

1. I thought the introduction gave a good overview. Though, I think you explain too much. This also goes for the rest of the article, but its easy to lose sight of the focus of this article. 2. I think you should be more consistent in your headings and organization. For example, separating mental illnesses, listing medical uses, describing administration differ between the subtypes throughout your article. Also, you don't compare bacteriotherapy to any other therapy or risks of using bacteriotherapy. Otherwise, tone was okay. 3. Citations seemed good, you had a good amount of information here. 4. Again, there are some notable gaps. This article can also over explain irrelevant topics. Use the links to your advantage.

-Shawn Mozeika — Preceding unsigned comment added by ShawnMozeika (talk • contribs) 19:21, 21 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Nathan Louis Berg

@Joannaberg4: That content was such egregious and unambiguous advertising and promotion that it got tagged {{db-spam}} for speedy deletion per WP:CSD#G11. It was evident in the page history that you'd worked in other subject areas, and I didn't know what, if any of it, you intended to keep, so I moved it back here to user sandbox space and removed the spam and the deletion tag.

Please do not re-add that spam: this is an encyclopedia, not a gourmet food magazine or wherever else such blatant and unapologetic hyping will be found. If you do, the page will probably be deleted. – Athaenara ✉ 11:57, 24 February 2019 (UTC)[reply]