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The lede as it stands is not great, to put it bluntly. Per MOS:INTRO, the lede/lead should be a snapshot of the article, and per MOS:LEADCITE, information in the lead should also be found in the body. A significant amount of space right now is dedicated to nicknames that are not mentioned in the body.
Per MOS:POSTABBR, postal codes should be avoided, so "PA" and "MA" should become "Pennsylvania" and "Massachusetts", respectively, and there's no need to put U.S. after each
Regarding children in infoboxes, they should be listed by number and only named if one or more are relevant; the names can still be listed in the body
Add "(NTWU)" after the first instance of "National Textile Workers Union" and then only refer to it by its acronym from there on out
Per the source, she was not the first American woman to hold that specific post, but the first to hold any such position in any labor union (which makes sense, if the NTWU was just American workers, that "American" wouldn't need to be specified)
"Burlak married fellow labor activist Arthur E. Timpson in 1939 and gave birth to two children, Kathryn Anne Timpson Wright (b. 1943) and William Michael Timpson (b. 1946)." → "Burlak married fellow labor activist Arthur E. Timpson in 1939. The couple had two children, Kathryn Anne Timpson Wright (b. 1943) and William Michael Timpson (b. 1946)."
"She died July 9, 2002 in" → "She died on July 9, 2002, in" per MOS:DATECOMMA
If this is (as it appears to be) a work that covers Burlak's life but isn't directly referenced, then it should be placed between "References" and "External links" and should be titled "Further reading"
@GhostRiver: Hello! Thank you so much for taking the time to review my article. I believe I have made the changes you pointed out, and the lede isn't the best but I think it's more in the proper style. Please let me know what else I can do! Dkrieger20 (talk) 17:59, 26 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]
I've made a couple of my own MOS fixes and some rewordings for clarity, but I think that this one is ready to go! Good job, and thank you for addressing my comments! — GhostRiver04:24, 28 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]
